又求大神改作文

dandelionttUID：2852417

钱不多，大神随便看看，给点意见就行~
没写特别specific的例子，觉得怎么选例子还是把握的不太好。
限时写的，字数371。


题目：
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to make friends with intellignet friends than with people who have a good sense of humor


作文：
I always hear people discussing what kind of people is the best choice when making friend. Some people who think that to get happiness is the goal of making friends asserts that humorous people is the best choice of friends. Other people, considering the purpose of learning from friends, say that to make friends with who are intelligent is better. Yet I consider that there is no need to hold such a utilitarian view when we are making friends. And I hold that any kind of people can become friends as long as they are loyal and sincere to friends.


Yes, I concede that friends are helpful, and even indispensable, in our lives. When we are in difficulties, we always need friends who are not will to, but also able give us a hand. We need friends who could bring us joy and happiness when we are in sorrow; so we want humorous people to be our friends. We need friends who could give us advices when we cannot make decisions; so we what intelligent people to be our friends.


But, this does not means that we have to make friends in such a utilitarian way. Friends are not just about giving and receiving helps; it is also about trust and responsibility. It is about a relationship of interdependent. We would lose the true understanding of friendship if we consider friends simply as someone who could provide help. A person with strong sense of humor could make you laugh, but could he be your friend when he disclose your secrete to others? Also, a well-educated person could give you wise suggestions, but would you consider him as your friends when he cheats you in business?


Thus, from my perspective, friends are people whom you can trust from within and you can share all your thoughts and feelings. Thus, whether friends are humorous or intelligent is a peripheral factor between friends. Other than those who are humorous or intelligence, I would choose those who are loyal and sincere to me.In my observation, friends are those who we are going to depend on spiritually all alone our lives, and hence there is no need to choose friend in such a utilitarian way.

dandelionttUID：2852417

哇，望见了08大神。。。
谢谢您。。。
我真的看到了自己的不足。。。
我要继续努力了。。。

dandelionttUID：2852417

哇，望见了08大神。。。
谢谢您。。。
我真的看到了自己的不足。。。
我要继续努力了。。。

dandelionttUID：2852417

我觉得要努力的地方真的还有很多。

dandelionttUID：2852417

我想弱弱的问一下，最后一点，是指我的作文太过口语化，还是太chinglish，还是两者都有啊？
我要怎么克服这个问题呢？