issue47 （revised by paisley, gdhdanny and imong）

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在这句之前建议加点总起句什么的，如果没有，最好也来个类似于诗经的"兴", 不然这个开头稍微生硬了些.The term ‘intellect’ is the ability to learn and reason, the capability of knowledge and understanding, and the ability to think abstractly and profoundly. With the definition of it more obvious, (最好说with this exact definition) people focus more on the emphasis about it(这句话好象是同意反复,我没很看懂). After observing our society, we have to admit that we ignore the ‘intellect’ so long time(最好是for such a long time). Yet what are really concerned in this modern time(这句话比较费解,可能是你还不太熟练concerned和concerning的区别)? Take some Americans as an example, the pupils are encouraged to use calculators instead of computing on hand in most of elementary schools. Because the adults, their teachers and parents, believe the ability to use instrument is much more significant. And another instance is that the public elect their president merely according to the speech from the candidates and their adherents. The majority of persons focus on what they could know from media rather than the truth of them, on the other word, the various opinions is the thing attracting them in deed.

From these examples, we could easily find that(前半句话说得比较草率，其实还没有经过任何论证呢,怎么就能easily find....呢?)  the rapid expansion of the science and technology make people pay more attention to the modern tools and the information itself. After the education at school(最好说educated in school), the children may seize the skill to use equipment and gain the efficient results for a moment, but they lose the more important ability to think by themselves. Just as hundred years (要不说a hundred year ago要不说hundreds of years ago) ago, a pupil, Gauss, who became the famous scientist later, found that when he counted the sum of the number from 1 to 99, he could part them in 50 groups, and then the computing seemed more easily than adding them sequentially. But the students at present may always calculate this by their intelligent calculators or computers. So many experiences like this lead to some of them impossibly understanding complex problems after their growing, such as( 这个短语后面只能跟名词或名词性短语，不能跟句子)  when one of them becomes the stuff who arranges the students apartment, he/she usually needs some software and equipment to count out how to distribute rooms. Thus, people only hold the capability of knowing the simple knowledge including the way how to use tools, but give up the ability to understand and reason, saying nothing of thinking abstractly and profoundly.这个例子感觉太浅了



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