issue56 永不言弃小组第五次作业 by 花生 1号

花生peanutUID: 2487804

【题目】
Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future.
【翻译】
政府应该把更多的注意力放在解决当务之急，而不是试图解决将来预期的问题上。
【提纲】
观点：平衡。当务之急和将来的问题都很重要。
1. 政府应该着力解决当务之急，如贫困，恐怖主义，环境污染，疾病，事业等等，毕竟这些问题直接威胁着人们的普遍福利。
例子：贫穷（South Asia and sub-Saharan Africa）
     失学儿童问题
2． 然而这并不意味着我们可以忽视将来预期的问题。比如人口中男女比例失调，如果不予以考虑，将来会出现一系列的社会问题如犯罪和心理问题。例子：人口比例失调（中国）
3．而且，政府如果只注重现在而忽视了长远，显然是对后代不公平的。热带森林破坏的例子，现代人无节制的污染与破坏损坏了将来人的利益。而且这样做也是目光短浅的，我们在试图解决将来预期问题的同时也会受益，比如基因工程。
4.总结

TOPIC: ISSUE56 - "Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future."
WORDS: 732
TIME: 00:53:39
DATE: 2009-2-10 11:13:42

The speaker asserts that governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future. On balance, in my eyes, whatever the immediate problems or the anticipated ones are all considerable to be solved.

Firstly, governments should focus on solving the immediate problems, such as poverty, terrorism, disease, and so forth. After all, these current problems directly threaten the general people's lives and health. Take the poverty problem as an example. Around 27-28 percent of all children in developing countries are estimated to be underweight or stunted due to poverty. The two regions that account for the bulk of the deficit are South Asia and sub-Saharan Africa. Some people might argue that in rural areas is not the case. In fact rural areas account for three in every four people living on less than one dollar a day and a similar share of the world population suffering from malnutrition. Thus, their governments should put solving this problem on agenda. If current trends continue, how can these children grow up healthily? Let alone they will make contribution to their countries in the future. Besides, the Millennium Development Goals target of halving the proportion of underweight children will also be missed by 30 million children, largely because of slow progress in South Asia and sub-Saharan Africa.

Take another example, certain governments of countries put overemphasis on developing weapons and other aspects, rather than on the currently crucial education problem. Consider, for instance, based on some data, about 72 million children of primary school age in the developing world were not in school in 2005; 57 percent of them were girls. And these are regarded as optimistic numbers. By contrast, less than one percent of what the world spent every year on weapons was needed to put every child into school by the year 2000 and yet it didn't happen. Therefore, governments should not focus their attention upon weapon which is nowadays not so crucial, but turn a deaf ear to the immediate problem, such as the education problem above.

Nevertheless, focusing on solving the immediate problems does not means that we could ignore the anticipated problems. For example, the imbalance of gender ratio has become a serious problem in china. Gender ratio of newborns refers to the ratio of male newborns to female ones. The ratio is 119.92 in the china's fifth census in 2000. That is to say at the same time 100 female infants are born, nearly 120 male newborns are born. This number is much higher than the normal ratio from 103 to 107.
Although this imbalance of gender ratio of which the influence has not yet been on display now belongs to the anticipated problem, Chinese government should take measures to solve the problem step by step from now on. Otherwise, If the high ratio remains unchanged, the so called" marriage squeeze" problem will emerge, in other words, some young men cannot find spouses. At the same time, a series of negative social problems including rise of bachelors, increase of sex outside marriage and human abduction will be triggered.

Finally, if governments focus on immediate interests but ignore long-term interests, it is apparently unfair to our offspring. Take environmental problem as an example. As we all know, the atmosphere and oceans are not the only parts of the environment being damaged. Rain forests are being quickly destroyed as well, and their survival is questionable. Assume that if we unconscionably pollute the environment and exhaust the resource, like the rain forests, how our offspring can survive in this planet. How will they complain their ancestors? Thus, we have a responsibility to protect the environment and resource not only for our survival but for the offspring's. Furthermore, when we are trying to solve the anticipated problems, at the same time, we can also benefit from it. For example, we can use genetic engineering to make many aspects of human life better, including saving lives: to cure diseases at the DNA level. This method is known as biotechnology and can aid in the treatment of diseases like hormone deficiency.

To sum up, governments should not only focus more on solving the immediate problems but also solve the anticipated problems. They should use a long-term vision to see problem and have a responsibility to make us and our offspring live better.

grekokomoUID: 2441677

The speaker asserts that governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future. On balance, in my eyes(personal perspective of view), whatever(no matter what) the immediate problems or the anticipated ones are all considerable to be solved.

Firstly, governments should focus on solving the immediate problems, such as poverty, terrorism, disease, and so forth. After all, these current problems directly threaten the general(ordinary) people's lives and health. Take the poverty problem as an example. Around 27-28 percent of all children in developing countries are estimated to be underweight or stunted due to poverty. The two regions that account for the bulk of the deficit are South Asia and sub-Saharan Africa. Some people might argue that in rural areas is not the case.(this is not true OR the same) In fact rural areas account for three in every four people living on less than one dollar a day and a similar share of the world population suffering from malnutrition. Thus, their governments should put solving(删去) this problem on agenda. If current trends continue, how can these children grow up healthily? Let alone they will(would) make contribution to their countries in the future. Besides, the Millennium Development Goals target of halving the proportion of underweight children will also be missed by 30 million children, largely because of slow progress in South Asia and sub-Saharan Africa.

(Let us)Take another example, certain governments of countries put overemphasis on developing weapons and other aspects, rather than on the currently crucial education problem. Consider(删去), for instance, based on some data, about 72 million children of primary school age in the developing world were not (attedd the school)in school in 2005; 57 percent of them were girls. And these are regarded as optimistic numbers. By contrast, less than one percent of what the world spent every year on weapons was needed to put every child into school by the year 2000 and yet it didn't happen. Therefore, governments should not focus their attention upon weapon which is nowadays not so crucial, but turn a deaf ear to the immediate problem, such as the education problem above.

Nevertheless, focusing on solving the immediate problems does not means(mean) that we could ignore the anticipated problems. For example, the imbalance of gender ratio has become a serious problem in china.(大写) Gender ratio of newborns refers to the ratio of male newborns to female ones. The ratio is 119.92 in the china's fifth census in 2000. That is to say at the same time 100 female infants are born, nearly 120 male newborns are born. This number is much higher than the normal ratio from 103 to 107.
Although this imbalance of gender ratio of which the influence(语序!the influence of the imbalance gender ratio) has not yet been on display now belongs to the anticipated problem, Chinese government should take measures to solve the problem step by step from now on. Otherwise, If the high ratio remains unchanged, the so called" marriage squeeze" problem will emerge (emerge in), in other words, some young men cannot find spouses. At the same time, a series of negative social problems including rise of bachelors, increase of sex outside marriage and human abduction will be triggered.

Finally, if governments focus on immediate interests but ignore long-term interests, it is apparently unfair to our offsprings. Take environmental problem as an example. As we all know, the atmosphere and oceans are not the only parts of the environment being damaged. Rain forests are being quickly destroyed as well, and their survival is questionable. Assume that if we unconscionably pollute the environment and exhaust the resource, like the rain forests, how our offspring can survive in this planet. How will they complain their ancestors? Thus, we have a responsibility to protect the environment and resource not only for our survival but for the offspring's.(+sake) Furthermore, when we are trying to solve the anticipated problems, at the same time, we can also benefit from it(as well). For example, we can use genetic engineering to make many aspects of human life better, including saving lives: to cure diseases at the DNA level. This method is known as biotechnology and can aid in the treatment of diseases like hormone deficiency.

To sum up, governments should not only focus more on solving the immediate problems but also solve the anticipated problems. They should use a long-term vision to see problem and have a responsibility to make us and our offspring live better.

结尾和开头过于简略,其余还好,继续加油!

grekokomoUID: 2441677

字数赞~

saavedroUID: 2423190

TOPIC: ISSUE56 - "Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future."
WORDS: 732
TIME: 00:53:39
DATE: 2009-2-10 11:13:42  （能把字数在50多分钟内练到这个地步，可以说楼主的写作语言能力已经基本没有大碍了。）

The speaker asserts that governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future. On balance, in my eyes, whatever the immediate problems or the anticipated ones are all considerable to be solved. （开头简单的复述题目，然后提出自己的看法。）

Firstly, governments should focus on solving the immediate problems, such as poverty, terrorism, disease, and so forth. After all, these current problems directly threaten the general people's lives and health. Take the poverty problem as an example. Around 27-28 percent of all children in developing countries are estimated to be underweight or stunted due to poverty. The two regions that account for the bulk of the deficit（不错，这个用得好） are South Asia and sub-Saharan Africa. Some people might argue that in rural areas is not the case. In fact rural areas account for three in every four people living on less than one dollar a day and a similar share of the world population suffering from malnutrition. Thus, their governments should put solving this problem on agenda. If current trends continue, how can these children grow up healthily? Let alone（let alone一般只能用在分句里，不能独立成句引导在句首，这里有个小错误。） they will make contribution to their countries in the future. Besides, the Millennium Development Goals target of halving the proportion of underweight children will also be missed by 30 million children, largely because of slow progress in South Asia and sub-Saharan Africa.   （刚看了楼主的第一段就觉得楼主写的真的不错。本段落主要讲了政府要解决当前迫在眉睫的问题的重要性，举了很多发展中国家如在South Asia and sub-Saharan Africa的儿童营养不良问题。 但是后面你说they will make contribution to their countries  我觉得应该上升到社会责任还有全球“标准”一体化上。这样更趋于“大同化”效果会更好些。因为题目说的是政府。。。 而不仅仅是这个地方的政府，所以这个例子只是为了距离来论证你的TS，但是为了更加具有信服力的话，我认为应该上升到全球社会，全球人类生存以及人类同胞责任这个层面上，是不是好点？具体的你加我QQ：658561，我和你探讨探讨哈。）

Take another example, certain governments of countries put overemphasis on developing weapons and other aspects, rather than on the currently crucial education problem. Consider, for instance, based on some data, about 72 million children of primary school age in the developing world were not in school in 2005; 57 percent of them were girls. And（用even是不是更好些？） these are regarded as optimistic numbers. By contrast, less than one percent （这里是不是少个主词，例如resources or powers???） of what the world spent every year on weapons was needed to put every child into school by the year 2000 and yet it didn't happen. Therefore, governments should not focus their attention upon weapon which is nowadays not so crucial, but turn a deaf ear to（置若罔闻！！！  好短语，这个可是四六级的经典短语。赞！！！） the immediate problem, such as the education problem above.

Nevertheless, focusing on solving the immediate problems does not means that we could ignore the anticipated problems. （峰回笔转，开始分析反面，不错~~~ TS也十分简洁到位！！！）For example, the imbalance of gender ratio has become a serious problem in china. Gender ratio of newborns refers to the ratio of male newborns to female ones. The ratio is 119.92 in the china's fifth census in 2000. That is to say at the same time 100 female infants are born, nearly 120 male newborns are born. This number is much higher than the normal ratio from 103 to 107.（这个例子举的到时很有新意） Although this imbalance of gender ratio of which the influence has not yet been on display now belongs to the anticipated problem, Chinese government should take measures to solve the problem step by step from now on. Otherwise, If the high ratio remains unchanged, the so called" marriage squeeze" problem will emerge, in other words, some young men cannot find spouses. At the same time, a series of negative social problems including rise of bachelors（不错，引入了当代剩男剩女的概念~~~ 赞！！！）, increase of sex outside marriage and human abduction（这都出来了！！！ 很有前瞻性啊！！！） will be triggered.   这一段的语言很朴实，但是却很有力量，楼主令我打开眼见，我原本以为只有以我以前那样满是GRE词汇+学术长难句才能靠语言征服人，没想到今天看了你的文章，终于体会到了平滑朴实而铿锵有力，掷地有声的语言表达的力量，深入人心，久而不绝。  有时间一定要和楼主好好谈谈。 楼主的语言写作风格和我完全不同，但是效果却远远超越了当时的我，我自己好比是激发发动全身力量，而楼主谈笑间施展神功却非我之所能也。拜服，拜服！！！

Finally, if governments focus on immediate interests but ignore long-term interests, it is apparently unfair to our offspring. Take environmental problem as an example. As we all know, the atmosphere and oceans are not the only parts of the environment being damaged. Rain forests are being quickly destroyed as well, and their survival is questionable. Assume that if we unconscionably pollute the environment and exhaust the resource, like the rain forests, how our offspring can survive in this planet. How will they complain（我觉得用这个词不大好，应该用惋惜一类的词更合适，这样能唤起读者意识从而产生与作者心灵交流的共鸣） their ancestors? Thus, we have a responsibility to protect the environment and resource not only for our survival but for the offspring's. Furthermore, when we are trying to solve the anticipated problems, at the same time, we can also benefit from it.（分论点在上面叙述后托盘而出，很好~~~  楼主结构掌握也不错~~~  ） For example, we can use genetic engineering to make many aspects of human life better, including saving lives: to cure diseases at the DNA level. This method is known as biotechnology and can aid in the treatment of diseases like hormone deficiency.（嗯，用这个例子，真的很有说服力~~~  不错 整篇文章楼主细节和主题搭配真的不错，细节能深入到位，主题铿锵有力。。。   赞！！！）

To sum up, governments should not only focus more on solving the immediate problems but also solve the anticipated problems. They should use a long-term vision to see problem and have a responsibility to make us and our offspring live better. （结尾和开头一样简洁，作用也很明显。 这篇文章真的做到了主题清晰，论证详实，语言多变，结构完整。老实说，我很久没有看到这样的文章了。 楼主对于整体ISSUE的把握真的很不错。不知道还有多久要考试呢？ 我觉得楼主只要坚持把ISSUE高频机经题目准备好就可以了。 楼主的思路真的很不错，语言能力也颇为大牛。。。 如果能在考场上写出这篇文章的话，我相信分数一定很高！！！   楼主加我QQ：658561  有时间我们多聊聊，我也得向你多学习学习朴素语言表达的魅力。）

corpuscleUID: 2503411

贫穷和环境破坏应该是长远问题
你的第一段把环境问题归结为当前危机，第三段又把环境问题当长远问题来对待，前后矛盾
最近事情太多，精力上顾不上来，平时多练习多修改多看前人习作吧