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借的电脑被搬走了,机房又不开,大家都忙着搬家。一怒之下鄙人杀入校门口方圆一华里之内唯一一家网吧,写下此文。望指教。

What does most human beings want is not discovery and change but reassurance.

Although discoveries and changes are the real impetuses of human civilization, most people prefer reassurance than innovations and changes in that in this world most people are conservative and the discoveries and changes would sometimes harm some ones' benefit, which based on the obsolete systems.

On the one hand, in fact, most people value what they have obtained much more than what would be gain through new ways. This conservative kind of thinking in some sense is very common indeed since trying new ways always means taking risks of losing the present benefit. Take many Chinese workers for example. In China now, during the transformation of economy system, many factories and companies are under the danger of bankruptcy due to their rigid ways of thinking. And the workers in these companies or factories do not have positive attitudes neither. They ignore, or we can say give up, the better chance such as leave the old companies and find a new one which would be more suitable or quite for a short time to study some new skills; but stay where they are to wait for reassurance from the companies or government. the reason for this kind of behaviors is that they are fear for losing the jobs, whish however have little points after all. Simply put, they think they can survive if they keep the salary, but maybe lose everything when taking risks. Actually, these people fail to see the wealth behind changes and discoveries. No pain, no gain. One reluctantly loses something, he/she would not gain more important and valuable.

On the other hand, discoveries and changes would bring new systems and value and moral standards, which would necessarily break the outdated ones. In this sense, discoveries and changes could harm some ones or some classes' benefit. Therefore, it is not difficult to understand the resistance against new things and the preference of reassurance to the obsolete system. The Industry Revolution is just a case in point. The significant change had brought human beings into a new stage of both material and spirit; but during the revolution, many people hold the point of view that the change is very dangerous to human civilization. Such individuals included peasants, old noble men and some government officials. The fundamental reason for this situation was that such a profound and overall change shook the old social and economy system and thus those depended on such a system felt they were threatened. For example, the peasants lost their lands and the old noble men lost their taxes from the peasants; even the government officials, were in the fear of losing their positions. Thereby, for the men who would still receive benefit from the obsolete system, they would prefer reassurance than changes and discoveries.

It is true that sometimes changes and discoveries would bring some damage to the present society; yet they would automatically build a new one full of vigor and creativity. So people should not be restrained with the conservative ideas and open their minds to see the future benefit they would gain from the new system built by changes and discoveries. Anyway, new things are always prior to the old ones.
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发表于 2003-8-28 11:01:00 |只看该作者
写得很不错,把下岗职工搬出来了,呵呵:)不过我觉得两个观点有很多相似之处啊
木耳真辛苦,原来大家也都是这么苦,我这几天忙得要死,脸已经变得像死人了,谁看见都说你怎么这么憔悴……
经过了很多天的休眠后,我回来了,可是我的状态还是很不好,我的作文总是超时,我对自己失去了信心……
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努力努力,永远不要让ETS得逞,偶门是不会被他打垮的,我昨天才恢复了一点状态,结果打字打得太兴奋,手抽筋了,现在再练一指禅,文章下回去看看先,木耳的文章牛啊,所以我最近天天和木耳,早上喝白的,晚上喝黑的,胖胖了。

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当时是这么考虑的:
1 人们观念保守,不愿追求新事物
2 新事物有一定破坏性,遭到人们反对
写出来好像是有不少相似之处。没办法,限时写的(43分钟),考虑不了那么周全了。我现在只是期望写完,把观点表达了,就满足了。
面包我觉得你是太追求完美了,所也总超时。虽然这是我们Gters的一贯原则和作风,但非常时刻也顾不了许多。想到什么就写什么吧,写完拉倒!
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to gambell

结果打字打得太兴奋,手抽筋了,

同志啊!我练打字不仅手抽筋,脸都发麻,还起了一胳膊痱子。不过奇怪的是感觉很爽!哈哈,大家一起努力!!
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What does most human beings want is not discovery and change but reassurance.

Although discoveries and changes are the real impetuses of human civilization, most people prefer reassurance than innovations and changes in that in this world most people are conservative and the discoveries and changes would sometimes harm some ones' benefit, which based on the obsolete systems.

On the one hand, in fact, most people value what they have obtained much more than what would be gain (gained) through new ways. This conservative kind of thinking in some sense is very common indeed since trying new ways always means taking risks of losing the present benefit. Take many Chinese workers for example. In China now, during the transformation of economy system, many factories and companies are under the danger of bankruptcy due to their rigid ways of thinking. And the workers in these companies or factories do not have positive attitudes neither. They ignore, or we can say give up, the better chance such as leave (leaving) the old companies and find a new one which would be more suitable or quite(quitting)for a short time to study some new skills; but stay where they are to wait for reassurance from the companies or government. the reason for this kind of behaviors is that they are fear for losing the jobs, which however have little points after all. Simply put, they think they can survive if they keep the salary, but may lose everything when taking risks. Actually, these people fail to see the wealth behind changes and discoveries. No pains, no gains. One reluctantly loses something/ One who is reluctant to lose sth, he/she would not gain (anything)more important and valuable.

On the other hand, discoveries and changes would bring new systems and values and moral standards, which would necessarily break the outdated ones. In this sense, discoveries and changes could harm someone's or some classe's benefit. Therefore, it is not difficult to understand the resistance against new things and the preference of reassurance to the obsolete system. The Industry Revolution is just a case in point. The significant changes had brought human beings into a new stage of both material and spirit; but during the revolution, many people held the point of view that the change was very dangerous to human civilization. (此处注意时态一致)Such individuals included peasants, old noble men and some government officials. The fundamental reason for this situation was that such a profound and overall change shook the old social and economy system and thus those depended on such a system felt they were threatened. For example, the peasants lost their lands and the old noble men lost their taxes from the peasants; even the government officials, were in the fear of losing their positions. Thereby, for the men who would still receive benefit from the obsolete system, they would prefer reassurance than changes and discoveries.

It is true that sometimes changes and discoveries would bring some damage to the present society; yet they would automatically build a new one full of vigor and creativity. So people should not be restrained with the conservative ideas and open their minds to see the future benefit they would gain from the new system built by changes and discoveries. Anyway, new things are always prior to the old ones.
你写的主要是社会生活方面的
其实这道题也可以扩展到科学上,比如新的观念的提出,新的发现的出现,对原有观念造成的冲击,这样可写的例子和可论述的理由就多了些

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呵呵,偶也在连打字,不过没有你们两那么严重!:)
加油啊,战友们!
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发表于 2003-8-28 14:21:38 |只看该作者
打字每分钟多少字才合适呀?我现在才不到30个,是不是太少了?

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回斑竹

海龟说得不错。不过我个人认为纯粹科学方面不太好写,而且一般最后还得归结到社会方面。比如你说的新的观念的提出,新的发现的出现,对原有观念造成的冲击,这其实还是说人们思想僵化,不愿接受新事物,还是社会层面。而一旦上升到纯科技层面,我觉得大多数情况下就必然会局限于少数几个科学家,这就和题目中的most human beings 不符了。

总之,科技对社会的影响还是社会层面。
我的第二段也是这个意思。

回happyman:
一分钟三十个单词已经很不错了,四十五分钟就1300了!加上思考的时间,怎么着写600吧。不过如果是30个字符,就要小心了。
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木耳棒棒!!加油加油!!!
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