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发表于 2009-3-15 17:24:34 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

The writer makes a conclusion that most employees should not fear to be fired according to a survey given by the writer. However, the writer makes great flaws to overlook the accuracy of the survey by the following analysis.
To begin with, the writer cites a recent study that most companies are likely to make new hires in the following years and fewer companies will lay off employees, and it is evident to show that the writer wants to take advantage of this to induce people to believe it may less dismission happening in the coming years. In the first place, it is a possible trend but can not be carried out, moreover, the writer do not tell us how the survey did, whether in large scale or in randomly. Thus, the survey is groundless in itself, let alone to make others believe. In the second place, the writer uses the majority and fewer to mislead us to believe his conclusion, but he overlooks that the effective spectrum is the key to the accuracy of data. The writer does not tell the total numbers and what companies during making the survey. If the numbers is insufficient enough as well choose some infamous companies, a majority of companies and fewer companies can do nothing with the introduction of whether will be fired in the coming years, for the numbers may only means small part companies' intentions rather than the most ones. Thus, the survey offered by the writer can not demonstrate his views for the great flaws existing in the survey.
Secondly, the writer considers that the more proliferation of programs and of workshops designed to improve job-finding skill, the more increase of the rate of reemployment after lying off will be. The fact may be the opposite, it can be counterproductive for people to hunt for jobs because they may offer similar answers during the interview, and as a result, the effects is not provide more opportunities but loose positions which they may get if they do not go to those so called workshops and programs. Furthermore, even if the programs and workshops can make people improve their job-finding skills, it should consider others aspects such as the depression economy nationwide. Whether can be easily reemployed for those people during the national economical trouble no matter how good skills the employees have. In short, taking these possibilities into consideration, the writer hasty prove the conclusions concentrating on improve the employees’ skills.
To sum up, the arguer fails to substantiate his claim because he neglects the truth reason that whether will be fired for employees in the coming years. To make the argument more convincing, the writer would have to provide more information about the economy conditions over the nation and what is the most important qualities to employees required by companies and so on, which will support the writer’s point. Therefore, if the argument had included the given factors, it would be thoroughly accepted.