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发表于 2004-12-30 22:56:19 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

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The purpose of education should be to create an academic environment that is separate from the outside world. This kind of environment is ideal because it allows students to focus on important ideas without being held back by practical concerns.

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Many people have the opinion that the purpose of education should be to create an academic environment isolated from the outside world, which would be conducive for the students to focus on their studies without being disturbed by the practical concerns. However, as far as I am concerned, it is near sighted to set the students into an isolated academic environment, and such opinion is a misconception regarding the purpose of the education.

It cannot be denied that some kind of academic fields need a peaceful and quite atmosphere indeed, which help the students to give their most attention to their studies to some extent. To pay more attention on their studies, students have to avoid involving themselves into some practical concerns, such as mean ambitions, love of comfort, devotion to material things, all of which would cost them lots of time, and influence their studies consequently. In this sense, it is a good will to create an ideal environment for students to pursue their studies. Many universities, colleges and institutions have laboratories with advanced equipment, libraries that allow students access for free, and often offer the scholarship for those potential students. The measures foregoing all indicate that the education make its effort to establish an environment in which students could focus on their academic studies and reduce the disturbance from the outside campus to greatest degree.

However, people should have to realize that that each coin has two sides. To create an ideal academic environment is a method to guarantee students’ attention on their studies rather than the ultimate purpose of education. When totally being set in an academic environment isolated from the outside world, naturally the students cannot be disturbed by the practical concerns, but they have little opportunity to contact many useful social knowledge either. Therefore a separated academic environment is a two edged weapon, the students have to deal the relationship well between the environment and personal development well, otherwise they would suffer from the separated environment rather than benefit from it and the disadvantage of the environment would emerge gradually.

One of the disadvantages worthy to notice is that the students in an isolated academic world have difficulties in melting them into the general group of society. The ultimate purpose of education bases on the social needs, that is, to cultivate workers and trainers that adapt society, and make contribution to society. Actually, most of those students so called high mark low ability have little awareness of social responsibility, and do not know how to communicate or cooperate with the partners in their future career, even if they performed well in the laboratories, scored high marks in the final exams, and get doctoral degrees with the excellent dissertations. Once the students leave their familiar academic environment, it is hard for them to live happily in a new field. The absence of such social ability attributes to the separation from the outside world, and few opportunities to contact the society.

Another fact is that the students’ knowledge from the outside world could contribute to their academic studies. Some social science as economics, law, management is on the basis of current affairs or practical experience. Without knowledge accumulated from the actual experience, it is hard for the students to attain any achievement in these academic fields. The outside knowledge also contributes to the natural science. If the students just engage themselves in the laboratories without little idea of the urgent needs of the human beings, their research will have little value. In this view, although an quite academic environment can protect the students against the disturbance from the outside world to some extent, too much indulging oneself into such an environment will generate many negative effects.

To sum up, a separated academic environment is a two edged weapon, which keep the outside disturbance away from the students, but isolate the students from the useful practical things equally. Therefore, in order to realize the terminal purpose of education, the students should increase their knowledge from the outside world when making use of the academic environment.

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发表于 2004-12-31 11:07:38 |只看该作者

Many people have the opinion that the purpose of education should be to create an academic environment isolated from the outside world, which would be conducive for the students to focus on their studies without being disturbed by the practical concerns. However, as far as I am concerned, it is near sighted to set the students into an isolated academic environment, and such opinion is a misconception regarding the purpose of the education.

It cannot be denied that some kind of academic fields need a peaceful and quite atmosphere indeed, which help the students to[我的印象中没有help sb to do 这种句式 R:which engage the students in contributing to their studies to some extent] their most attention to their studies to some extent. To pay more attention on their studies, students have to avoid involving themselves into some practical concerns, such as mean ambitions, love of comfort, devotion to material things, all of which would cost them lots of time, and influence their studies consequently. In this sense, it is a good will to create an ideal environment for students to pursue their studies. Many universities, colleges and institutions have laboratories with advanced equipment, libraries that allow students access for free, and often offer the scholarship for those potential students. The measures foregoing all indicate that the education make its effort to establish an environment in which students could focus on their academic studies and reduce the disturbance from the outside campus to greatest degree.

However, people should have to realize that that [D] each coin has two sides. To create an ideal academic environment is a method to guarantee students’ attention on their studies rather than the ultimate purpose of education.[so what’s the ultimate purpose of education? The audiences need a clear idea about it. Tony Blair—the prime minister of United Kingdom says ‘the education is an economic imperative. There is anything more important than knowledge, the more you learn, the more you earn.’ It may be helpful to you] When totally being set in an academic environment isolated from the outside world, naturally the students cannot be disturbed by the practical concerns, but they have little opportunity to contact many useful social knowledge either.[we need list some useful example to convince the audiences] Therefore a separated academic environment is a two edged weapon, the students have to deal the relationship well[delete] between the environment and personal development well, otherwise they would suffer from the separated environment rather than benefit from it and the disadvantage of the environment would emerge gradually.[it is too early to make a conclusion, you’d better delete this sentence .]

One of the disadvantages worthy to notice is that the students in an isolated academic world have difficulties in melting them[themselves] into the general group of society. The ultimate purpose of education bases on the social needs, that is, to cultivate workers and trainers that adapt society, and make contribution to society. [也许可以再细将一点，比如培养有社会责任感的公民，能够熟练与其他人沟通并具有一定生存技能和审美情趣的合格社会人]Actually, most of those students so called high mark low ability have little awareness of social responsibility, and do not know how to communicate or cooperate with the partners in their future career, even if they performed well in the laboratories, scored high marks in the final exams, and get doctoral degrees with the excellent dissertations. Once the students leave their familiar academic environment, it is hard for them to live happily in a new field. The absence of such social ability attributes to the separation from the outside world, and few opportunities to contact the society.

Another fact is that the students’ knowledge from the outside world could contribute to their academic studies. Some social science as economics, law, management is on the basis of current affairs or practical experience. Without knowledge accumulated from the actual experience, it is hard for the students to attain any achievement in these academic fields. The outside knowledge[这个句子我觉得优点怪，knowledge of daily life may be better or some other words ] also contributes to the natural science. If the students just engage themselves in the laboratories without little idea of the urgent needs of the human beings, their research will have little value. In this view, although an quite academic environment can protect the students against the disturbance from the outside world to some extent, too much indulging oneself into such an environment will generate many negative effects.

To sum up, a separated academic environment is a two edged weapon, which keep the outside disturbance away from the students, but isolate the students from the useful practical things equally[R:meanwhile]. Therefore, in order to realize the terminal purpose of education, the students should increase their knowledge from the outside world when making use

我觉得你这篇好象比上一篇好多了呢，但是我总觉得句子还有些问题，但我水平有限又说不清楚。我强烈建议你去办一个外文借书证，有本书education and the rise of the global economy written by JOEL SPRING 对你可能有些帮助吧，好多社会学方面的外文书非常好

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发表于 2004-12-31 23:30:05 |只看该作者

谢谢你的修改，你的建议给我了一些启发。我很喜欢你的这个观点“培养有社会责任感的公民，能够熟练与其他人沟通并具有一定生存技能和审美情趣的合格社会人”。教育类的题目看了一段时间，我觉得有一些题目关于课程设置的，都可以从教育的目标这个角度出发，立足于社会需要和自我生存及发展这两个角度。我把这些题目找了一下，34，94，191，201，80，90，116。你觉得这几个题目这样定位可好？不知你有何高见。

就我这篇文章看，我的立足点有点狭隘了，通篇都是立足于自我发展的角度，而忽视了教育目标社会性的这样一个很好的切入点。回过头来再看了一下，问题多多。而且一些语言写的确实比较不地道，要努力了。

谢谢你的指教！祝你新年快乐，一起加油！

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