5.8gre 二战 求作文互批小组

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5.8 求相近场的小伙伴 求互相监督互批作文 求打破零回复 我先来一篇issue

先来一点提纲
Competition is ultimately more beneficial than detrimental to society.
是非题
提正：竞争给人们带来好处---物质财富、灿烂文明
求反：竞争的有害性----人性丑恶的一面、使人沦为竞争的奴役
合：depends；重定义

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若如此 发表于 2016-3-16 18:59
这个提纲是不是简洁了点呢? 貌似没体现出大致思路~

可以加上e.x.和思路

谢谢！我手机码了一下，能帮我看看么~

        As the rapid development of technology ,the world's distance  has been shrinked simultaneously connection has been strengthened. It has become the trend that we emphasize and appreciate cooperation between countries to reach a better result. However, when it comes to competition,  people seem to hold an equivocal attitude. From my perspective, we cannot jump into a conclusion that competition is ultimately more beneficial than detrimental without any determiner. Whether the benefits overweighes the detriments depends on what kind of situation we are discussing on.
     There is no doubt that competition plays an essential role in achieving what we human beings can enjoy today ranging from what we eat to what we use. It is a bit of horrifying but true-the power of competion penetrates into our lives so deeply that we may even not realize it.Take an easy example,  no smart phone will occur if it was not companies urges to attract coustomers.Without rivals, our market will be in disorder  and uncontrollable because monopolization will occur; Without competition, our civilization will stands still     due to no motivation to move forward.
       Nevertheless, we cannot ignore the negative side of competition. I bet most of us see the news that one staff murdered another for a promotion or something like that.It happens cause competition can spur the dark side of people.  And if we extend the promotion to the inclination of customers,things go worse. Pursuing to high sales, companies will sometimes cut their expense by introducing harmful ingredients which are chronic. That means we may not even notice it in a short time and will not blame our later symptoms to it. When the mania dominates in our mind, what damages we are capable of bringing to can even go beyond our imagination.
    Every coin has two sides. Thus, there is no abolute answer in treating competition. Which side will the competition bring to us depends on what kind of situation we set and how we apply it.  

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好久没写过作文了，一战时也没练过作文，作文只拿了三分……然后最近看了新gre5.5，按照正反合的方式写的，但是最后一段不大会写，感觉写不出来什么东西了……请教一下各位写完合这段还需要再总结么？ 还有是不是文章里得有具体的例子，不能大白话的写?