argument41 G-89-互助社-13日同主题写作

keeyangUID：2120118

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Such non-mainstream inquiry play an important role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science.

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The speaker asserts that such non-mainstream inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits serves to satisfy human needs that can not be addressed by mainstream science, however, in my view, such research activity performs poor in its function, either in attaining its scientific goal or in fulfilling its social duty, and thus is of little value to the society.

First, let us examine its scientific goal –that is to explore the unknown. All non-mainstream inquiry will define it as a pioneer scientific activity and aims to satisfy the curiosity of human being and the desire for certainty. I concede that those so-called pioneer science shares something with our traditional science. A researcher commented on astrology -one of the most popular non-mainstream science (and I paraphrase):"They (he refers to Ancient Chinese and Greek) observed that the activity of the astronomical bodies, especially the sun, affected the output of their corn. Bases on this observation, they believed that every star and their position represents and reflects one aspects of the human activity. And this is how the astrology developed."
I should add that it is also the start of astronomy –one of the traditional sciences. This example reveals the fundamental difference between mainstream science and non-mainstream one. Astrology simply tells a correlation between the sun and the agriculture activity and extends this correlation to every condition; while astronomy tries to establish a cause-effect relationship between them by stating that the sun affects the climate and eventually exerts an influence on the agriculture activity. Another difference between them is that the result of traditional science is repeatable and objective while one can never expect what would happen by the theory of non-mainstream inquiry. For example, in the psychic experiment, no one can repeat the same result even under the identical condition. Lacking cause-effect relationship and repeatability, non-mainstream science fails to predicate the future or gives conflicting results. Therefore, it does nothing to improve our understanding of the world, let alone to guide our actions.

Another reason why numerous people embrace the non-mainstream science is to gain psychological satisfaction, which, unfortunately, it also fails to address. An advocate of astrology argues:“ The astrology may be wrong, but it is the only plausible theory to predicate the future so far available.” However, if it forecast a bright future, one will just wait for it without any effort because such success is predetermined with some paranormal forces. On the contrary, when facing a disappointing prediction, he/her may give up any positive actions since failure is inevitable. Moreover, excessive belief in non-mainstream science and the desire to defend it often leads to self-deception and illusion which greatly affect the normal life of the participants. Especially, participants in psychic research often mistake something unknown for the divine of the soul which turn out to be special optic phenomena under pecular condition. In short, adherence to the non-mainstream doctrine, one will lose the ability to think independently and the courage to make choices in the real life and develop a distorted cognition of the world.

In sum, non-mainstream inquiry cannot stand as a believable science due to lack of causal relationship and the use of logic, which determines its trivial value in the exploration of the nature. Its unscientific nature determines that non-mainstream science fails to carry out its social function as well. In final analysis, I will propose that we should admit that traditional science has limits, however, only by developing it, can science plays its vital role in the society.

dennyaimarUID：191857

这几天写的太少了
不过改还是要改的
改了一遍和写过一样呵呵
等等贴

dennyaimarUID：191857

The speaker asserts that such non-mainstream inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits serves to satisfy human needs that can not be addressed by mainstream science, however, in my view, such research activity performs poor in its function, either in attaining its scientific goal or in fulfilling its social duty, and thus is of little value to the society.

First, let us examine its scientific goal –that is to explore the unknown. All non-mainstream inquiry will define it(这个it指代什么我没看出来，如果是non-mainstream inquiry应该改为themselves ) as a pioneer scientific activity and aims to satisfy the curiosity of human being and the desire for certainty. I concede that those so-called pioneer sciences share something with our traditional science. A researcher commented on astrology -one of the most popular non-mainstream sciences (and I paraphrase):"They (he refers to Ancient Chinese and Greek) observed that the activity of the astronomical bodies, especially the sun, affected the output of their corn. Bases on this observation, they believed that every star and their position represents and reflects one aspects of the human activity. And this is how the astrology developed." （这个起源说法正确吗？如果是的话可以借鉴一下，别是编的 哦~~）

I should add that it is also the start of astronomy –one of the traditional sciences. This example reveals the fundamental difference between mainstream science and non-mainstream one. Astrology simply tells a correlation between the sun and the agriculture activity and extends this correlation to every condition; while astronomy tries to establish a cause-effect relationship between them by stating that the sun affects the climate and eventually exerts an influence on the agriculture activity. Another difference between them is that the result of traditional science is repeatable and objective while one can never expect what would happen by the theory of non-mainstream inquiry. For example, in the psychic experiment, no one can repeat the same result even under the identical condition. Lacking cause-effect relationship and repeatability, non-mainstream science fails to predicate the future or gives conflicting results. Therefore, it does nothing to improve our understanding of the world, let alone to guide our actions.

Another reason why numerous people embrace the non-mainstream science is to gain psychological satisfaction, which, unfortunately, it also fails to address. An advocate of astrology argues:“ The astrology may be wrong, but it is the only plausible（改为specious似是而非的,,plausible意思是似是的，也就是好象是对的，没有说错了，有区别） theory to predicate the future so far available.” However, if it forecast a bright future, one will just wait for it without any effort because such success is predetermined with some paranormal forces. On the contrary, when facing a disappointing prediction, he/her may give up any positive actions since failure is inevitable. Moreover, excessive belief in non-mainstream science and the desire to defend it often leads to self-deception and illusion which greatly affect the normal life of the participants. Especially, participants in psychic research often mistake something unknown for the divine of the soul which turns out to be special optic phenomena under peculiar condition. In short, adherence to the non-mainstream doctrine, one will lose the ability to think independently and the courage to make choices in the real life and develop a distorted cognition of the world.

In sum, non-mainstream inquiry cannot stand as a believable science due to lack of causal relationship and the use of logic, which determines its trivial value in the exploration of the nature. Its unscientific nature determines that non-mainstream science fails to carry out its social function as well. In final analysis, I will propose that we should admit that traditional science has limits. However, only by developing it, can science plays its vital role in the society.

你的文章有一点问题
1.没有很好的扣紧题目，文章应该主要论述non在satisfy方面的作用，你只花了小篇幅去论述
2. non就不算是science,the speaker也没有说他在科学方面什么重要性，当然你去论述astrology对astronomy的作用没有错，但是para2你花篇幅说了他没有科学意义，这个就浪费了，没把笔墨花到重点上
3.题目有3个non,你只说了astrology一个，以偏盖全的嫌疑
要注意 啊
扣题最关键

fairy115UID：200324

不好意思~~我的疏忽！

keeyangUID：2120118

A researcher commented on astrology -one of the most popular non-mainstream sciences (and I paraphrase):"They (he refers to Ancient Chinese and Greek) observed that the activity of the astronomical bodies, especially the sun, affected the output of their corn. Bases on this observation, they believed that every star and their position represents and reflects one aspects of the human activity. And this is how the astrology developed." （这个起源说法正确吗？如果是的话可以借鉴一下，别是编的 哦~~）

应该是正确的，在一份资料上看到的

你的文章有一点问题
1.没有很好的扣紧题目，文章应该主要论述non在satisfy方面的作用，你只花了小篇幅去论述
2. non就不算是science,the speaker也没有说他在科学方面什么重要性，当然你去论述astrology对astronomy的作用没有错，但是para2你花篇幅说了他没有科学意义，这个就浪费了，没把笔墨花到重点上
3.题目有3个non,你只说了astrology一个，以偏盖全的嫌疑
要注意 啊

我写的时候也考虑到了上面的问题，但是我又想satisfy human needs,这应该有有两方面的意思，一个是人们好奇心的需要，因为有许多现象主流科学没有解释；二是心理的需要，需要确定性什么的，所以分两方面去写了。

现在看了一些范文，也都是你说的那个意思，为了稳妥起见，找你的意见修改去了，谢谢！