[习作点评] issue 17 formal education restrain minds and spirits [复制链接]

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Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free. [claim/comparison]

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

按照tesolchina老师的思路，全篇主喷，前两个论点直接喷，最后一个论点以反驳的形式呈现
第一篇文章，求大家修改。
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As a primary form of current education in many country, formal education nowadays is mostly accused of restrict students’ mind and creativity, although the key objective of education aims at the opposite. I generally accept that formal education, no matter how people mark it as restriction, brings more good than harm to one’s mind and creation.  What’s more, it is the stiff representation that should be blame instead of formal education itself.

Education is a process, mainly aimed at transferring knowledge from one generation to another, and formal education, as the special ramification of it, actually do more good than harm. Although in guise of interminable cramming session and exercises, formal education itself barely means a classroom filled with multiple students training together and chasing for high grades. In a historical view, formal education, not came up to our attention until very recent, is devised to quickly wake more people up not only to their lives, but more concretely, to their ability to cultivate idea and believes for themselves.  For instance, the formal education of mathematic mean not so much to grind questions in textbook, but rather to teach people to travel in abstract world using their own mind. In addition, those eminent mathematicians, such as Gauss and Euler, all receive a period of formal education, or some private education more formal and strict than formal education today, during their early time.

Some critics suggest that formal education will, more or less, restrict students’ creation and free mind due to its enforced cram in the classroom. However, it is not the formal education that do restrict the creation and flexibility of student, since the existence and sustainability of it already verify its value, instead, the current stiff representation of it plays the role. Abandonment of formal education does not always guarantee that new adopted counterpart may well outperform original, especially when the real problem inside may still be intact. After all it is possible to make enjoyable a class, even the most boring one, say mathematic, with more legends, background stories, and well refined guide of thinking method.

Although some may claim that other forms of education that is not so “formal” may bring more benefit than the “formal” one. I generally agree with it except that these forms of education must have some critical principles to guide the cultivation of mind and spiritual which is doubtless part of substance of education, and it is as doubtless as the fact that these very principles formed and shaped nowadays formal education when people designed it.

As discuss above, formal education, though its misguided current representation do, more or less, restrict students creation and flexibility, we should not deny its real value and confuse it with its representation.

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