issue197 G89-互助社- 8。9日作业 5555又是写完了不见了一半，我怎么老是遇到阿

polymathUID：179557

ding  ！:)

逗逗UID：173558

I completely agree the speaker's assertion that the material progress and well-being of one country are surely correlated with all other countries. It is just like human beings who may independence （？） in remote antiquity but must comminuted with each other and influenced by each other in modern days.（没看明白为什么以前不需要，还是直接引出观点比较好） No one can claim that he can live out of society. The same is the country, especially in today's time.

First, let us come to the aspect of economy which can best bolster the speakers' assertion. With the markets globalizing, the connection between countries are becoming more and more tighten. No single country can developed if they close their doors and （缺动词）without transaction with other countries. The founded organization-WTO-is a typical representative to show how large benefit can be made by corporation. Moreover, a country's economic fluctuation will influence not only her but the whole world, especially large countries. I cannot find better example than America. Assuming America meets a growth period of economy, it is surely those investors, and both foreigners and residents will invest in America because of the bandwagon effect （羊群效应？我怎么感觉用在这不是很合适？）that will push American economy further growth. In the contrary, the amounts of other countries investments will decrease while lower the growth rate. After a period time of growth, the price level of America will raise up, and floating exchange rate will increase ($/others). （这样说来是美元贬值哦/不要随便推测吧，GDP还要升高呢？）This will results in decrease in American exports and increase in imports,（恩，又是升值的效应？） and increases other countries' growth rate. The event, which happens in every country and frequent, show that one country's small change in economy will influence other countries. （这个经济案例有点混乱啊，XY，把范围缩小就不会有那么多漏洞了）

Another example is about a hot topic in those days-the RMB value. Whether RMB should appreciation? How much percentage? When to carry it out? Why the RMB value became one of the hottest topics among whole world, not only in China? It is because changes in the value of RMB will influence not only China but also every country. Let us come to a assumption that RMB appreciate its value. What will happen? The exchange rate(￥/others) will increase which will result in decrease in exports and will lighten the express on some countries' trade deficit with China, like America. However, if the change in RMB value is not property, such as too sharply, Chinese residents will feel uneasy, and moreover, the Chinese economic system may be shaking（有这种表达吗 我不知道）. That is not only a dangerous thing to China but also to the whole world. Those countries which want to benefit from the appreciation may not receive but also lose a treasure land to make much more profits. That is why most of economic policies must be made curiously.（最后一句扯远了。这种例子举一个说清楚就好，不要堆砌，而且不要那么罗嗦）



Second, the science researches which conducted by one or more countries can also support the assertion. With rapid improvement in science technologies and knowledges, some researches which are carried out by some certain countries contribute to stable our society. For instance, the research about ADIS which is conducted firstly by western countries teaches us some knowledges about ADIS. After we know the way ADIS infects, the fears of it lightened. Moreover, it helps us to correctly face ADIS patients and give our loves and helps to them which decrease the possibility of rebellion made by those patients who feel despair if they go on to feel discriminations like past. 这个例子各句子间联系不紧，感觉有点散）The research, in some extend, contribute to the well-being of the entire world not the countries that do it only. Additionally, the environment problems are also all countries problems. One country’s pollution will affect other countries and the human beings. Such as air pollution, which destroy the Ozone Layer, harm the human beings healthy. （这个例子可以多花点笔墨）

To sum up, I strongly bolster the speaker's assertion that one country's behaviors will surely influence the whole world. That is why our human beings should unit together to develop and defend ourselves to protect human beings from unforeseen dangers.


说一下感觉，例子是支持论点的 ，不要为了凑字数。而且不要摆在那就算了，想下怎么把论点结合起来
对句子之间的有效连接重视不够，有的读起很散，甚至扯到一边了
时间紧也要加油，我最近可能看A提纲，时间不多，你就和你们组的多互助，见谅！

mvpzhuangUID：205051

谢谢 还是组长好！改得好仔细！！

mvpzhuangUID：205051

偶的一休阿。。。。。。何时能入大堂阿
5555

CrucifyUID：2126970

加油!

mvpzhuangUID：205051

绝处逢生阿！！！