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写作文是老大难，论据论点要想半天，句子表达也很纠结，基本上要鼓捣2个小时才能搞出一篇作文来，第一次贴自己的作文，诚心求拍！！

The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries, agree or disagree?

   

There is a heated debate on the question of increasing teacher's salaries. Some people think it to be the best way to improve the quality of education, while the opponents argue that salary compensation is only one element that cannot be addressed without additional approaches. From my perspective of view, high salary alone is far from creating a dynamic, effective and high-qualified education system.

Teaching as a profession is viewed to be exalted and respectful, for it make no direct profits but great contribution to the transmission of knowledge and everyone's prosperous life. Thus it is inappropriate for governments to encourage an money oriented attitude towards job seeking in education field. The potential teachers should be encouraged to teach for interest, for the contribution they may bring to society, and for the students they will teach, despite of the limited income. If someone decides to become a teacher merely for money, how could he love his students and love his career, and how could he feel proud of what he have done as a teacher?
Admittedly, it is unavoidable that salary consideration dissuades some intelligent college students from choosing teaching profession as their career, but what we want to hire is not the intelligent one but the determined one. However, Highly paid compensation towards teachers may just work oppositely, which fails to distinguish a determined one from income goers.

Important as the candidates' intension is, a fair and efficient mechanism of teacher selecting, which requires a revolution in education system instead of merely monetary expanding, should never be overlooked. Currently, most of our school teachers come from normal universities, which has been the biggest monopolist of the job market in this particular field. By giving a teacher license only to their own students, they kept other students from entering the teaching profession. In fact a student from a notable university tend to be more intelligent than his normal school peers, for both a higher score in college entrance exam and a deeper exploration into his major. Consider this, It is useless to expand the candidate pool by giving a higher pay, because nothing could change without a reform in the selecting mechanism.

Beside of teacher's quality, changing education pattern and investing on advanced equipment deserves equal importance in this high-tech world. Old education pattern like score oriented study and large scale of class has been criticized for years. Scores made numerous students turn to "test animals", lack of imagination and creativity, which is a education tragedy to the whole society. Crowded students in class is another problem, making teaching process less efficient and leaving bad performed students overlooked by their teacher. More resource and concentration should be shift to solve these problems as well as replacing the old and worn-out teaching equipment with advanced facilities.

In conclusion, improving education quality is not a easy problem, which need a comprehensive approach including monetary expanding and mechanism reforming. It is too simple to take it for granted that increasing teacher's salaries is the best way to achieve this goal.

zjxdxokzzyUID：3072531

5.20独立改完

phoenix2011UID：3077553

19# 江左风华

江左风华UID：3028061

The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers’ salaries?
There is a heated debate on the question of increasing teacher's salaries. Some people think it to be the best way to improve the quality of education, while the opponents argue that salary compensation is only one element that cannot be addressed without additional approaches. From my perspective of view, high salary alone is far from creating a dynamic, effective and high-qualified education system.

        Teaching as a profession is viewed to be exalted and respectful, for it make no direct profits but great contribution to the transmission of knowledge and everyone's prosperous life. Thus it is inappropriate for governments to encourage an money oriented attitude towards job seeking in education field. The potential teachers should be encouraged to teach for interest, for the contribution they may bring to society, and for the students they will teach, despite of the limited income. If someone decides to become a teacher merely for money, how could he love his students and love his career, and how could he feel proud of what he have done as a teacher?  Admittedly, it is unavoidable that salary consideration dissuades some intelligent college students from choosing teaching profession as their career, but what we want to hire is not the intelligent one but the determined one. However, Highly paid compensation towards teachers may just work oppositely, which fails to distinguish a determined one from income goers.

        Important as the candidates' intension is, a fair and efficient mechanism of teacher selecting, which requires a revolution in education system instead of merely monetary expanding, should never be overlooked. Currently, most of our school teachers come from normal universities, which has been the biggest monopolist of the job market in this particular field. By giving a teacher license only to their own students, they kept other students from entering the teaching profession. In fact a student from a notable university tend to be more intelligent than his normal school peers, for both a higher score in college entrance exam and a deeper exploration into his major. Consider this, It is useless to expand the candidate pool by giving a higher pay, because nothing could change without a reform in the selecting mechanism.

        Beside of teacher's quality, changing education pattern and investing on advanced equipment deserves equal importance in this high-tech world. Old education pattern like score oriented study and large scale of class has been criticized for years. Scores made numerous students turn to "test animals", lack of imagination and creativity, which is a education tragedy to the whole society. Crowded students in class is another problem, making teaching process less efficient and leaving bad performed students overlooked by their teacher. More resource and concentration should be shift to solve these problems as well as replacing the old and worn-out teaching equipment with advanced facilities.

In conclusion, improving education quality is not a easy problem. There is no substitute for thinking hard about which approach is more effective, and what money can buy and cannot buy. The “money myth”-that monetary expanding including higher teacher salaries, will solve our schooling problems –is too simple.

不好意思，忘记贴上来了 昏头转向的

zjxdxokzzyUID：3072531

5.20的作业？

phoenix2011UID：3077553

5月20号的作业呢？
谢谢你给我提的意见啊

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改好了~

das_postkarteUID：3012913

不好意思哈，这两天都是课和作业，现在才交~~麻烦给批改一下~谢谢~！

江左风华UID：3028061

Is it only worth watching movies that teach us about real life.
    The booming movie industry now offers us many choices when we stand in at the counter of a cinema discussing which movie is worth watching and which is not,for my perspective, I agree that many exellent movies do teach us something about real life, but it is too arbitrary to assert that only such films is worth watching.
   It is easy for those realistic films to become a classic one, for life is a permanent topic in literary and art fields, audience are likely to be moved by the happiness and sorrows about life. On the other hand, to the directors and adaptors, movie is the best way to demonstrate their inner world, their emotion and values, and their philosophy. To tell something about life could inspire their creativity to the most.  
   A movie, however, can be enjoyed for many reasons that have little to do with the story or the subtleties of theme or character.Among them, music is an significant one. Take Moulin Rouge for instance, the plot is nothing special, what attracts audience most is the beautiful voice of Nichole Kidman and Ewan McGregor, as well as the well-composed music. Similar reasons could be given to the success of the Phantom of music, Mamma mia and Evita.
   Love is another reason people go to movies. A beautiful young woman, a handsome young man and a romantic encounter between them is quiet enough to creat a unforgetable film. Roman Holiday is the best example, which has nothing serious, nothing thought-provoking, but Audrey Hepburn's beauty and Gregory Peck's enchantment.
   To the public, movie is a convinient and costless amusement. The tired one go to a movie for relax, the depressed for company, the lovelorn for memory, the idle for killing time. These movies may be of less enlightment, but they means a lot to people’s life,to whom, life is burdened enough that it is cruel to suffer again in the movies.
   In a word, movie is as aesthetic as entertaining. As an art, a masterpiece is indispensible of exploration into human life and society. Meanwhile, as en entertainment, music, love, actors and actress all make the reasons for people to watch a film. It is inapproapriat to say that only realistic films is worth watching.

江左风华UID：3028061

谢谢两位朋友的修改 看来我写文章缺乏例子都已经成为老毛病了

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The booming(of) movie industry now offers us many choices when we stand at the counter of a cinema discussing which movie is worth watching and which is not. Some argue that movies should always show good people rewarded and bad people punished, while others do not agree with it, they think movies should not follow that patterns. As to me, I prefer the latter.
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        Admittedly children will be taught to believe in virtue and justice through such movies, however, when they grow up they will finally find the world doesn’t go along the routine depicted in the movies. 这前面你说了一个现象 所以呢 结果是什么？Good people may suffer from tragedy and misfortune, while the evil can live a prosperous and respectful life. Not to mention the indistinct boundary between a good and a evil. That there is neither absolute good man nor absolute bad man is right the truth of the real world. Rather than telling fairy tales about heroes beating the dragon, it is wiser to teach children think over the real world gradually.
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        Educational as it is, movie is more an entertainment to enjoy. Movies exist for our pleasure and for recreation and the kind of comfort that suits each of best. We can relieve our anxiety through a comedy, loneliness through a romantic one, and depression though a encouraging one. People go to movies not for moral education but for amusement, inspiration and consolation. It would be quiet disappointing that this entertainment turns out to be a moral textbook.
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        As far as I am concerned, it is not advisable for movies to show audience good people are rewarded and bad people punished. Movies are open and unlimited, which should not be compelled to follow such an stereotyped pattern.

个人认为 文章需要写的鲜明 人家批改有没有1分钟呀
文章缺少例子 他们喜欢细节
文章大体逻辑没什么问题 段落内部逻辑 需要加强
你的文章格式貌似有问题吧 开头空格 与 段与段之间空行的问题 你可以咨询下

phoenix2011UID：3077553

The booming movie industry now offers us many choices when we stand at the counter of a cinema discussing which movie is worth watching and which is not. Some people argue that movies should always show good people rewarded and bad people punished, while others do not agree with (it)them, they think movies should not follow that kind of fixed patterns. As to me, I prefer the latter.
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        Admittedly children will be taught to believe in virtue and justice through such movies, however, when they grow up they will finally find the world doesn’t go along the routine depicted in the movies. Good people may suffer from tragedy and misfortune, while the evil can live a prosperous and respectful life. Not to mention the indistinct boundary between a good and a evil. That there is neither absolute good man nor absolute bad man is right the truth of the real world. Rather than telling fairy tales about heroes beating the dragon, it is wiser to teach children thinking over the real world gradually.
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        Educational as it is, movie is more an entertainment to enjoy. Movies exist for our pleasure and for recreation and the kind of comfort that suits each of best这句话没看懂……. We can relieve our anxiety through a comedy, loneliness through a romantic one, and depression though a encouraging one. People go to （movies）cinemas not for moral education but for amusement, inspiration and consolation. It would be quiet disappointing that this entertainment turns out to be a moral textbook.
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        As far as I am concerned, it is not advisable for movies to show audience good people are rewarded and bad people punished. Movies are open and unlimited, which should not be compelled to follow such an stereotyped pattern.文章的思想有了，说得也很清楚，能不能加点例子让倒数第二段更丰富呢？而且个人认为倒数第二段和正数第二段讲的是一个论点，可以合并的。赞好人坏人没有绝对区分。

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哥们，是在对不住，今天一天课，刚有空改完
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8# 江左风华

江左风华UID：3028061

Movies should always show audience good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished, agree or disagree?
        
        The booming movie industry now offers us many choices when we stand at the counter of a cinema discussing which movie is worth watching and which is not. Some argue that movies should always show good people rewarded and bad people punished, while others do not agree with it, they think movies should not follow that patterns. As to me, I prefer the latter.
        
        A stereotyped plot makes a less interesting. Audience is always curious, that is to say, they’d like to view something new, something unusual, something out of routine when they watch a film. If they can guess the end at the start of a movie, knowing good man will finally beat the evil, they will lose their enthusiasm to go on. Discouraged by watching such stereotyped movies several times, audience will finally lose interest to go to cinemas, which in turn damages the whole industry a lot.
        
        Admittedly children will be taught to believe in virtue and justice through such movies, however, when they grow up they will finally find the world doesn’t go along the routine depicted in the movies. Good people may suffer from tragedy and misfortune, while the evil can live a prosperous and respectful life. Not to mention the indistinct boundary between a good and a evil. That there is neither absolute good man nor absolute bad man is right the truth of the real world. Rather than telling fairy tales about heroes beating the dragon, it is wiser to teach children think over the real world gradually.
        
        Educational as it is, movie is more an entertainment to enjoy. Movies exist for our pleasure and for recreation and the kind of comfort that suits each of best. We can relieve our anxiety through a comedy, loneliness through a romantic one, and depression though a encouraging one. People go to movies not for moral education but for amusement, inspiration and consolation. It would be quiet disappointing that this entertainment turns out to be a moral textbook.
         
        As far as I am concerned, it is not advisable for movies to show audience good people are rewarded and bad people punished. Movies are open and unlimited, which should not be compelled to follow such an stereotyped pattern.

江左风华UID：3028061

Move to a new city or not?
        
      As technology improved and interaction between districts closer, it is more often for people to move to a new city or a new country in nowadays. Attending a college far away or seeking a job in a new city contributes to a significant part of the reasons why people move. Inevitablly, there's hazards to lose our intimate friends who have been familiar to us for years. However, I think this couldn't be the obstacle that prevent people from moving away.


First of all, metropolis are accessible to better education and occupation, which lies the foundation of a promising future. Most of the famous universities in China are located in capital cities or municipalities, like Beijing, Shanghai, Hangzhou, Wuhan and so on. The same is as with the distribution of companies. Easier job seeking and better career development gives metropolis an obvious edge on its less developed counterparts. Thus, I think, it is unwise to give up the opportunity to move to these cities because of unwillingness to move. Chances never comes back if you don't catch it.


Futhermore, there is a tendency that people are easier to become narrow minded after years' living in a same place, and their interpersonal circle becomes limited too. Changing for a new environment would be an effective approach to broaden one's horizon as well as his friends circle. In my home town, a small city in south China, most youngster desire to go out for broader horizon. My friends and me are right among them, and after years' study in a big city like Beijing, we reach to the same conclusion that it was a wise decision to go out . And we find ourselves learn more, know more and easier to accept new thoughts than our hometown remained peers.


Finally,
lose of old friend doesn't come up with the moving subseqently. As mobile phones widely used and internet easier accessed, people can keep a tight relationship with their old friends at a long distance. Facebook and Twitter are typical examples. Many young people like to update their fresh news on Facebook and Twitter, and the frequent ones can change his status 2 or 3 times per day! By these means, friendship goes on despite of separation.


Youth means to go out, to learn, to experience, to confront. We should embrace rather than keep away from new environments and new life.