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顺便贴个我今天自己分析的一篇OG上的5 分范文,我自己感觉挺有启发的,和大家分享下。6分那篇的写法太别致了,还是5分的这篇感觉比较的常规
The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.
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I partially agree with the statement “The best way to teach is to praise positive actions
and ignore negative ones”. Children should be rewarded when they perform well;
however, they should not be ignored for performing sub-optimally. For purposes of
this essay, the term “actions” is defined as behaviors within the classroom.(首先总的说明自己的立场--复述自己的观点--对一些关键的词进行解释)
Utilizing positive reinforcements, such as tangible rewards, can be a good method
to teach children(总起句,观点1表扬好的行为时好的) If the teacher praises children for actions that are desirable, then the children are more likely to repeat those actions(理由1). For example, a student who completes an assignment on time and does a good job is likely to want to do a good job on the next assignment if he gets positive feedback. Likewise, the children who are not currently engaging in the desirable actions may be more inclined to do so in order to recieve the positive reinforcement.(例子1 注意这个例子分两种情况来写,a 是给正反馈促使学生在下面的学习表现更好 b 为了得到正反馈学生会做得更好,说明了学生行为和表扬正面行为之间的一个相互关系,因为是相互关系,所以就从学生行为和正反馈互相的作用来举两个例子)
Conversely, children should not be ignored for negative actions(观点2,负面行为不应该被忽视). If a child is not exhibiting appropriate behavior in the classroom, then it is the teacher’s responsibility to encourage the child to perform optimally(理由1因为纠正错误是老师的责任). Ignoring something doesn’t make it go away, actions and consequences do. A student who is being disruptive in class will continue to be disruptive unless the teacher does something about it(例子1). However, the teacher’s actions need be appropriate.
以下是如何纠正错误分情况讨论,这个是和上一段联系的。因为作者的观点是,负面的行为不应该被忽视,而是应该去纠正,那么如何纠正呢?作者把这个问题深入挖掘了下去,分别指出两种情况下的纠正:
Before the teacher attempts to modify a child’s behavior, the teacher needs to try
and identify the reason behind the behavior. For instance, children who leave their
seat often, stare in to space, or call out of turn may be initially viewed as having poor
behavior. However, the teacher may suspect that the child has an attentional problem,
and request that the child be tested. If the child does have an attentional problem, then
the teacher can work with a related service, such as occupational therapy, to alter the
classroom environment in order to cater to the needs of the child. For instance, the
teacher could remove some of the stimulating bulliten board displays to make the
room more calming to the child. If the child becomes more attentive in class then the
teacher was able to assist the child without scorning them or ignoring them. The
teacher met the needs of the child and created an enviornment to enable the child to
optimally perform in the educational setting.(情况1,注意在这个情况下,作者不是一味地空洞地说理,而是举出了很多例子,告诉读者应该怎么做)
On the other hand, if the child is tested, and does not have any areas of concern
that may be impacting the educational performance in the classroom, then the
negative behavior may strictly be due to defiance. In such a case, the teacher still
should not ignore the child, because the negative actions may hinder the learning
opportunity for the remaining children in the class. As a result, a child who is being
disruptive to the learning process of the class should be set apart from the class so
that they do not receive the positive reinforcement of peer attention(情况2)
The teacher should not ignore the student who is misbehaving, but that does not
mean that the teacher just needs to punish(观点2的补充,注意,这个其实是举出观点2的一个极端情况). It is better to address the child privately
and make sure the child is aware of the negative actions. Once the child is aware, then
the teacher should once again try to determine the reason why the child is behaving in
a negative manner. Perhaps the child’s parents are in the middle of a divorce and the
child is outwardly expressing his frustration in the classroom(具体而生动的例子). Or the academic content of the class may not be challenging enough for the child and so he is misbehaving out of boredom. Whatever the reason behind the behavior, the key factor is that the teacher works with the child to try and identify it. Simply punnishing or ignoring the child would not solve the problem, whereas working to create a plan for success in the classroom would. Likewise, rather than punnishing and defeating the child, the teacher is working with and empowering the child; a much more positive outcome to the situation.
感想:注意观点和观点之间的联系。把一个观点分析透彻,而不是罗列一堆平行的观点。注重的是观点的分析(观点的深度和广度)。表达不是用一些抽象的词,而是用一些实际的例子,应该怎么做。 |
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