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TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 634          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2009-9-15 15:46:31

In this soceity that quite values individuality and uniqueness, increasing number of people believe that education should be specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests. It is true that this kind of education can help student develop in their most talented field and find their own positions in society, but this kind of education also contains several disadvantages that make it difficult to realize at present.

Education meets students from vastly different backgrounds with various interest, habits and abilities, a fact that gives increasing urgency to the need to design a specific education in accordance to personal conditions. Every student has his or her strong points and weak points, no one would expect a student with as much music talent as Mozart to study complicated mathematics knowledge and few would like to see a student with great gift for science struggling in the Shakespere's literature. Education specifically designed can help students develop at the field which they are good at, only in this way, can students give full rein to their abilities and make contribution to the society. If Mozart was forced to study mathematics at his early age, he may not have time to develop his music talent, and the final result would be a loss of a great musician.

It is important for education at any level to teach students all kinds of knowledge, and people may satisfy with the siuation where lots of students sit in a large classroom, listening to what their teacher says in the front. However, stuffing students' heads full of knowledge is far from being a truly effective education. Genuine education, as Socrates said, should not be inserting information into a person, but rather, eliciting what is in the mind. Students think differently and they should be given a kind of education that can extract different passion, emotions and desires from them, helping them find their individuality and take their own position in the adult world. Traditional eduction treats every student as the same individual, but education which is specifically designed can take students' different emotions and needs into consideration, thus helping students find their own way to success.

However, it should be realized that this kind of education is not perfect. First and foremost, the cost of establishing such kind of education can be very large. There must be sufficient teachers to teach each student and these teachers must have the strong ability to find the individual needs and interests of each student. Special curriculums should be set for every student, each particular mind should be cared for and every interest of student must be paid attention to. The cost, both tangible and intangible, may beyond the ability of present education system. Another potential disadvantage of this specific education lies in that, when each student is put in an education that is particularly designed for him or her, the student may only live in his or her own world and do not realize that there are many students holding different opinions, values and desires living in the same world. They may grow up to be an ego -- centered person who cares little about what other people think and behave. Traditional education gives students opportunities to communicate and cooperate with different students and from this students gradually learn the importance of tolerance and the way to get along with other people. However, the specifically designed education fails to do that.
In conclusion, designing education according to the particular conditions of students can better meet the individual needs and interests of student and help them find their own way to grow up to be a qualified and competent adult. However, the large cost and the potential harm of this kind of education should be taken into consideration when people are trying to reform the education.

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So what is your position exactly:  individualized education has disadvantages or individualized education is not applicable?  Articulate your thesis.  
Who is to say Mozart won't make a good Mathematician if he chooses to do so?  Hundreds of students sitting in a large classroom is perhaps a Chinese phenomenon; I doubt graders would be able to relate to that.  Formularized education doesn't have to put hundreds of people together in a crowded room:  a state imposed curriculum taught one-to-one is still not exactly an individualized education.  

Last passage is not pertinent to the argument at hand.  The question asks you to compare two schools of education philosophy, rather than make an assessment of their feasibility.  That individualized education is costly hardly undermines its efficacy.

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4# cjtramell
谢谢!!貌似一无是处…… 好打击。
恩~ 我的观点是specific education好，只是实现起来困难。所以才有最后一段，这样算跑题么？？

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5# 夏の末

Don't mean to upset you.  You are obviously a good writer.  Just pay some attention to argumentation and you'll be fine.  You should have no problem shooting for a 5, I think.  Good luck.

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6# cjtramell

I think you have pointed out my greatest weakness. I always try to strike a balance in my essay and take a neutral position that I have lost my side!! So I should clearly present my point of view, am I right? I think your advices are valuable. I am just trying to revise this essay. Merci~~