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Do you agree or disagree? A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.
Basically, I disagree(这样是不是太直接了). Generally speaking, in the modern society, a job with a high salary but less vacation time is more important to people.
Firstly, nowadays the rhythm of life is very fast and the price of goods is much higher, so if we choose a job with more vacation time but a low salary, we have not enough money for our daily life. Today, the price of house is becomes rather expensive
much higher(显然的重复了), and the people who were worked work for the first year have no money to buy( are unable to afford词汇用多一点,
还可以用unattainable for them to purchase) one for marriage or their parents. If he/she buy a house on loan, he/she also need to pay back the money to the bank every month. So a job with a high salary is more important to him/her. For instance, today most couples have only one child, and for their children, when he/she got married, he/she and his/her spouse should support 4 parents, so they must earn more money to give their parents a better life.(这个例子···例子应该是具体有某人某物的,这个不算正式的例子,只能算成论述部分。其次,这个句子让人感觉很乱,首先我觉得没必要把he/she弄那么清楚,at the most presented time, there is only one child in a family, once the child grow up and got married, they have to support 4 parents which may be a great burden of their life, thus then they would have a rather high life pressure.)
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Secondly, the job with a high salary give us more choices to buy the goods we like use the free money(不仅累赘了,而且此处句子成分还很不清楚). For example, if we get 4000 RMB each month. We pick 2000 RMB for the loan and 1000 RMB for our daily life, so we also have 1000 RMB left. We can use them to buy the new cloth which we have pursued
it(累赘) for a long time or go to KTV to relax ourselves with our friends. Moreover, money makes it possible for us to help others in need. If my job pays well enough, I will donate part of my income to charity, helping the kids to combat AIDS or other disease. Timelife(此处用life是不是更好) is wonderful if we can do the things we want to do.% J# t0 D4 _# M9 ^5 k7 W( g
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Admittedly, a job with more vacation time but a low salary also has it advantages. For one hand, if one person is already have enough and not work for money, it is good for he/she to have more vacation time to relax him/herself. For the other hand, the fast rhythm may let people very tired and have more difficult to keep healthy. If he/she has more private time, it is good to his/her health.(最后一段有道理,
但属于骑墙部分,可有可无,这篇文章字数不担心不够,所以不建议加上这一段,即使要有一点这样的意思,也应该只是略微点过,紧接着结尾) |