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1
同意
确实是艺术家gives社会一些蕴含着lasting value 的 something
在这个选择上
艺术家绝对压倒评论家
2 艺术家gives our society something at first
whether it’s of lasting value or not

这些give 的东西
有的可能没有lasting
value，有的可能以后会发现有lasting value, 有的可能永远也不会有lasting value.
但是critic 永远也不会gives society something of lasting value。Lasting value 的源泉是艺术家
而非评论家
3
评论家的作用在于。。。。
4 总结从lasting value 的角度去考虑，答案理所应当的偏向艺术家这一边但是一个不应该忽视的看法是
评论家并非一无是处。。。

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This statement asserts that artist, not the critic of art, provides something of lasting value to society. I agree with the statement. Although there definitely is a one-side feud between artists and critics, and the critic can help us understand and appreciate art, when given the choice one who gives lasting value to the society, my respond will be the former without hesitating.

No matter just written in water or having far-reaching impacts, it’s the artist, rather than the critic, who gives the society something originally at first. Years later, maybe some of the artists’ works will still popular and some not, but the value of one work determined by it creator, not the judger. Every critic provides us a unique aspect to understand the artist and his or her works, but that’s all references and it’s the audiences themselves who make a finale decision to evaluate the work.
True appreciation of art occurs at the moment we encounter art; it is the emotional, even visceral impact that art has on our senses, spirits, and souls that is the real value of art. Attractive, inspiring, purifying our soul, insight and appreciation of history……, from these elements, we can appreciate one art work without critics’ guidance. But if there are no artists at all to create the work, can thousands of critics working diligently to create “value”, let alone “lasting value”.

Ancient carvings and cave-wall paintings attest to the statement. One of the most functions of art is that it reflects important aspects of people’s lives at that age. When it comes to ancient man, what could have been more important than food and reproduction? So that ancient art is ripe with images of hunting and pregnant women. From these pieces of art, we can deduce the life of our long forgotten ancestors thousand years later. Almost all of the artists and archeologists are grateful for these early smart brains, but seldom of them would care about the critiques of this work at that time.

Admittedly, critic also gives the society something of value, even it’s not lasting. I admit that the general attitude of artists to critics is unfair. They expect from critics an imaginative comprehension which in the nature of the case only a creative artist can possess. On the other hand, a creative artist cannot do the work of a critic because he has neither the time nor the inclination to master the necessary critical apparatus. Hence critical work seldom or never satisfied the artist, and the artist's ideal of what critical work ought to be is an impossible dream.

To sum up, the ostensible functions of the critic is of limited value, let alone of lasting value, to society. On the other hand, the artist, through works of art, provides an invaluable and unique mirror of the culture of the time during which the work was produced a mirror for the artist's contemporaries and for future generations to gaze into for insight and appreciation of history. The art critic in a subordinate role, more often than not, play a role of guidance and interpretation.

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本帖最后由 gloriaeye 于 2009-6-10 12:25 编辑

This statement asserts that artist, not the critic of art, provides something of lasting value to society. I agree with the statement. Although there definitely is a one-side feud between artists and critics, （恩，这句话我不怎么明白呀，还有啊，definitely用得对么）and the critic can help us understand and appreciate art, when given the choice one who gives lasting value to the society, my respond will be the former without hesitating.
No matter just written in water or having far-reaching impacts, it’s the artist, rather than the critic, who gives the society something originally （original？）at first. Years later, maybe some of the artists’ works will still popular and some not, but the value of one work determined by it
（its）creator, not the judger. Every critic provides us a unique aspect to understand the artist and his or her works, but that’s all references and it’s the audiences themselves who make a finale decision to evaluate the work.
True appreciation of art occurs at the moment we encounter art; it is the emotional, even visceral（感官的？） impact that art has on our senses, spirits, and souls that is the real value of art. Attractive, inspiring, purifying our soul, insight and appreciation of history……, from these elements, we can appreciate one art work without critics’ guidance. But if there are no artists at all to create the work, (加个how?)can thousands of critics working diligently to create “value”, let alone “lasting value”.
Ancient carvings and cave-wall paintings attest to the statement. One of the most functions of art is that it reflects important aspects of people’s lives at that age. When it comes to ancient man, what could have been (不用完成时会不会好些？)more important than food and reproduction? So that ancient art is ripe（时态对不？） with images of hunting and pregnant women. From these pieces of art, we can deduce the life of our long forgotten ancestors thousand years later. Almost all of the artists and archeologists are grateful for these early smart brains, but seldom of them would care about the critiques of this work at that time. （有道理，但是现在也有对那时的评论呀，这么一说，嘿嘿）
Admittedly, critic also gives the society something of value, even it’s not lasting. I admit that the general attitude of artists to critics is unfair. They expect from critics an imaginative comprehension which in the nature of the case only a creative artist can possess. On the other hand, a creative artist cannot do the work of a critic because he has neither the time nor the inclination to master the necessary critical apparatus. （用得恰当不）Hence critical work seldom or never satisfied the artist, and the artist's ideal of what critical （critic’s）work ought to be is an impossible dream.（是不是应该针对top sentence 说一下critic的作用呢？）
To sum up, the ostensible functions of the critic is of limited value, let alone of lasting value, to society. On the other hand, the artist, through works of art, provides an invaluable（？） and unique mirror of the culture of the time during which the work was produced a mirror（？） for the artist's contemporaries and for future generations to gaze into for insight and appreciation of history. The art critic in a subordinate role, more often than not, plays a role of guidance and interpretation.

条理清晰，选择了一个不容易写的角度，以上是我的小看法，如有不当请多指教，加油哇

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outline:
1
同意
确实是艺术家gives社会一些蕴含着lasting value 的 something
在这个选择上
艺术家绝对压倒评论家
2 艺术家gives our society something at first
whether it’s of lasting value or not

这些give 的东西
有的可能没有lasting
value，有的可能以后会发现有lasting value, 有的可能永远也不会有lasting value.
但是critic 永远也不会gives society something of lasting value。Lasting value 的源泉是艺术家
而非评论家
3
评论家的作用在于。。。。
4 总结从lasting value 的角度去考虑，答案理所应当的偏向艺术家这一边但是一个不应该忽视的看法是
评论家并非一无是处。。。

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This statement asserts that artist, not the critic of art, provides something of lasting value to society. I agree with the statement. Although there definitely is a one-side feud between artists and critics, and the critic can help us understand and appreciate art, when given the choice one who gives lasting value to the society, my respond will be the former without hesitating(without hesitation 可能好些).
No matter just written in water（written in water学习一下） or having far-reaching impacts, it’s the artist, rather than the critic, who gives the society something originally at first. Years later, maybe some of the artists’ works will still popular（popular是形容词，语法是不不太对啊？） and some not, but the value of one work determined by it creator, not the judger. Every critic provides us a unique aspect to understand the artist and his or her works, but that’s all references and it’s the audiences themselves who make a finale decision to evaluate the work.
True appreciation of art occurs at the moment we encounter art; it is the emotional, even visceral impact that art has on our senses, spirits, and souls that is the real value of art. Attractive, inspiring, purifying our soul, insight and appreciation of history……, from these elements, we can appreciate one art work without critics’ guidance. But if there are no artists at all to create the work, can thousands of critics working diligently to create “value”, let alone “lasting value”.

Ancient carvings and cave-wall paintings attest to the statement. One of the most functions (most functions是什么意思？)of art is that it reflects important aspects of people’s lives at that age. When it comes to ancient man, what could have been more important (可换成vital , significant等)than food and reproduction? So that ancient art is ripe with images of hunting and pregnant women. From these pieces of art, we can deduce the life of our long forgotten ancestors thousand years later. Almost all of the (the 可以去掉) artists and archeologists are grateful for these early smart brains, but seldom(换成few是不好些？) of them would care about the critiques of this work at that time.

Admittedly, critic also gives the society something of value, even it’s not lasting. I admit that the general attitude of artists to critics is unfair. They expect (感觉expect 作为vt.的用法好像更多些) from critics an imaginative comprehension which in the nature of the case only a creative artist can possess. On the other hand, a creative artist cannot do the work of a critic because he has neither the time nor the inclination to master the necessary critical apparatus. Hence critical work seldom or never satisfied the artist, and the artist's ideal of what critical work ought to be is an impossible dream.

To sum up, the ostensible functions of the critic is of limited value, let alone of lasting value, to society. On the other hand, the artist, through works of art, provides an invaluable and unique mirror of the culture of the time during which the work was produced a mirror for the artist's contemporaries and for future generations to gaze into for insight and appreciation of history.（这句很猛！） The art critic in a subordinate role, more often than not, play a role of guidance and interpretation.（结尾写的很好。对两者都有所说明~学习）

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发表于 2009-6-10 23:39:02 |只看该作者

呵呵看到了谢谢 5# losingwood

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发表于 2009-6-10 23:43:45 |只看该作者

改的很细谢谢了对了结尾是参考的北美范文哈哈 4# virgo_zhang0910

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发表于 2009-6-10 23:45:29 |只看该作者

改的很细致我的语法看来还是有问题谢谢你的修改 2# gloriaeye

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发表于 2009-6-10 23:48:39 |只看该作者

你说的很对啊例子是我的硬伤啊慢慢加油积攒吧
-----(这段我读得有些不是特别明了,如果再强调一下,是艺术家带来了lasting价值而不是评论家会不会更贴近主题? 恩你说的有道理
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发表于 2009-6-11 21:31:26 |只看该作者

1# fingshang
outline:
1
同意
确实是艺术家gives社会一些蕴含着lasting value 的 something
在这个选择上
艺术家绝对压倒评论家
2 艺术家gives our society something at first
whether it’s of lasting value or not

这些give 的东西
有的可能没有lasting
value，有的可能以后会发现有lasting value, 有的可能永远也不会有lasting value.
但是critic 永远也不会gives society something of lasting value。Lasting value 的源泉是艺术家
而非评论家
3
评论家的作用在于。。。。
4 总结从lasting value 的角度去考虑，答案理所应当的偏向艺术家这一边但是一个不应该忽视的看法是
评论家并非一无是处。。。

============================================
This statement asserts that artist, not the critic of art, provides something of lasting value to society. I agree with the statement. Although there definitely is a one-side feud between artists and critics, and the critic can help us understand and appreciate art, when given the choice one who gives lasting value to the society, my respond will be the former without hesitating.

No matter just written in water or having far-reaching impacts,（学习了） it’s the artist, rather than the critic, who gives the society something originally（这是LASTING VALUE的源泉） at first. Years later, maybe some of the artists’ works will still popular and some not, but the value of one work determined by it creator, not the judger. Every critic provides us a unique aspect to understand the artist and his or her works, but that’s all references and it’s the audiences themselves who make a finale decision to evaluate the work.（好例子）
True appreciation of art occurs at the moment we encounter art; it is the emotional, even visceral impact that art has on our senses, spirits, and souls that is the real value of art.（含有LASTING VALUE） Attractive, inspiring, purifying our soul, insight and appreciation of history……, from these elements, we can appreciate one art work without critics’ guidance. But if there are no artists at all to create the work, can thousands of critics working diligently to create “value”, let alone “lasting value”.

Ancient carvings and cave-wall paintings attest to the statement. One of the most functions of art is that it reflects important aspects of people’s lives at that age. When it comes to ancient man, what could have been more important than food and reproduction? So that ancient art is ripe with images of hunting and pregnant women. From these pieces of art, we can deduce the life of our long forgotten ancestors thousand years later. （好例子）Almost all of the artists and archeologists are grateful for these early smart brains, but seldom of them would care about the critiques of this work at that time.

Admittedly, critic also gives the society something of value, even it’s not lasting. （感觉有点怪）I admit that the general attitude of artists to critics is unfair. They expect from critics an imaginative comprehension which in the nature of the case only a creative artist can possess. On the other hand, a creative artist cannot do the work of a critic because he has neither the time nor the inclination to master the necessary critical apparatus.（好例子） Hence critical work seldom or never satisfied the artist, and the artist's ideal of what critical work ought to be is an impossible dream.

To sum up, the ostensible functions of the critic is of limited value, let alone of lasting value, to society. On the other hand, the artist, through works of art, provides an invaluable and unique mirror of the culture of the time during which the work was produced a mirror for the artist's contemporaries and for future generations to gaze into for insight and appreciation of history. The art critic in a subordinate role, more often than not, play a role of guidance and interpretation

好地方很多，我就不说啦。
个人认为总觉得还有些地方有些啰嗦比如When it comes to ancient man, what could have been more important than food and reproduction?。
改的不好的地方多多包涵哦。

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