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发表于 2009-2-7 18:59:31 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

212 "If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable.

People all heard of a adage that "All roads lead to Rome".It is true that many means can be taken to attain a goal. So,there is a extreme saying that any means taken to attain a worthy goal is justifiable. However, in my opinion, a goal is indeed useful for us, only the rewarding and legitimate means can be accepted.

In this era of drastic and cruel competition, having a goal is such a beneficial  thing that the goal  can inspire us to study and work hard to catch the success.We would actively set a series of schedule to struggle for the goals. In addition, different kinds of means ,of which including correct ones as well as the false, would be taken to attain the goals. Only the correct means would effectively and continuously make us have success.For example, one of my friend Lily have learned to play three musical instruments of guitar,piano and violin in order to be prominent in her singing class.Her mean was so correct that she finally reached her purpose. That is to say, having some beneficial means contribute us to grow and improve in a healthy and positive way.

However,there are plenty of methods which seem to be more attractive and useful. Compareing with other traditonal means,people would get success much easiler and faster by them. To the first, some of those means would be harmful for other people's health or benefits such as unfair competition by brinbing the referee, publishing other's privacy to be famous, and so on . In my university, there is a professor who never accepts female students to study with him for the purpose of quickening the research's speed, bucause of his unwarranted prejudice that women have lower working efficiency than men.His mean deprives the women's right of studying with him. In today's harmonious society, we can not found our happyness on other's pain,even change other's lives into our success. Therefore, we should take the correct means which are even difficult for us to attain our goals.

Secondly, some people work for goals with the methods that are out of moral standard and even illegal. Such serious phemomena generally exist in all the fields . In area of politics,some countries, some leaders  cruelly kill the persons who anti their leadship .In area of economic,the president of Enron lied in the financial reports in order to develop his company. In area of arts, some famous artists copy other's work to make a progress.In these cases, I really want to know whether they would feel happy and secure with the success.I believe those illegal jobs will be exposed in future and they will be away from their goals. Consequently, the wrong methods can not be regarded as a justifiable way to catch goals.

To sum up, although the viable means to succeed  is hundreds , we should deeply analysis about which is the best and rightest on for us even for society. No matter how important and urgent the goals are , do not choose a wrong mean which would lead to our remorse.

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发表于 2009-2-7 22:10:44 |只看该作者

People all heard of a adage that "All roads lead to Rome". It is true that many means can be taken to attain a goal. So, there is a extreme saying that any means taken to attain a worthy goal is justifiable. However, in my opinion, a goal is indeed useful for us, only the rewarding and legitimate means can be accepted.
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In this era of drastic and cruel competition, having a goal is such a beneficial  thing that the goal  can inspire us to study and work hard to catch the success. We would actively set a series of schedule to struggle for the goals. In addition, different kinds of means, of which including correct ones as well as the false, would be taken to attain the goals. Only the correct means would effectively and continuously make us have success. For example, one of my friend Lily have learned to play three musical instruments of guitar, piano and violin in order to be prominent in her singing class .Her mean was so correct that she finally reached her purpose. That is to say, having some beneficial means contribute us to grow and improve in a healthy and positive way.
However, there are plenty of methods which seem to be more attractive and useful. Comparing with other traditional means, people would get success much easier and faster by them. To the first, some of those means would be harmful for other people's health or benefits such as unfair competition by bribing the referee, publishing other's privacy to be famous, and so on . In my university, there is a professor who never accepts female students to study with him for the purpose of quickening the research's speed, because of his unwarranted prejudice that women have lower working efficiency than men. His mean deprives the women's right of studying with him. In today's harmonious society, we can not found our happiness on other's pain, even change other's lives into our success. Therefore, we should take the correct means which are even difficult for us to attain our goals.
二三两段只是用大量的论述和例子说明的实现目标有不同的手段，但题目的核心是是否可以这样。这两段内只有寥寥的一点内容是对不同的方法进行评价。
Secondly, some people work for goals with the methods that are out of moral standard and even illegal. Such serious phenomena generally exist in all the fields. In area of politics, some countries, some leaders  cruelly kill the persons who anti their leadership .In area of economic, the president of Enron lied in the financial reports in order to develop his company. In area of arts, some famous artists copy other's work to make a progress.（你是说临摹？那个是正常的学习方法啊） In these cases, I really want to know whether they would feel happy and secure with the success. I believe those illegal jobs will be exposed in future and they will be away from their goals. Consequently, the wrong methods can not be regarded as a justifiable way to catch goals.
这段说用。。。的方法的人的自身感受，这个只是影响到个人，影响面不大，不太有说服力
To sum up, although the viable means to succeed  is hundreds , we should deeply analysis about which is the best and rightist on for us even for society. No matter how important and urgent the goals are , do not choose a wrong mean which would lead to our remorse.

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