我觉得楼主的内容、声调都挺好的
就是语速还可以再快一些,如果离考试还有段时间的话,不妨把要讲的东西写下来,可以尽量写得多一点
还有就是有些发音像task2 “I bought it and I am impressed by his art…”这些字的结尾是气音,不宜拉长
然后在注意一下时态就ok了
不好意思喔,这么晚才来帮你评><
我先把你说的敲了下来:(下划线是我没听出来的)
I would like to say that I want to stay with my famaly on the weekends. Because my father worked in Shengsi, because of ___. And I and my mother lived in Shanghai. And as a university student, I usually lived in the dormitory on the weekdays. So my mother is always alone. And the weekend is the only time that my family can get together. And I usually talked with them about the interesting thing happened in my school. And my father often take us out to eat something delicious. I think it is really a wonderful time.
我google了一下什么样的托福独立口语算好的口语,答案是流畅、细节、有逻辑的。那么我就分别说说。
首先,我觉得你还比较流畅,没有明显的停顿,挺好的~
细节方面也不错,父母住在哪里,经常与他们聊学校发生的趣事,老爸带着出去吃好吃的...
逻辑性方面,整体也不错,但我觉得还有提高的空间。1. Because my father worked in ...这句话中的"because"是与后面的“So my mother is always alone“中的"So"对应的吗?是不是有点隔得太远了?能不能调整一下句式呢?2. 为什么My mother is always alone?我知道楼主的意思,但是我觉得仅仅因为住在哪里就孤单,逻辑上不是很有说服力,而且为什么是”my mother“孤单而不是"my father"孤单呢?3. “and”一次用的过多,后果就是显得逻辑不是很清楚,我觉得不是每句话前都需要“and”。也可以考虑用其他的过渡词。
最后说一点细节,就是语法。我发现你用了很多过去式,我不太明白为什么要用过去式。另外,my father often take us...中没有用第三人称单数。这些细节,我不知道重要不重要,但是还是注意下比较好。
先敲下来:(下划线没听出来)
I think to some extend I will____ outgoing and friendly, and I think friendly is more important. Last month I __ a program that required me __ people I don't know. And we should finish the commercial plan with __. However, I think it is awful,__
because the leader is__. And She is __ because of __. She required me to cut hundreds of paper the last day, because she didn't want to pay extra money for it. And we didn't...