Issue48 新鲜出炉, 热情求拍!

苯石UID: 2169611

几天没好好练笔, 这篇严重超时.
:L留下连接, 会尽力回拍的.

Issue 48 Topic "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."

     When we look at history books, it seems that the human history constitutes of merely the dramatic figures and their stories: from ancient philosophers, to political leaders of world powers; from renowned scientists to creative artists. However, some people argue that our history is propelled by the groups of people we are not familiar with rather than the elite few that have been memorized through the years. Despite the fact that the power of people has indeed placed the history on its rolls, it is not very practical for historians to identify every person involved in the historical events. And more importantly, in some cases, it is actually the ‘famous few’ that helped to make the history.

     First of all, the power of people cannot be neglected or overlooked. The masses, although difficult to confirm their exact identities, have contributed greatly to the progress of the society. Without the people, there might not have been splendid architectures like the pyramids in Egypt and the Great Wall in China. More than once, people in one nation fought to overthrow the oppressive regimes and elected the democratic governments they desire for. Currently, there are several thousand Non-Governmental Organizations that are playing an active role in shaping our world. The makeups of such organizations are mostly common people. These are all testimonies of how great the power of people can be.
   
     However, this is does not indicate that historians have to the take note down of all their names. It is not viable, or even impossible to achieve such a goal as the work involved is too tedious and overwhelming. Often, historians have no choice but to select some symbols and keep record of them instead of the whole multitude. These symbols are not necessarily persons. For example, Hiroshima and Nagasaki are often related to the first use of atomic bomb in wartime. Nowadays, very few people remember the names of the hundreds of thousands of victims in the explosions and the aftermath, the names of the dozens of fight pilots who dropped the bombs; or even the Commander who planned and ordered the assault. This time, historians chose the names of the two cities. Thus, they become the symbols and reminder of that very human catastrophe. Historians sometimes do not emphasize much on common people because they have some practical concerns.

     In some cases, the study of history focuses on some individuals because they indeed have played important roles and what they did have far-reaching influences. First, political leaders and statesmen do possess the power to alter the course of our history. If Hitler, the insane paranoia, had had not legitimized racial discrimination and authorized the slaughter of Jews, there would not have been the Holocaust in human history. Without the enormous efforts made by the then Secretary of State Kissinger in the 1970s, the normalization of US-Sino relationship might have been postponed for years. Second, discoveries and breakthroughs in scientific and artistic fields, often made by individuals rather than groups of people, lead to new trends or transformations. For instance, Clark and James Watson, who discovered the double-helix structure of DNA, are considered as the founder of molecular biology and the pioneers in genetics. Adam Smiths, whose works the Wealth of Nations is still regarded the must-read in economics, first introduced math and critical analysis to economic life. He would be forever remembered for his innovative way of thinking and great contributions to modern economics. These individuals assumed more responsibilities, obtained more power to influence the world, and consequently deserve more place in the human history.
  
     Therefore, when we appreciate the power of the people, we should not deny the leading role some pioneers and individuals have played. Both of them are the vital parts of a complete human history and help to make our society stride. Historians sometimes place more emphasis on individuals because to record every single person in our history is too much work that goes beyond their capacities.

苯石UID: 2169611

脸皮厚, 自己顶!

莎拉UID: 2185851

When we look at history books, it seems that the human history constitutes of merely the dramatic figures and their stories: from ancient philosophers, to political leaders of world powers; from renowned scientists to creative artists. However, some people argue that our history is propelled by the groups of people we are not familiar with rather than the elite few that have been memorized through the years. Despite the fact that the power of people has indeed placed the history on its rolls, it is not very practical for historians to identify every person involved in the historical events. And more importantly, in some cases, it is actually the ‘famous few’ that helped to make the history.

     First of all, the power of people cannot be neglected or overlooked. The masses, although difficult to confirm their exact identities, have contributed greatly to the progress of the society. Without the people, there might not have been splendid architectures like the pyramids in Egypt and the Great Wall in China. More than once, people in one nation fought to overthrow the oppressive regimes and elected the democratic governments they desire for. Currently, there are several thousand Non-Governmental Organizations that are playing an active role in shaping our world. The makeups of such organizations are mostly common people. These are all testimonies of how great the power of people can be(have).
   
     However, this is ( 不要is) does not indicate that historians have to the take note down of all their names. It is not viable, or even impossible to achieve such a goal as the work involved is too tedious and overwhelming. Often, historians have no choice but to select some symbols and keep record of them instead of the whole multitude. These symbols are not necessarily persons. For example, Hiroshima and Nagasaki are often related to the first use of atomic bomb in wartime. Nowadays, very few people remember the names of the hundreds of thousands of victims in the explosions and the aftermath, the names of the dozens of fight pilots who dropped the bombs; or even the Commander who planned and ordered the assault. This time, historians chose the names of the two cities. Thus, they become the symbols and reminder of that very human catastrophe. Historians sometimes do not emphasize much on common people because they have some practical concerns.

     In some cases, the study of history focuses on some individuals because they indeed have played important roles and what they did have far-reaching influences. First, political leaders and statesmen do possess the power to alter the course of our history. If Hitler, the insane paranoia(这个词会不会太过了点？), had had not legitimized racial discrimination and authorized the slaughter of Jews, there would not have been the Holocaust in human history. Without the enormous efforts made by the then Secretary of State Kissinger in the 1970s, the normalization of US-Sino relationship might have been postponed for years. Second, discoveries and breakthroughs in scientific and artistic fields, often made by individuals rather than groups of people, lead to new trends or transformations. For instance, Clark and James Watson, who discovered the double-helix structure of DNA, are considered as the founder of molecular biology and the pioneers in genetics. Adam Smiths, whose works the Wealth of Nations is still regarded the must-read in economics, first introduced math and critical analysis to economic life. He would be forever remembered for his innovative way of thinking and great contributions to modern economics. These individuals assumed more responsibilities, obtained more power to influence the world, and consequently deserve more place in the human history.
  
     Therefore, when we appreciate the power of the people, we should not deny the leading role some pioneers and individuals have played. Both of them are the vital parts of a complete human history and help to make our society stride. Historians sometimes place more emphasis on individuals because to record every single person in our history is too much work that goes beyond their capacities.

苯石的作文真是越来越炉火纯青了~~
拍你作文真的是beyond my capacity了，本来是想改改看的，可是觉得写的太好了，逻辑分析都有理有据，语言也很outstanding. 还是等牛人来改吧。。。。本人能力有限的说。。

dicmiUID: 183392

seat:0

苯石UID: 2169611

To 莎拉:
多谢夸奖. 不过我从构思到写作花了2小时不止.
还是要多练提高速度的说.

dicmiUID: 183392

Issue 48 Topic "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."

     When we look at history books, it seems that the human history constitutes of merely the dramatic figures and their stories: from ancient philosophers, to political leaders of world powers; from renowned scientists to creative artists. However, some people argue that our history is propelled by the groups of people we are not familiar with rather than the elite few that have been memorized through the years. Despite the fact that the power of people has indeed placed the history on its rolls[这句话木有看懂，什么是power..placed the history on its rolls?], it is not very practical[直接用impractical咯] for historians to identify every person involved in the historical events. And more importantly, in some cases, it is actually the ‘famous few’ that helped[help现在时态] to make the history. [首段太长了点哈：）]

     First of all, the power of people[指大部分人么？不如用power of masses 或者power of groups比较清楚啊~~，我刚才还以为people是指精英呢] cannot be neglected or overlooked[neglected and the overlooked are nearly of the same meaning]. The masses, although[我觉得这里如果用despite，表示尽管，意思上更合适~] difficult to confirm their exact identities, have contributed greatly to the progress of the society. Without the[those] people, there might not have been splendid architectures like the pyramids in Egypt and the Great Wall in China. More than once, people in one nation fought to overthrow the oppressive regimes and elected the democratic governments they desire for. Currently, there are several thousand Non-Governmental Organizations that are playing an active role in shaping[shaping感觉不是很好哈：）shape只是改变的意思吧？没有变好变坏的区别？] our world. The makeups[makeup] of such organizations are mostly common people. These are all testimonies of how great the power of people can be. [最后一句总结的过于草率了]
   
     However, this is does not indicate that historians have to the[去掉the] take note down of all their names. It is not viable, or even impossible to achieve such a goal as the work involved is too tedious and overwhelming. Often, historians have no choice but to select some symbols and keep record of them instead of the whole multitude. These symbols are not necessarily persons. For example, Hiroshima and Nagasaki are often related to the first use of atomic bomb in wartime.[例子很好] Nowadays, very few[very不要了吧~~] people remember the names of the hundreds of thousands of victims in the explosions and the aftermath, the names of the dozens of fight pilots who dropped the bombs; or even the Commander[小写的吧~~] who [made the plan]planned and ordered the assault. This time[In this case], historians chose the names of the two cities [on behalf of such a special history]. Thus, they become the symbols and reminder of that very human catastrophe. Historians sometimes do not emphasize much on common people because they have some practical concerns.[这段没有找到TS~~，我觉得例子后面分析少了一点点。这段其他挺好的]

     In some cases, the study of history focuses on some individuals because they indeed have played important roles and what they did have far-reaching influences. First, political leaders and statesmen do possess the power to alter the course of our[没有our] history. If Hitler, the insane paranoia, had had[俩had？] not legitimized racial discrimination and authorized the slaughter of Jews[这个虚拟语气用were 开头比较好，were …], there would not have been the Holocaust in human history. Without the enormous efforts made by the then[then？] Secretary of State Kissinger in the 1970s, the normalization of US-Sino relationship might have been postponed for years. Second, discoveries and breakthroughs in scientific and artistic fields, often made by individuals rather than groups of people, lead to new trends or transformations. For instance, Clark and James Watson, who discovered the double-helix structure of DNA, are considered as the founder of molecular biology and the pioneers in genetics. Adam Smiths, whose works the Wealth of Nations is still regarded the must-read in economics, first introduced math and critical analysis to economic life. He would be forever remembered for his innovative way of thinking and great contributions to modern economics. These individuals assumed more responsibilities, obtained more power to influence the world, and consequently deserve more place in the human history. [这段读起来很顺的哈]
  
     Therefore, when we appreciate the power of the people, we should not deny the leading role some pioneers and individuals have played. Both of them are the vital parts of a complete human history and help to make our society stride. Historians sometimes place more emphasis on individuals because to record every single person in our history is too much work that goes beyond their capacities.[最后一句个人觉得多了可以不要哈]

[写的很不错。结构清楚，语言很好，学习ing，一些词都值得学习。真没啥可改的了]

清新氧气UID: 2215684

占个座先, 看来是高人 非常多的人支持啊 呵呵

苯石UID: 2169611

谢谢大家捧场!

to Dicmi:
1. place history on its rolls, 我想说推动历史车轮前进的. 看到过类似的用法,
   但回忆不起来那个确切的短语了. 郁闷.
2. power of people, 指群众的力量. 不过我不能确定这种表述是最合适的.
    精英是elite.

peterleafUID: 2187349

Issue 48 Topic "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."

     When we look at history books, it seems that the human history constitutes of merely the dramatic figures and their stories: from ancient philosophers, to political leaders of world powers; from renowned scientists to creative artists. However, some people argue that our history is propelled by the groups of people we are not familiar with rather than the elite few that have been memorized through the years. Despite the fact that the power of people has indeed placed the history on its rolls, it is not very practical for historians to identify every person involved in the historical events. （我们不需要identify every person, 重要的是认识到他们的存在对于历史发展社会进步的作用）And more importantly, in some cases, it is actually the ‘famous few’ that helped to make the history.

     First of all, the power of people cannot be neglected or overlooked. The mass（es）, although difficult to confirm their exact identities, have contributed greatly to the progress of the society. Without the people, there might not have been splendid architectures like the pyramids in Egypt and the Great Wall in China. More than once, people in one nation fought to overthrow the oppressive regimes and elected the democratic governments they desire for. Currently, there are several thousand Non-Governmental Organizations that are playing an active role in shaping our world. The makeups of such organizations are mostly common people. These are all testimonies of how great the power of people can be.
   
     However, this （is） does not indicate that historians have to the take note down of all their names. It is not viable, or even impossible to achieve such a goal as the work involved is too tedious and overwhelming. Often, historians have no choice but to select some symbols and keep record of them instead of the whole multitude. These symbols are not necessarily persons. For example, Hiroshima and Nagasaki are often related to the first use of atomic bomb in wartime. Nowadays, very few people remember the names of the hundreds of thousands of victims in the explosions and the aftermath, the names of the dozens of fight pilots who dropped the bombs; or even the Commander who planned and ordered the assault. This time, historians chose the names of the two cities. Thus, they become the symbols and reminder of that very human catastrophe. Historians sometimes do not emphasize much on common people because they have some practical concerns.（这个例子的观点似乎是历史研究中没有必要记录大众，知道lz可能是为了避免这里用了个人，跟下文会有重复，但自己觉得这个例子不是太合适，我也说不太清楚。。。。。。）

     In some cases, the study of history focuses on some individuals because they indeed have played important roles and what they did have far-reaching influences. First, political leaders and statesmen do possess the power to alter the course of our history. If Hitler, the insane paranoia, had had not legitimized racial discrimination and authorized the slaughter of Jews, there would not have been the Holocaust in human history. Without the enormous efforts made by the then Secretary of State Kissinger in the 1970s, the normalization of US-Sino relationship might have been postponed for years. Second, discoveries and breakthroughs in scientific and artistic fields, often made by individuals rather than groups of people, lead to new trends or transformations. For instance, Clark and James Watson, who discovered the double-helix structure of DNA, are considered as the founder of molecular biology and the pioneers in genetics. Adam Smiths, whose works the Wealth of （the） Nations is still regarded the must-read in economics, first introduced math and critical analysis to economic life. He would be forever remembered for his innovative way of thinking and great contributions to modern economics. These individuals assumed more responsibilities, obtained more power to influence the world, and consequently deserve more place(s) in the human history.
  
     Therefore, when we appreciate the power of the people, we should not deny the leading role some pioneers and individuals have played. Both of them are the vital parts of a complete human history and help to make our society stride. Historians sometimes place more emphasis on individuals because to record every single person in our history is too much work that goes beyond their capacities.(这个似乎可以不要了)

Lz的文章比我写的要好多了哦，对语言的驾御熟练多了,分析也是。
本文中有一点自己不太明白，就是lz强调了历史学家记录大众不实际，自己觉得这个不是讨论的重点，其他都还好了，向lz学习哈~

下面是我的issue41，占星术，看看吧，谢谢了~
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=502016&highlight=

polineUID: 2213918

james011137UID: 2280989

..用大点的字体....我老看串行.....:mad

james011137UID: 2280989

peterleaf 你没看懂,,,,,LZ 的individul的意义已经扩大了,,只要不是 group 就当个体处理,,,我刚开始 也不太明白,,后来看到 小日本的那例子 才明白,,,,

LZ对题目 理解很深,,,赞个.:)

CandyZhengUID: 2316103

写得太好了！明天也写个试试：）

nocturne05UID: 2280839

Very good!!

苯石UID: 2169611

承蒙错爱。。。这么久的帖子都翻出来了。
好久没有练习了。现在写出来不知道会怎么的惨不忍睹啊