argument173 文章不错，都来学习一下 by imong

happymichelleUID：154082

argument173 好像也不是什么高频题，反正我ARG是都自己看提纲了
这片限时30MIN写的，大伙看看怎么样，给个分数，心里好踏实点
3Q3Q
173The following is a memorandum issued by the publisher of a newsmagazine, Newsbeat, in the country of Dinn.
'Our poorest-selling magazine issues over the past three years were those that featured international news stories on their front covers. Over the same period, competing news-magazines have significantly decreased the number of cover stories that they devote to international news. Moreover, the cost of maintaining our foreign bureaus to report on international news is increasing. Therefore, we should decrease our emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on our magazine covers.'

In this argument, the arguer draws the conclusion that the newsmagazine should decrease its emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on its magazine covers.  To substantiate his conclusion, the arguer cites the experience of another competing news-magazines, and he also assumes a decreasing costs of international bureaus.  While this argument seems somewhat specific and plausible at first glance, close inspection would reveal it fraught with vague, oversimplified and unwarranted claims in several aspects.

First of all, the arguer fails to convince us the cause of poorest selling magazine issues is the covers featured by international news.  It is presumptuous for the arguer to simply impose all the problems to the covers, because covers is only one features of a magazine,  generally speaking, readers may much concern the contents or features of a magazine rather than the covers.  Perhaps, the poorest selling lies in the contents of such magazine are out of date or out of people's taste, or because the editorials of judging the national events are not objective enough for the readers to read, therefore, people are reluctant to purchase this international news-covered magazines.  Unless the arguer could recognize and rule out other possibilities relevant to the sells of these magazines, the conclusion is quite unfounded.

In addition, there is no evidence to demonstrate that the competing news-magazines have made progressed or made profits after decreasing the number of cover stories about the international news, and we will not necessarily learn the experience of others.  On the contrary, it is much more likely that it is because our competitors cannot maintain its readers in contrast with us that they give up the field of international news-covered magazines.  For this reason, it might be just a good opportunity for our magazine to take over the whole market, therefore, the arguer's recommendation that changing the cover is quite open to doubt.

Last but not least, the increasing costs of foreign bureaus to report international news, does not represent we should decrease such kind of costs in order to reducing the whole costs and make profits.  First, no evidence is show that this increasing trend will continue and our company cannot afford such an increase, thus the simply reduction of international bureaus is unwise.  Granted that the increasing trend will continue in the future, it does not necessarily follow that our company should cut the costs supporting them.  Since if reducing the fund of international bureaus, the fact might be that such bureaus could not work effectively and efficiently to report more rapidly.  And suppose our magazine is just famous and well known for our international news, without which, how could we still maintain our consumers and compete with other rivals.  

To sum up, the argument is neither logically sound nor persuasive.  To better bolster and strengthen the argument, the arguer needs to guarantee us that the international news covers is the only reason contribute to the poorest selling and the costs spending on international bureaus is far surpassed beyond their needs.  Only with more convincing evidence could this argument become more than just an emotional appeal.

哎，看了ETS6分范文还是觉得差距浩大，想来A也写了30篇了，估计也就这个水平了

happymichelleUID：154082

最初由 jackygauss 发布
[B]真不敢相信，你居然写了30多篇A，佩服！
Perhaps, the poorest selling lies in the contents of such magazine are out of date or out of people's taste（明白你的意思，但不知道这样有没有语病。）,[/B]

谢谢jackygauss
这句话的确有毛病
lies in the condition that the contents...
这样就对了，
你还有2天了，一起加油~

happymichelleUID：154082

最初由 eveningboat 发布
[B]In this argument, the arguer draws the conclusion that the newsmagazine should decrease its emphasis on international news and refrain from displaying such stories on its magazine covers. To substantiate his conclusion, the arguer cites the experience of another competing news-magazines, and he also assumes a decreasing costs of international bureaus. While this argument seems somewhat specific and plausible at first glance, close inspection would reveal it fraught with vague, oversimplified and unwarranted claims in several aspects.
开头太罗嗦，imong不都对这种开头表达了明确的态度了么？我觉得他说的非常有道理。建议第二句删掉[/B]

谢谢eveningboat
就是说不用再罗列一下arguer引用的论据了？
不过多打一句倒也不费太多时间
只是不知会不会因为罗索，显得不够简洁

happymichelleUID：154082

最初由 imong 发布
[B]嗯，这个，绝对比我的argument写的好。（虽然我也至少写了30篇）

michelle回来之后总结一下argument吧，从自己的角度随便谈谈，给大家有所启发就好。

保持现在的水平..

以下省略...... [/B]

多谢imong抬举，回来一定，全当是回报
也谢谢狒狒兄，丸子了