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144"It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value." a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
144. 是艺术家而不是批评家,给了社会一些永久的价值。*批评家指经常评价艺术作品,例如小说、电影、音乐、绘画等的人
The statement asserts that it is the artist, instead of the critics, who gives the society something of lasting value. Although the critics may make a contribution in the evaluating of arts, they are not the one who provides the lasting value. 【概述题目】I partially agree with【to】 this opinion. Just think about the masterpiece left by Beethoven, the Santos of the Virgin composed by Raphael, the Michelangelo's famous frescoes in the Sistine Chapel in Rome. These are just the famous work of everlasting value left by the artists.【这句话同你上一句的观点相悖,这里说归功于artists,而观点包含partially】
Admittedly, some critics do help to bring out and popularize the masterpieces. The critics can help the public to understand the value of an art; otherwise the masterpiece may not be recognized by the grass root. Then the potential value of the art may not be discovered. Secondly, by evaluating the arts, the critics have the chance to filter some bad art from the worthwhile. It 【指代什么?】can save the time of its people and prevent them from the fast food culture, or raunchy culture.【观点太多,论证太少,没有说服力】 Moreover, critics can provide feedbacks to the artists’ work, to help them improve their work.
The 【缺主语】mentioned above contributions made by critics may seem reasonable at the first glance, but once we look deeper and think more carefully, we may find it to be controversial.【此段可以删了,没有实质内容,有凑字数之嫌】
Firstly, due to the lack of fixed【certain or widely accepted】 standard in art field, the so called good work brought out by the critics may not be the exact one. As the saying goes, 1000 readers have 1000 Hamlet. Even different critics would have different opinions on the same art work. On the other hand, the comment from the critics my[may] distract us from the appreciating of art work as the first impression are the strongest. With their authoritative assesses, the masses are deprived of rights to communicate with the artists spiritually.[观点本身就有问题,deprived 用的不好,再加上没有解释和论证,更加站不住脚]
Secondly, the second function of critics, to filter out the bad art from the worthwhile one may sometimes work on the contrary way. Think about the complete dismissal of Van Gogh’s painting by the esteemed critics at that time, some of the critics even taking 【take】commending his work as a depreciation of them. Their critique serves more like a misguidance rather than a good lead【两个谓语。。。】 to the ever-lasting value of the work.
Last but not least, though we cannot neglect the feedback role of critics【Chinglish】, in the field of art however, the style of an artist and his work is hard to change just by the words of critics, as art is usually the reflection of the artists of both sudden inspiration and long accumulated personal style【personality】. Moreover, as is mentioned before, the critique from critics may be more like a misguidance rather than a good lead. Some pieces 【of】works of ever lasting value are just the result of the artists’ intransigency to those critics.
In sum, the role of critics cannot be neglected us【?】, as some of them do sever【serve】 as a spreader, a filter, or a feedback to those great work. However, if we have a closer look at the function of both artists and the critics, w come to understand that it is the artists who provide the society with everlasting value.
1、赶工的迹象很明显,下次作业请先用Word进行纠错,先改正笔误问题和明显的语法问题
2、有些观点站不住脚,很没有说服力,该有例子的地方缺没有
3、至于一些细节的问题,诸如用词和标点,可以自己进行改进 |
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