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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The environmental issue is too complex to be handled by the individual
With the development of economy and industry, the environmental issue has attracted more and more attention, when it comes to whether the environmental issue is so complex that it is beyond the realm of individual effort, I agree it.
开头不错,简洁
In the first place, large-scale environment-destroy activities have become an organized crime, even cross-nation crime. According to the cases that occurred recently, the rampant spread of organized crime has become the main threat of environment, such as organized poach(个人感觉这个词不是很常用哎,特别偏的词不一定就很出彩。出彩的一定是用词准确,生动。). Those criminals have built complete interest chain and complex organization. For example, some big poach organization hunted elephants in Africa, and then sold ivories to Europe and USA. Those organizations are so powerful that it is impossible for individuals to beat them. Actually, government and international organization such as united nation must play necessary role in the fight against those crime organizations.
这段的段首是说environment issue 涉及了crime。但是这篇作文的题目是environment issue 是不是可以被individual 解决。这个段首的段首句,觉得让人摸不着头脑。在我看来,每段的段首句,都是该段的中心,并且应该是和题目密切联系的。所以个人认为这短的段首句应该说,一些涉及环境的问题 太复杂 一个人根本解决不了。然后在后面的例子中说crime
In the second place, environmental issue is tightly related to the development of economy and the life model of every citizen, so the mere effort of individual is far form enough to overcome those challenges. In modern society, most pollution stems from economy activities of human beings. Greenhouse effect, for instance, stems from the carbon dioxide which factories and motor vehicles emit. Actually, the usage of fossil energy has become the most crucial origin of air pollution. In order to reduce the emission of green-house gas, it is necessary to exploit new energy, such as nuclear energy, wind energy, solar energy and so on. The expense of exploiting clean energy is too large for individuals to afford, rather than, government must budget it. According to modern economic theory, good environment is a kind of basic public good which government should supply. Government should inspire the development of clean energy industry via taxation, legislation,policy and so on.
In sum, due to the rampant spread of organized crime in environment realm and the tight correlation between environmental issue and the develop model of economy, it is no doubt that the environmental issue is beyond the realm of individual effort.
语言,结构,思路都很赞。除了一点点小的建议。可以算一篇优文~!!
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