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[a习作temp] [tsubasa] 第二次作业argument188 by muxinshuang [复制链接]

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The author's claim suffers several crucial logical flaws. His suggestion would be more valid, if he could provide sufficient evidences to show a similar result occurred in studies based on subjects who are suffering other kinds of pains, to substantiate that using kappa opioids can cause more pain for men than any other pain medication, to demonstrate that sufficient demands to reevaluate the effects of all medications on men versus women. Without such evidences, I have to say the author's evidence is too limited to make a reasonable and reliable suggestion for doctors.

First of all, the evidences provided by the study itself are far less than making a reliable suggestion. The study only covers the patients who are suffering pains caused by the extraction of wisdom teeth; the number of samples is very limited as well. Several variables may fail the author's suggestion. For example, some other studies may indicate a completely different result, if they research some subjects who suffer other kinds of pain, such as headache, pain of feet, and so on. If so, the author's suggestion would definitely fail by such results of studies. Therefore, the study should cover as many kinds of pain as possible and try to study more samples to reach a more scientific and objective result.

Second, even if we concede that kappa opioids has a slower influence on curing men's pains, compared with the speed on healing women's pain, the author's claim is still so weak to say "whereas men should be given other kinds of pain medication", or "kappa opioids should be prescribed for women whenever pain medication is required without further evidences. The author would have to show sufficient evidence to prove kappa opioids is the best medication for women and female patients would like to choose kappa opioids under all conditions. And he also has to substantiate that the kappa has a slower effect on curing men's pain and male patients would reject to choose it under any conditions. Numerous variables may fail the author's claim, for example, if a report shows any other medication may have more quicker effect on healing women's pains; or if a study shows though kappa opioids is relatively slower medication for men, its effect is still quicker than any other medication available; or the price of kappa opioids is very expensive, patients would like to choose a cheaper one at expense of a shorter of healing pains; or a report to show kappa opioids has a certain negative effect on human health, and so on. If either above occurred, it would fail the author's claim.
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The author's claim suffers several crucial logical flaws. His suggestion would be more valid, if he could provide sufficient evidences to show a similar result occurred in studies based on subjects who are suffering other kinds of pains, to substantiate that using kappa opioids can cause more pain for men than any other pain medication, to demonstrate that sufficient demands to reevaluate the effects of all medications on men versus women. Without such evidences, I have to say the author's evidence is too limited to make a reasonable and reliable suggestion for doctors.

First of all, the evidences provided by the study itself are far less than making a reliable suggestion.这句话本来很重要,但楼主写的却没有任何意义,什么意思都没表达出来,很像一句客套话 The study only covers the patients who are suffering pains caused by the extraction of wisdom teeth; the number of samples is very limited as well. 至少还要写下什么地方有问题,不要急着套模板Several variables may fail the author's suggestion. For example, some other studies may indicate a completely different result, if they research some subjects who suffer other kinds of pain, such as headache, pain of feet, and so on. If so, the author's suggestion would definitely fail by such results of studies.逻辑问题严重,这个不能这样乱想的,至少要靠点常识,不能说我觉得这个实验是错的,因为可能有个实验证明它是另一个结果 Therefore, the study should cover as many kinds of pain as possible and try to study more samples to reach a more scientific and objective result.


Second, even if we concede that kappa opioids has a slower influence on curing men's pains, compared with the speed on healing easing women's pain, the author's claim is still so weak to say "whereas men should be given other kinds of pain medication", or "kappa opioids should be prescribed for women whenever pain medication is required without further evidences.抄原文不好的 The author would have to show sufficient evidence to prove kappa opioids is the best medication for women and female patients would like to choose kappa opioids under all conditions.反例举的有问题,关键不是对女性疗效是不是特别好,而是男女间有差别对待 And he also has to substantiate that the kappa has a slower effect on curing men's pain and male patients would reject to choose it under any conditions. Numerous variables may fail the author's claim, for example, if a report shows any other medication may have more quicker effect on healing women's pains; or if a study shows though kappa opioids is relatively slower medication for men, its effect is still quicker than any other medication available; or the price of kappa opioids is very expensive, patients would like to choose a cheaper one at expense of a shorter of healing pains; or a report to show kappa opioids has a certain negative effect on human health, and so on. If either above occurred, it would fail the author's claim.
楼主应该写完后做做修改,特别需要关注的是numerous viriables后面的内容,看和全文是不是协调。

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