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发表于 2008-8-18 23:18:24 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

Q: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lesson for the future. U e reasons and specific example to support our answer.

Have you ever felt frighten when you face difficult? Have you ever tried to give up when you found that you cannot come over some hard? Have you ever turn to others for help when you found that you could not fight against with some problems? What was the result of these experiences? In most of my experiences, I have come over these problems, have tremendously grown up and even got some precious lessons which I cannot get even if at the best school!
  At the end of the Second World War, The famous English lead have reported a well known speech said that never, never give up! This speech helped most British people and people around the world came over the hardest time in the history. This experience also influences people at present. We now all understand that when we face difficult we can not run away we must never give up, like people in the past time.
  Furthermore, many tiny experiences during our common life can even give us some lessons that impact our later life. Take a personal experience for example; the first time I have to make dinner by myself is an unforgettable experience. When I was entered the kitchen I feel afraid of touching knifes and turn on the fire. I even burst into tears! I do not know how to begin with! But under the help of a warm-hearted neighbor I have eventually finished the dinner. How happy I was when I saw the smile on my parents' face after they came home. This hard experience made me finally love with cooking that I will feel extraordinarily happy when I see the satisfactory feeling of my parents. This experience is also a significant lesson I have ever had.
  Lastly, the experience during the process that I prepare for some of my important exams is undoubtly the most impact lesson I have had. During these hard times I have ever thought about give up, I have cried numbers of time, I have even blamed my parents that they forced me to do such difficult works! But whatever I have experienced at the end of these challenges I got success. These unique experiences told me that how can I get rainbow before come though the hard process?

顺便问问啊这样写有没有跑题的嫌疑啊~！
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发表于 2008-8-18 23:27:41 |只看该作者

第一句的difficult就是不对的，应该difficulty
后面的语法问题还是比较多的，名词和形容词的错误还有时态的问题。
when i was erntered the kitchen.....俄，这样的错误太多了，评卷人会怎么想呢。。。

建议写的时候仔细一点，因为时间不多了，所以本质的提高还是很难的，语法错误要减少，句子顺畅，至少动词的并列和时态上要保证正确。说清楚就好了。
还有不熟悉的例子就别举了，写了之后很空泛。

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