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发表于 2008-7-28 10:31:08 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

TOPIC: ARGUMENT142 - The article entitled 'Eating Iron' in last month's issue of Eating for Health reported that a recent study found a correlation between high levels of iron in the diet and an increased risk of heart disease. Further, it is well established that there is a link between large amounts of red meat in the diet and heart disease, and red meat is high in iron. On the basis of the study and the well-established link between red meat and heart disease, we can conclude that the correlation between high iron levels and heart disease, then, is most probably a function of the correlation between red meat and heart disease.
WORDS: 389 TIME: 00:30:00 DATE: 2008-7-27 AM 10:50:13

In the above argument, the speaker draws the conclusion that there is a certain correlation between red meat and heart disease. To support this assertion, the speaker cites the evidence that the high iron level can affect heart disease, and red meat contains is high in iron. The speaker fails to deduce the conclusion from the wrong correlation between red meat and heart disease. And this conclusion can not stands reexamination.

Foremost, the speaker premise that high levels of iron in diet can contribute to the increased risk of heart disease. To support this assertion, a report on the 'Eating Iron' about the correlation between high levels of iron and heart disease has been cited. There are two obvious fallacies in this report, first, we even do not know who draw this assertion, if some individual or unnamed little constitute conduct this research without correct and comprehensive research, then the result is unbelievable. Second, in the report, the speaker only say there is a correlation between iron and heart disease, but does not show that the heart disease only or mainly caused by high iron, it if entirely possible that some other factors can result in heart disease. Third, the report does not say this conclusion is representative, we can not exclude this report is mainly point to old people or weak people who are easily get heart disease. So above three reasons we can not trust the high level is associated with heart disease in the report.

In addition, even if the high levels of iron is linked to the heart disease, the speaker next assertion that the red meat is relative to the heart disease. In his statement, it is true that red meat is high iron, but the arguer fails to say that this part of iron can be absorbed completely by people. If this assumption can not be substantiated, then we can also not trust the speaker's argument.

Summing up, in this argument, the speaker does not give us a clearly and convinced evidence, all he says is based on his own assumption. If he wants to show that the red meat is really relative to the heart disease, he should show the research result that the iron in the red meat can be absorb by human, and this high level of iron can result in heart disease.

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发表于 2008-7-28 22:35:02 |只看该作者

【凤于九天作文小组第6次作业】Argument142

TOPIC: ARGUMENT142 - The article entitled 'Eating Iron' in last month's issue of Eating for Health reported that a recent study found a correlation between high levels of iron in the diet and an increased risk of heart disease. Further, it is well established that there is a link between large amounts of red meat in the diet and heart disease, and red meat is high in iron. On the basis of the study and the well-established link between red meat and heart disease, we can conclude that the correlation between high iron levels and heart disease, then, is most probably a function of the correlation between red meat and heart disease.
WORDS: 389 TIME: 00:30:00 DATE: 2008-7-27 AM 10:50:13

In the above argument, the speaker draws the conclusion that there is a certain correlation between red meat and heart disease. To support this assertion, the speaker cites the evidence that the high iron level can affect heart disease, and red meat contains is high in iron. The speaker fails to deduce the conclusion from the wrong correlation between red meat and heart disease. And this conclusion can not stands(去掉） reexamination.

Foremost, the speaker premise that high levels of iron in diet can contribute to the increased risk of heart disease. To support this assertion, a report on the 'Eating Iron' about the correlation between high levels of iron and heart disease has been cited. There are two obvious fallacies in this report, first, we even do not know who draw this assertion, if some individual or unnamed little constitute conduct this research without correct and comprehensive research, then the result is unbelievable. Second, in the report, the speaker only say there is a correlation between iron and heart disease, but does not show that the heart disease only or mainly caused by high iron, it if entirely possible that some other factors can result in heart disease. Third, the report does not say this conclusion is representative, we can not exclude this report is mainly point to old people or weak people who are easily get heart disease. So above three reasons we can not trust the high level is associated with heart disease in the report.

In addition, even if the high levels of iron is linked to the heart disease, the speaker next assertion that the red meat is relative to the heart disease. In his statement, it is true that red meat is high iron, but the arguer fails to say that this part of iron can be absorbed completely by people. If this assumption can not be substantiated, then we can also not trust the speaker's argument.

Summing up, in this argument, the speaker does not give us a clearly and convinced evidence, all he says is based on his own assumption. If he wants to show that the red meat is really relative to the heart disease, he should show the research result that the iron in the red meat can be absorb by human, and this high level of iron can result in heart disease.

这个题目本身很麻烦，抓住2点，前提错误，推导不合理，基本上也没什么问题了

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