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发表于 2004-3-13 08:11:31 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

The absence of choices is a circumstance that is very, very rare. 【136】
没有选择的情况少之又少。

The daily activities that an individual participated in are actually made up of a series of choices. In other words, in order to keep alive, one must make his or her choice in the societal matters he or she confronted everyday. However, these choice, according to my consideration, is under most situations limited, that is to say, an individual actually have no choice, or little choice in his or her everyday life.

The first point I am trying to make is that people are frequently forced to make their choice. In Freud’s perspective, the ego of an individual is not positive but destructive, but in a institutionalized society, its residents have no choice but to conform to the law and the customs. Or, they will go into trouble. In addition, to maintain one's existence and to survive, one must conform to numerous restrictions. In the great Asian economic depression the last century, many companies had to lay off employees, and the employees were unpleasant at their lowered pay. However, no one would choose to leave the companies, as they knew they had no choice but stay, or they will die of hunger. This illustrates that if an individual wants to survive the challenges and hardships of the society, their choice, and the only choice is to conform, which actually prevent them from the real process of choosing.

Secondly, human beings are easily got into their habit. Consequently, when people are given a variety of options, the final judgment and choice is quite dependent on their habits. Sometimes it seems that there are many choice for an individual to choose from, however, the final choice is the one that best corresponds to his or her habit. This habit, in fact, prevents people from the real process of making choice. As the habit, as well as one's way of thinking is formulated by the society and government in their early days, most of which are influenced by their education and their surroundings, their choices tend to be the same one that best cater for the society and best identify the perspective of the majority. It is common that when people are given alternative choice and their usual choice, they tend to choose the latter, thus making the former in vain, and their choices are absent. J.P.Satre, the great French philosopher, the pioneer of Existentialism, pointed out in his famous essay-"Existentialism is Humanism", that people should refrain from the habits formed by their daily life and choose freely from a variety of options. He said that conforming to one's habit is conforming to the customs and restrictions that formed the habit, and to seek freedom, an individual should give away his or her habit and make the choice objectively. However, few people can understand him, the majority still prefer their habits and formed way of thinking.

To sum up, as stated above, the absence of choice is a circumstance that is very common because of human beings' conformity to the restrictions posed by the society and their formed way of thinking. In contrast, the existence of a variety of choices is very, very rare, as only a few people, such as Satre, know how to make their own choices which are independent of the society and customs.
544 words, 44mins, pp3.
似乎写的比较MAVERICK，大家拍砖吧。DANNY 千万不要客气哈。

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发表于 2004-3-13 16:08:00 |只看该作者

The daily activities that an individual participated in are actually made up of a series of choices. In other words, in order to keep alive, one must make his or her choice in the societal matters he or she confronted（时态） everyday. However, these choice, according to my consideration（可以这么说么？）, is under most situations limited, that is to say, an individual actually have no choice, or little choice（我觉得no or little的说法不如改成have little choice, if any, ……） in his or her everyday life.

The first point I am trying to make is that people are frequently forced to make their choice. In Freud’s perspective, the ego of an individual is not positive but destructive, but（为什么两个but?而且连接的成分还不一样） in a（an） institutionalized society, its residents have no choice but to conform to the law and the customs. Or（如果前面是个逗号，or还可以表示否定假设，这里就用otherwise吧）, they will go into trouble. In addition, to maintain one's existence and to survive, one must conform to numerous restrictions. In the great Asian economic depression（介词+the last century或者last century直接用） the last century, many companies had to lay off employees, and（这个and用得不好） the employees were unpleasant at（at?） their lowered pay. However, no one would choose to leave the companies, as they knew they had no choice but（to） stay, or they will die of hunger（太严重了）. This illustrates that if an individual wants to survive the challenges and hardships of the society, their choice, and（感觉应该用个从句，现在这样好像有两种choices一样） the only choice is to conform, which actually prevent them from the real process of choosing.

Secondly, human beings are easily got into（be got into是什么意思？） their habit. Consequently, when people are given a variety of options, the final judgment and choice is quite dependent on their habits. Sometimes it seems that there are many choice（choices） for an individual to choose from, however, the final choice is the one that best corresponds to his or her habit. This habit（这句连接的好）, in fact, prevents people from the real process of making choice. As the habit, as well as one's way of thinking is formulated by the society and government in their early days, most of which are influenced by their education and their surroundings, their choices tend to be the same one that best cater for the society and best identify the perspective of the majority.（这个长句写得好） It is common that when people are given（an） alternative choice and（both and或者把这个and改成besides） their usual choice, they tend to choose the latter, thus making the former in vain（make a choice in vain?应该是说meaningless吧）, and their choices are absent（这里有问题，选择符合习惯的并不能说明“没有选择”）. J.P.Satre, the great French philosopher, the pioneer of Existentialism, pointed out in his famous essay-"Existentialism is Humanism", that people should refrain from the habits formed by their daily life and choose freely from a variety of options. He said that conforming to one's habit is conforming to the customs and restrictions that formed the habit, and to seek freedom, an individual should give away his or her habit and make the choice objectively. However, few people can understand him（his ideas）, the majority still prefer their habits and formed way of thinking.
很贴切的例子！这一段的观点很好，应该是全文核心了，论述可以在深入些。比如说结合萨特的存在主义理论，举出现实生活中在某些情况下人们的选择的确是为了迎合环境，然后点出是人们自身的从众心理导致了目光的局限性，从而造成了the absence of choice

To sum up, as stated above, the absence of choice is a circumstance that is very common because of human beings' conformity to the restrictions posed by the society and their formed way of thinking. In contrast, the existence of a variety of choices is very, very rare, as only a few people, such as Satre, know how to make their own choices which are independent of the society and customs.

写得不错，比上次的好很多，再接再厉。
说点我个人对这道题的看法，毕竟考的时候见过。从个人角度讲，我同意题目的观点，也就是反对你的观点喽，嘿嘿。这道题，如果从主观的角度，也就是人的自身选择上讲，就像你说的，是错的，因为是人们自己放弃了选择，从而造成了选择的缺失。但是，任何事物在没有人们的主观认知前都是客观的，选择的多少并不是自然提供给人们的，更多情况下使人们自己的认识。像萨特的观点，人们是为了迎合个人或社会的口味而放弃追逐自由的选择，这样看来，从客观上讲，选择是存在的，只不过人们由于各种原因限制了自己的视野，体现出来的就是表面上的absence of choice.即便自由被剥夺，监狱里的犯人仍然可以选择身体的活动，即便工作环境恶劣，员工仍然可以选择辞职另谋他业，人们放弃选择的原因不过是逃避现实。真正没有选择的是人的基因，但即便是这样，基因技术仍然可以让人们选择自由的基因组合制造出完美的人。
回到写这道题上。我觉得单纯的统一或者否定这种看法都是不客观的，关键是看思考问题的出发点，不知这种观点你是否认同。

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发表于 2004-3-13 16:09:48 |只看该作者

刚看到你的标题，两I一A,加油阿，支持你！！

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发表于 2004-3-13 19:18:24 |只看该作者

谢谢danny哥，的确这次这么写是想尝试一下写比较独特的观点来争取出彩，我还是很认同你的看法，对存在主义的论证可以继续深入，主要是当时强迫自己40分钟写完，所以没有继续剖析，in consideration 的错误是前几天ARGU的提纲写多了，习惯性的PREFER这个词。一句话，这是最后的斗争，我要全力以赴！！

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发表于 2004-3-14 01:07:57 |只看该作者

扫了一眼，觉得syd可以考虑在字面上稍微加强以下体现你肯定"absence of choice" 的态度。

an individual actually have no choice, or little choice in his or her everyday life.
这里的话，是不是考虑写成an indivudial actually has （上面的单复数错了，打pp哦）little, if any, choice in his/her everyday life. 例如这样子？

当然，其实根本算不上什么问题的。

看来彻底否定的态度并不罕见了现在？原来总是看到一大堆堆砌例子然后支持原题的文章。btw，礼拜五上课的时候顺手写的issue136本来打算做个引子炒一炒这个题目，不过现在看来没炒起来的样子:rolleyes:

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