ISSUE30 【dies in flames】 by winning1030 [复制链接]

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发表于 2009-4-8 13:39:56 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

30"The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that everyone has more leisure time."

In all ages, the eternal theme for human is the pursuit of more convenient and abundant material life. Technology, which enriches human’s knowledge and improves mankind's ability, provides probabilities to fulfill desires of people for different purposes and thus realizes the dream. However, only can this ideal life be reached in harmony with nature. Thus, the primary goal of technological advancement should be to create better living standards on the premise of the harmony between human and nature.

To increase people's efficiency indeed can provide mankind with more convenient and abundant material life. Throughout the history, the enhancement of effienciency, to a large extent, does contribute to the development of human society with the improvement of quality of life. Take the revolution of transportation for example. Long ago, human had to visit each other to communicate by foot when the conception of transportation hadn't been created. At that time, the undeveloped traffic served as tremendous obstacle to conveyance of information with the cost of a mass of time and physical strength. Later with technological advancement, carriage and bycicle were invented in succession, which meliorated the inconvenient communication. It was in 1766 that the first steam engine, which started the Industrial Revolution and brought a qualitative leap in the living standard of human being, was invited by Watt. As technology advances constantly, plane which was first invented in 1903, regarded as the most efficient transportation, has largely shorten the time and energy of transmission of messages. For instance, from Tibet in China to New York, the cost of time could be reduced from even several years in the past on foot with hardship to only a snooze in a comfortable plane. Thus, we can see that greater efficiency makes for high quality of life.

However, the increase of efficiency doesn't guarantee everyone more leisure time despite a lot of advantages it brings. On the one hand, although high efficiency save human an enormous amount of time, human doesn't necessarily enjoy the saved time as leisure time, and instead, people probablely devote the saved time to gaining more benefit grounding on that mankind's nature is to seek for maximization of interest. So in a given time, even though there is pleny of time left, people may prefer to work in order to create extra value. The

fast tempo of modern life in this fiercely competitive era when people's leisure time seem to be much less than that of age of agriculture although efficiency has been raised more than hundreds of times, is an obvious example to support, with the reason that people have to avoid being eliminated so that they chose to sacrifice their leisure time to work and learn to maintain their competitiveness. On the other hand, human has to make up for the serious outcome with time, money and energy when high efficiency blindly is pursued, which also means diminishment of leisure time. Regardless of the significance of harmony between nature and human, we are confronted with numbers of ecological pollution, such as atmospheric pollution, water pollution and soil contamination, which are caused directly by human's excessively eager desire to achieve rapid economical growth based on high efficiency. Unreasonable use of ecological resources, such as destruction of forest caused by overgrazing and providing additional cropland, makes people now are reaping the consequences of global warming and so on so that we have to take much time to protect our earth our survival must depend on. Therefore, the argument that to increase people's efficiency can bring everyone more leisure time is weakened.

In addition, high efficiency can't meet all the needs in diverse fields in society if the primary goal of technological advancement is to increase people's efficiency. In some areas, such as medicine, effective and safe treatment method, rather than efficiency is more emphasized because if no effective and safe cure can be found, let alone its efficiency to contribute to patients' convalescence. Consequently, albeit efficiency is also an important factor to consider, effective and safe cure is a necessary precondition which makes efficiency inferior. Clearly, high efficiency as the primary goal of technological advancement is too narrow to generalize the demands in all aspects.

As a result, the primary goal of technological advancement, in my viewpoint, is to create better living standards for people, in which more leisure time is involved, on the premise of the harmony between human and nature while to increase people's efficiency is just one way to reach the goal. It must be pointed out that maintenance of harmony is the guaranty of human's comfortable life, although the ultimate aim for mankind is the maximization of self interest. On condition that human are faced with the disruption of ecological balance, we can't go any further and the happy life would not last long. The end, if abuse of technology is made, could only be rattrap for human beings. Realizing the insightful principle, every country now are trying to control the nuclear weapons and call on people over the world to protect the earth. It can be seen that to create better living standards for people and maintenance of harmony between human and nature are inseparable as the primary goal of technological advancement.

In conclusion, the development of human society must follow law of nature. The pursuit of better quality of life should be combined with the premise of the harmony between human and nature as the primary goal of technological advancement.

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发表于 2009-4-15 00:28:17 |只看该作者

首先鼓掌一下~^^整体真的挺不错的，尤其是语言和句法。学习学习~不过就是文章大部分内容基本都在说科技与环境的关系。而“环境”作为一个关键词，在题目中并没有出现。因此一定要花一些笔墨为它们建立联系啊^^还有就是个人觉得第一段最好提一下leisure time，毕竟人家辛辛苦苦在题目里露了个脸，我们直接把人家忽略了也不合适^^整体真的挺不错~学习了^^有什么问题我们再探讨啊winning亲~

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发表于 2009-4-15 01:11:05 |只看该作者

3# cjlu
cjlu,亲，改得好认真哦~~感动捏~~~issue30确实也是我三篇里比较满意的一篇，其他2篇就很垃圾了。。。
不过，和环境的关系其实我本来没想到的，看了米饭的BS很受启发，所以就也写了这个主题。看来，BS不得不做啊，亲，要是不嫌弃，有空的时候我们也BS下哈~~~
关于盲目追求高效率会导致闲暇时间的减少时因为，我们为了快速的经济发展，就没有考虑自然的负荷而过度用自然资源，导致了一系列的灾难，而为了人类的生存，我们不得不把投入时间来弥补我们造成的伤害，那么，闲暇时间也因此缩减了。
我在第一段没有谈LT，是因为题目的说,primary goal of advancement 是e，lt是e随之而来的，我认为题目的中心在前面，所以就没有提。你说的我会好好考虑的，其实我也很迷糊要不要说下，但我最后一段又说。
因为我把题目的should换成了我认为的should，即和谐发展才是目标，我觉得就已经是和题目的联系了。我对题目之前绕到一个错误的死胡同里了，不知道亲有没有这个问题，我把题目给你分析下吧。TA的主要目标是E，而伴随E提高就有lt。我之前把so that理解成了in order to，所以错误的理解成了lt才是ad的最终目标。亲，不知道你有这个问题不，还是给你提醒下吧~~~
亲，其实偶水平还是很so so的说，思路打不开，如果不bs，估计会被题目郁闷死。。。单词也是边写边查的。
亲哈，你一篇作文多长时间啊，我很没脸的说，起码4小时。。。

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