请大家帮我改改吧。。。。。。多谢

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感觉有点跑题，望各位指点....






题目：ISSUE221 - "The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."
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日期：2009-9-5

Does the study of history break down the illusion that people in on period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history? The author claims so. I strongly agree with the author's point of view, considering that human nature at the bottom of people's heart have never changed through time.

Admittedly, under the running of the wheel of history, all aspects of the world, including environment conditions, economy situations or belief people trust in, look quite different from time to time. It is obvious that from ancient time to the modern society, people live on the same earth, but in far away different worlds. When we open the history book to the ancient pages, people live in caves were chasing no more but foods and water. At that time, survival was their theme of life. And let us look no further than the houses we live in nowadays. Arts, entertainments, boring soaps are filled with our days. At this time, survival becomes the bottom line of our living. People changed, not only the way they live but also the pursuits they have. So it is clearly that history informs us much about where we people stand and what we people behave through historical time.

Nevertheless, history also present us that well-covered human nature of pursuing happiness and chasing peace, are never changed. That is the very initial nature. History will never forget Martin Luther King and his famous speech: "I have a dream". His fighting for black people's rights and peaceful living revealed not only one color race’s beautiful wishes but also the whole human being's original human nature. When it comes to another period of time: nuclear era, the song of people's beautiful dreams can still be heard all the time, all over the world. Countries gathered together to solve the problem of nuclear weapon, which could destroy the earth, with one dream. Though they have different political opinions or even they are enemies, the same dream made them sit down together. Study history, and then find that is the true human nature, which stays still, through years we may not able to count.

Furthermore, that the most important born character we carry can not be ignored is love. Look back upon the history, whether in literature or movies, love, though in different roles and backgrounds, is eternal. For instance, love, whether from "Hamlet" in Shakespeare time or "Forrest Gump" in modern society movie is of no differences, though there are such many differences in the forms of presenting, scene of acting, and stories they were telling us. Unless coming to the end of the universe do we lack the feeling of love. Love, various with couple, with relatives or with ourselves, never flyblow dust in the history.

To sum up, I agree with the author that studying of history can absolutely break down the illusion that people are different from times to times. It is history that bring us to deeply into people ourselves to find the true initial human nature, which is the pearl always shining among the necklace of history.

stanzyUID: 2629386

Does the study of history break down the illusion that people in on period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history? The author claims so. I strongly agree with the author's point of view, considering that human nature at the bottom of people's heart have never changed through time.

Admittedly, under the running of the wheel of history, all aspects of the world, including environment conditions, economy situations or belief people trust in, look quite different from time to time. It is obvious that from ancient time to the modern society, people live on the same earth, but in far away different worlds. When we open the history book to the ancient pages, people live in caves were chasing no more but foods and water. At that time, survival was their theme of life. And let us look no further than the houses we live in nowadays. Arts, entertainments, boring soap operas are filled with our days. At this time, survival has become the bottom line of our living. People changed, not only the way they live but also the pursuits they have. So it is clearly that history informs us much about where  people stand and what  people behave through historical time.

Nevertheless, history also present us that well-covered(?)  human nature of pursuing happiness and chasing peace, are never changed. That is the very initial nature. History will never forget Martin Luther King and his famous speech: "I have a dream". His fighting for black people's rights and peaceful living revealed not only one color race’s beautiful wishes but also the whole human being's original human nature. When it comes to another period of time: nuclear era, the song of people's beautiful dreams can still be heard all the time, all over the world. Countries gathered together to solve the problem of nuclear weapon, which could destroy the earth, with one dream. Though they have different political opinions or even they are enemies, the same dream made them sit down together. Study history, and then find that is the true human nature, which stays still, through years we may not able to count.

Furthermore,  what the most important born character we carry can not be  ignored is love. Look back upon the history, whether in literature or movies, love, though in different roles and backgrounds, is eternal. For instance, love, whether from "Hamlet" in Shakespeare time or "Forrest Gump" in modern society movie is of no differences, though there are such many differences in the forms of presenting, scene of acting, and stories they were telling us. Unless coming to the end of the universe do we lack the feeling of love. Love, various with couple, with relatives or with ourselves, never flyblow dust in the history.

To sum up, I agree with the author that studying of history can absolutely break down the illusion that people are different from times to times. It is history that bring us to deeply into people ourselves to find the true initial human nature, which is the pearl always shining among the necklace of history.

stanzyUID: 2629386

改了一点。不知道为什么，我现在写Issue总是受Argument的影响。所以我看到你写哈姆雷特和阿甘正传作比较的时候总想这两个有关系吗？说实话，对于这篇Issue，我也倾向于赞同Speaker的论断，可是我不知道怎么才能证明我的主张。我想如果说改进的话，也许不用Nevertheless 和Furthermore这样的词更好。因为吧......可能使我没读懂的缘故，我觉得这里并不是有很强的逻辑关系。只要平铺直叙就好：）
总体来讲我还是很喜欢这篇文章。起码句子我都能看懂..........