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Issue 214
"Society should identify those children who have special talents and abilities and begin training them at an early age so that they can eventually excel in their areas of ability. Otherwise, these talents are likely to remain undeveloped."

Outline
1.Theoretically speaking, special training for those gifted is beneficial
2.As we put it into practice, do we have a valid criterion according to which we can effectively find out talented ones?
3.Moreover, do we have a good method so as to balance between those gifted children’s talents and interest, to better promote their overall development?


Childhood education has a large influence on both the development of the individual and the future progress of the society. In this sense, the speaker’s assertion that society should provide those talented children with special training so as to better promote their development is quite reasonable. However, there are still more problems to consider as we put this into practice.

Theoretically speaking, it can be beneficial for those talented children if society can provide them with specially designed training. As we know, education will be much more effective if it takes individual abilities and needs into consideration. Yet generally speaking, current school education is usually designed based on the develop order of the majority of the children, that is, those common ones. As a result, talents of gifted children can hardly be exploited. If these children can enjoy specially designed education which is suitable for their gifts and abilities, they can probably go far beyond their classmates and fully realize their potential.

Nevertheless, there’re many problems as we putting this will into reality. On the one hand, special education for special students is based on the classification of all the children. Therefore, we should first identify those gifted ones from others. And this is not an easy task. How to identify these talented children? Is there really a clear board between those who are gifted and those who are not? If there are, do we have a valid criterion according to which we can effectively distinguish these two kinds of children? In fact, certain gifts are usually hard to discover at an early age. A child who starts speaking much later than his or her peers may eventually turns out to be a successful linguist or a writer. A child who fails in his or her first arithmetic test in elementary school may show extraordinary ability in mathematics as he or she grows up. In short, under many circumstance, it is very hard to give a definite conclusion of the talents of a little child unless he or she shows it to us years later.

On the other hand, if the gifted children have been identified, how to train them? Are we sure we can reach the balance between gift training and comprehensive fostering? Education should not aim at providing the society with only physicists, pianists, architects, and so on. Education should be responsible to make the student a comprehensively developed person. However, former experience shows that special education for children with special talents usually fail to reach this goal. Both the parents and schools care little about the overall development of these children, and due to their high expectation for the children, they always focus their attention on the domains which their children are talented in. As a result, these children have to devote most of their times on one certain area. Worse still, they cannot choose the area themselves. These children’s majors are determined before they form their interest, and it is possible that they do not have enough time to dig into other domains which they may interest in. Isn’t it a tragedy！

To sum up, it can be beneficial for both the children and the society if gifted children can be identified and educated properly, yet so far, we still lack an effective method in both identification and training, perhaps there is still a long way to go.

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[ 本帖最后由 I want my life 于 2006-1-30 22:51 编辑 ]

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芊芊我还没有限时成功哇。。汗。恩赞。继续努力哈。有空互拍

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原帖由 果小冻 于 2006-1-30 23:43 发表
芊芊我还没有限时成功哇。。汗。恩赞。继续努力哈。有空互拍

那个。。。我只是在计时。。。离限时成功。。。还有距离。。。汗

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首先，提纲最好不是问句，而是很果断的观点，这样好写，主要还是方便自己。
Childhood education has a large influence on both the development of the individual and the future progress of the society. In this sense, the speaker’s assertion 我觉得这里有点和A混了，I是立论文，这里不存在有什么ASSERTION的问题，你只要说明你支持某种观点就好了that society should provide those talented children with special training so as to better promote their development is quite reasonable. However, there are still more problems to consider as we put this into practice.本来看第二句我觉得粉开心的，但是最后一句又不好了，主要是虽然已经转折了，但是主要的观点木有写上，还是直截了当的写出来比较好

Theoretically speaking, it can虚拟一下比较好 be beneficial for those talented children if society can provide them with specially designed training. As we know, education will be much more effective if it takes individual abilities and needs into consideration. Yet generally speaking, current school education is usually designed based on the develop order of the majority of the children, that is, those common ones. 我觉得与其解释the majority of children, 却不如从反面再说明教育中的缺陷，我的意思是，完全可以说, that is, there is a gap in training the talented ones As a result, talents of gifted children can hardly be exploited. If these children can enjoy specially designed education which is suitable for their gifts这里用TALENTS更好 and abilities, they can probably go far beyond their classmates and fully realize their potential.

Nevertheless, there’re many problems as we putting this will into reality. 虽然是转折，但是观点却没有很明显，不明白这段要说什么，只知道是对上文的否定，似乎不妥 On the one hand, special education for special students is based on the classification of all the children. Therefore, we should first identify those gifted ones from others. And this is not an easy task. How to identify these talented children? Is there really a clear board between those who are gifted and those who are not? If there are, do we have a valid criterion according to which we can effectively distinguish these two kinds of children? In fact, certain gifts are usually hard to discover at an early age. A child who starts speaking much later than his or her peers may eventually turns out to be a successful linguist or a writer. A child who fails in his or her first arithmetic test in elementary school may show extraordinary ability in mathematics as he or she grows up. In short, under many circumstance, it is very hard to give a definite conclusion of the talents of a little child unless he or she shows it to us years later.这个观点不如在第一句就说出来，你的这个ON THE ONE HAND貌似就是在说这个观点，所以我觉得都可以省略了，你的下文另起一段，说ON THE OTHER HAND，也是这样，不如摆一个观点，然后把这个套话也省了，倒会更有条理一些。

On the other hand, if the gifted children have been identified, how to train them? Are we sure we can reach the balance between gift training and comprehensive fostering? Education should not aim at providing the society with only physicists, pianists, architects, and so on. Education should be responsible to make the student a comprehensively developed person. However, former experience shows that special education for children with special talents usually fail to reach this goal.这里提到了PORMER就算没有例子，最好也有句补充说理，不然未免不负责任 Both the parents and schools care little about the overall development of these children, and due to their high expectation for the children, they always focus their attention on the domains which their children are talented in. As a result, these children have to devote most of their times on one certain area. Worse still, they cannot choose the area themselves. These children’s majors are determined before they form their interest, and it is possible that they do not have enough time to dig into other domains which they may interest in. Isn’t it a tragedy！其实我觉得，还可以从公平与否的角度来理解这个问题，有人会认为人通过努力都可以得到成功，所以会觉得那些一开始显得很有天分的孩子受到特殊的教育是不公平的，人人都应该有机会。也可以说，这样的设计是很公平的，不同的人不同的待遇，绝对的公平就是不公平……针对这一点就有两种选择，端看你的中心是偏向哪个方面了

To sum up, it can be beneficial for both the children and the society if gifted children can be identified and educated properly, yet so far, we still lack an effective method in both identification and training, perhaps there is still a long way to go.结尾的总结不是很有力，我觉得逆否型的结尾会更好，或者就用双重否定来肯定你的观点。

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认真看了11JJ的修改，觉得都好有道理！
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