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gaaraUID：200175

我能加入吗?作文水平是4分,想尽量提高到5分.

gaaraUID：200175

呵呵,那就不客气先来一篇了.由于我是考IBT的,所以作文不是185,但个人觉得没啥区别.
Should people emphasis on their appearance and fashion?

It has been said that today more and more people pay attention to their appearance and fashion. Different people hold different views on this issue because of their distinct backgrounds. For instance, some people think that an impressive appearance makes them more confident, while others consider that it is useless unless they want to waste of their time and money. In my opinion, I believe that it undoubtedly depends on which stage are you in.

In the school, it is commonly found out that most of students are wearing uniforms, short hair and no ornaments. School is where people go to get an education. All students have to do is concentrating on their studies. In addition, catching up the latest new fashion also spends a lot of money, which will cause a disadvantaging effect on their developments. Consequently, it is not necessary that people in learning pay too much attention on their appearance and fashion.

As an adult, the situation would be much more different. A good look is very important to adults because it impressed others whether in social life or working. It reflects on the truth that people are more preferable to communicate with who has an impressive appearance and fashion. Moreover, research studies show us that appearance may reflect someone’s personality. Therefore, people who are working in the company should emphasis on their appearance and fashion.

In my case, as an university student, even though a good look is also very significant for me, I think it is not reasonable to pay much attention on it because of studying.

Although some people claim that people should emphasis on their appearance and fashion, I believe that it should be dependent on which stage are you in.

[ 本帖最后由 gaara 于 2006-7-20 09:19 编辑 ]

gaaraUID：200175

练了几篇作文...发现自己问题是在于句子不够高级,而结构,语法idea都是不错的,大家有什么意见?

gaaraUID：200175

原帖由 莫名N 于 2006-7-21 12:24 发表


你所说的句子不够高级是什么概念？是指复杂程度不够？还是句式变化不够？

如果是复杂程度不够的话，我觉得你可以去看看范文，他们文章里的句子也并非一句三行.另外并不是一味地长句就是好的,更重要的是长短 ...

受教了.非常有用.

gaaraUID：200175

unsuited
adj.
不合适的

gaaraUID：200175

我觉得最好还是先真题,把错题记录,然后才是语法书...

gaaraUID：200175

D an earlier........

gaaraUID：200175

那我就狠批了...1,Chinglish..2,连接词没几个.3,语法错很多.结论,3.分.
改善方法:1,先搞清楚语法,特别是to do, doing, 单复数.2,背范文,弄清楚文章结构.3,学会合理利用连接词.目标:4分.

gaaraUID：200175

原帖由 happyjingjing92 于 2006-8-2 12:49 发表
Paleoanthropologists examine fossile remains of extinct primates, while physical anthropologists concern with ethology study the behaviour of primates in their natural settings.
请问这里的concern错 ...

concern 和 study嘛...不就成了双谓语了?

应该改为concerning?concerned?还是变成who are concerned?:O

[ 本帖最后由 gaara 于 2006-8-3 07:01 编辑 ]