Issue 3 示范

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Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.


开头段写法指导
1. 首句说明立场，同意原命题观点
2. 用两句话分别阐述学校的参与对学生自身及就业问题的益处，作为正文部分的两个分论点
3. 讲校方如何对学生的未来做出准确预判，作为正文的第三个分论点


I strongly agree that students should be discouraged from concentrating on a particular major if they do not have the academic preparation or talents to perform well in that area. Following the advice from the schools, students will focus on areas of studies that are more suitable for them and enjoy their school life better. Intervention of schools can also help address the problem of unemployment at societal level. With regard to the concern over the accuracy of prediction schools could make about students’ success, the academic staff could make assessment based on students’ past academic records and their results of different psychometric tests.

中间第一段写法
1.照应开头段第一个论点，概括本段，指出学校的介入对学生的帮助
2.用假设例证推理学校的干涉在学生选择专业和享受大学时光方面起到的作用
With the help and advice from the schools, students can choose majors for which they are better prepared to perform well academically and enjoy the college life.  For example, a student may want to pursue a major in computer science and get a job in IT industry. But he did not know that computer science involves a significant amount of advanced mathematics, which he did not have learned in high school. If the school managed to dissuade him from doing a degree in computer science, the student may switch to a different major, e.g. political science or psychology, which he is more likely to do well.  With better academic performance, the student would find college life more awarding and could also afford more time to get involved in extracurricular activities (ECA). The better GPA and richer experiences in ECA can then boost his chance to land a decent job upon graduation.

中间第二段写法
1.照应开头段第二个方面，学校干涉有利于解决就业问题
2.举例-印度和中国的学生很难找到好工作
3.进而假设如果学生听取学校的建议，会产生更好的效果
4.再次以那位爱好计算机的学生为例
5. 由大学学生推及社会，学生质量的提升有利于社会上的企业招聘求职者

In addition, intervention of the schools can also help alleviate the problem of unemployment of college graduates at the societal level. In many countries such as India and China, college graduates may find it difficult to get a job after graduation due to their poor academic performance and the lack of practical skills that employers expect. If students take into consideration the advice from the schools to pursue a major that matches their talent and interest, they will become more successful in achieving good academic performance and develop skills that are useful in their future careers. Consider the student interested in studying computer science again. By doing a psychology major that suited his academic background better, he would be able to learn more from the program and become better prepared for his jobs in this area. At societal level, if more students graduate from universities with stronger academic records and more skills, the employers would more likely find suitable candidates for their job positions.


中间第三段写法
1.提出部分人对学校能够准确预判学生未来的争议
2.针对存在的这一忧虑提出校方可采取的几项措施
3. 总结本段，凭借可靠的途径，校方能够做到准确预估学生未来的发展方向


Some people may argue that schools could not possibly predict accurately if a student would succeed in a particular field or not. Without the ability to make reliable prediction, any attempts of persuasion would be considered unethical and may lead to waste of talents. While this is a valid concern, it is important to remember that there are different ways for schools to assess the potential of students in a given field. For one thing, the schools can always review the students’ past academic records and consider their performance in related academic subjects, e.g. the performance in math of students interested in computer science. In addition, a wide range of psychometric instruments have been developed and can be used to assess if students are suitable for pursuing different majors. With the help of such tools, the schools can make prediction about students’ future performance with better confidence.


结论段写法
1.以学校对学生的种种责任作为铺垫，从责任的角度阐述学校介入学生选择专业的必要性
2.呼应开头段奠定的立场

In conclusion, as the providers of educational services that receive money from parents and taxpayers, the schools have the responsibility to ensure students to benefit from the schooling maximally and produce graduates that can contribute to the economy as confident and skillful employees. Therefore, the schools should dissuade students from pursuing a major for which they are not well prepared and unlikely to succeed.


建议练习方法
1. 先通读全文（纸质书出版后，在这里注明相关页码），结合各段的写法指导，了解我的思路和写法。
2. 查看本帖下方其他同学写的练习段落及我的评语，查看可能出现的问题。如果最后一层的练习还没有人点评，请回复并点评。
3. 根据本帖提供的提示文字，用自己的话写一个开头段和一个中间段回复到这里，希望自己人品爆发，有人点评你的练习。


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