issue144 有提纲,希望听大家对说理的意见,谢

gzl840414UID: 190815

Issue144
it is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value.
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
论点: 评论家帮助艺术家在艺术领域取得成就
1.        批评帮助我们发现及其微小的错误: 作家经常发现不了自己文章中的错别字
2.        批评激发艺术家的创作灵感,考验其自信: 艺术家需要谦虚的修饰自己的错误, 大胆的支持自己的理论(未给出例子,仅仅论证)
3.        批评家偶尔的表扬可以改变艺术家的事业: 事实:借助媒体的宣传, 群众越来越依靠评论家的意见
4.        评论家和艺术家的紧密关系来自于他们相同的专业知识,和互相的了解关心
结尾: 当评价一个有价值的艺术品的时候, 既有;来自艺术家的努力,也要加上评论家的帮助

To be sure, when people appreciate one artistic accomplishment, normally, audience will attribute the value to its creator, the artistic. As far as I am concerned, some critics exert substantial impossible even effect, such as: guiding publics to be aware of the beauty and correcting public's aesthetic taste without people's notice. Pay attention to what critics have done; we can say that it is critics that helps artists to achieve progress step by step.

To begin with, in most cases, critics leave society full of criticisms, which serve as magic tools searching every, even trivial mistake from time to time. Careful observing and repeated evaluating by diligent critics reveal several flaws in certain artistic' works, which may be ignored by the author. In my observation, no matter how sophisticated writers usually spell mistaking words that seem blind to himself or herself after twice or more checking. However, these mistakes display themselves sharply when others' reading. That is the reason why critics are necessary for art improvement, artists need prudent critics to help them look for the mistakes which have been familiar with creatures.

Besides that, criticisms work as a catalyst in artists' world. Not only would criticisms spur artists' motivation, but also it would test creators' confidence. In the first place, being aware of the imperfect weakness in his or her accomplishment, outstanding artists should employ enough courage to refine the weakness and confidence or support his or her correctness. There is no guarantee that critics' or artists' thoughts and opinions are always right, in order to explore the truth of art, society requires both confident artists who insist on axioms, and humble artists who could accept mistakes. Therefore, critic becomes a coach, training artists' to embrace both features by criticisms.

On the other hand, some valuable praise, even rare, but could change the future or the fate of one artist's creation process. In today's society, effect of critics' approval will be exaggerated or enlarged by the means of media. As a consequence, such fortunately accomplishments will win some reward and recognition more quickly and easily, according to the effect of critics' praise. As critics' duty is to help art flourish, their praise can also reach this goal in a delighting phenomenon.

Why so close relationship tying in artists and critics together? The secret lies in their similar basic knowledge and almost the same working approaches.  Who care artists' works in extreme degree are critics, while critics' objectives are bound to of artists or artists themselves? In such mutual connected net, one lasting value artistic accomplishment's birth must contain efforts from both artists and critics. In such sense, dividing the critics from artists when evaluating some works' value breaks the nature link between artists and critics.

All in all, artists and critics make progress in art development shoulder by shoulder. So it is not fair to ascribe the success only to artists, ignoring the companions or enemies of artists, the critics.

fishjoyUID: 2116013

占座先，等一会儿帮你看

fishjoyUID: 2116013

To be sure, when people appreciate one artistic accomplishment, normally, audience will attribute the value to its creator, the artistic. As far as I am concerned, some critics exert substantial impossible even effect, such as: guiding publics to be aware of the beauty and correcting public's aesthetic taste without people's notice. Pay attention to what critics have done; we can say that it is critics that helps artists to achieve progress step by step.

To begin with, in most cases, critics leave society full of criticisms, which serve as magic tools searching every, even trivial mistake from time to time. Careful observing and repeated evaluating by diligent critics reveal several flaws in certain artistic' works, which may be ignored by the author. In my observation, no matter how sophisticated writers usually spell mistaking words that seem blind to himself or herself after twice or more checking. However, these mistakes display themselves sharply when others' reading. That is the reason why critics are necessary for art improvement, artists need prudent critics to help them look for the mistakes which have been familiar with creatures.举个作家范逻辑或是结构错误的例子吧，拼写错误是出版社的编辑挑的

Besides that, criticisms work as a catalyst in artists' world. Not only would criticisms spur artists' motivation, but also it would test creators' confidence. In the first place, being aware of the imperfect weakness in his or her accomplishment, outstanding artists should employ enough courage to refine the weakness and confidence or support his or her correctness. There is no guarantee that critics' or artists' thoughts and opinions are always right, in order to explore the truth of art, society requires both confident artists who insist on axioms, and humble artists who could accept mistakes. Therefore, critic becomes a coach, training artists' to embrace both features by criticisms.这一段实在是不好举例

On the other hand, some valuable praise, even rare, but could change the future or the fate of one artist's creation process. In today's society, effect of critics' approval will be exaggerated or enlarged by the means of media. As a consequence, such fortunately accomplishments will win some reward and recognition more quickly and easily, according to the effect of critics' praise. As critics' duty is to help art flourish, their praise can also reach this goal in a delighting phenomenon.建议这一段干脆充分论证公众对评论家的依赖（个人感觉这个论点更切题，更深入），可以举美国脱口秀女王的读书节目的例子。

Why so close relationship tying in artists and critics together? The secret lies in their similar basic knowledge and almost the same working approaches.  Who care artists' works in extreme degree are critics, while critics' objectives are bound to of artists or artists themselves? In such mutual connected net, one lasting value artistic accomplishment's birth must contain efforts from both artists and critics. In such sense, dividing the critics from artists when evaluating some works' value breaks the nature link between artists and critics.这一段是不是有点儿跑题了？

All in all, artists and critics make progress in art development shoulder by shoulder. So it is not fair to ascribe the success only to artists, ignoring the companions or enemies of artists, the critics.
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gzl840414UID: 190815

真的都是很精辟的建议呀,
19号就考啦,急呀!先拜访一下你的文章
老美的原文指:280篇吗?

谢谢

fishjoyUID: 2116013

Originally posted by gzl840414 at 2005-8-3 15:41
真的都是很精辟的建议呀,
19号就考啦,急呀!先拜访一下你的文章
老美的原文指:280篇吗?

谢谢

就是老外280:)

gzl840414UID: 190815

你的作文让人看的很舒服