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darkrenUID: 2510587

TOPIC: ISSUE154 - "Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."
WORDS: 621
TIME: 00:40:00
DATE: 2009/9/15 11:46:32

In the temporary society, education has become a significant issue to all of us. As we know, the parents are the first teachers for the children, therefore many people claim that parents and communities must be involved in the education and should not leave all the education work to the professional educators. As I think, granted that parents and communities are important to the children development and education, the professional educators are still the best people who should take charge of the students' education.

The professional educators are those who equip professional knowledge and experience of education. Because the educators have been trained to acquire enough knowledge, they have better understanding of what the students really need or what the students really lack of. Therefore, they can devote enough time and make full use of their professional skills to help the students full fill their dreams. Moreover, the educators usually act as friends or physicians in order to help the students to solve problems. Usually, we can see many young people are not willing to discuss their ideas with their parents, instead they prefer to share some secrets with their friends or physicians. Hence, the educators may be a good listener to the Youngs. And with the educators help, it is promising that the students may have a better understanding of the situation and acquire a suitable solution to the problems. As well, the educators and schools can provide fair chances for every student without prejudice. This will bring every student a platform to develop themselves with confidence. Shortly speaking, I think the educators are good choices for being responsible to the students' education for their professional knowledge and experience.

On the other hands, parents and communities sometimes may bring some problems to the children and the education process even if they were willing to help. It is common that many parents are so confident of their children that they unconsciously ignore the defects of their children. Thus the students may lose the chance to improve themselves if they are always under the charge of their parents. Furthermore, if the parents care too much and offer too much help to the children, this may destroy the chance which lets the children learn how to be independent. No matter how, the children will grow up one day, they have to step to the society and cannot stay in the shelter of their parents forever. Thus, too much cares may like poison which stops the children moving forward. And about the communities, they have too much work to do and have not enough energy to help every student. Hence, without individually encourage and cultivate, it is possible the students' potential cannot be fully developed at last. In sum, compared to the educators, parents and communities sometimes may not really help the students to develop better.

It is true, that parents are the first teachers in the children's lives. They offer the basic knowledge and understanding to the children, as Edison's mother who taught young Edison all the basic rule of the world, which contributed to the famous inventor in the future. But we should also realize the fact that the parents cannot always be in charge of their children's education, because they are lack of enough professional knowledge and experience to cultivate the children. Shortly, parents are part of the education process, but they are not the most important factor.

On the whole, education is significant not only to the students but also to the whole society. And the educators are professional and suitable for being responsible to the education tasks. The parents and communities are important to the education as well, but they should not always involved in and interfere the process.


TOPIC: ARGUMENT142 - The article entitled 'Eating Iron' in last month's issue of Eating for Health reported that a recent study found a correlation between high levels of iron in the diet and an increased risk of heart disease. Further, it is well established that there is a link between large amounts of red meat in the diet and heart disease, and red meat is high in iron. On the basis of the study and the well-established link between red meat and heart disease, we can conclude that the correlation between high iron levels and heart disease, then, is most probably a function of the correlation between red meat and heart disease.
WORDS: 453
TIME: 00:30:00
DATE: 2009/9/15 11:46:32

The author asserts that diet with more red meat means higher risk of heart disease. The author says there is a study shows high levels of iron in the diet has great chance to cause the heart disease; and because of the high levels of iron rate in red meat, it possibly has a correlation between red meat and heart disease. However, the proving process seems logical and convincible, with overall consideration, I find several flaws in the proof.

First of all, the author fails to provide details about the study of the relation between the iron and heart disease. Such as what does it mean by high levels of iron? What is the "high levels" precisely mean? And how much do the high levels of iron contribute to the high risk of heart disease? It is possible that the high levels mean the amount that may not be digested by the human body and will be poisonous to human. And commonly in daily diet it is hard to accumulate such amount of iron. Probably that we have great amount of iron but only contribute a little to the heart disease. Therefore, without more details and information, I cannot have clear enough realization about the correlation between the iron and heart disease.

Moreover, the author implies that because iron level is high in red meat, which leads to high risk of heart disease if people have much red meat as diet. However, the author does not provide any information about the actual amount of the percentage of iron the red meat contains. Perhaps that the red meat only contains a little more iron than other food, however which does not reach the level results high risk of heart disease. Shortly, without more information, we cannot easily relate the so-called high levels of iron in red meat to heart disease.

Another important factor, which the author only concentrate on the relation between the iron and heart disease, but how about other elements and factors? It is possible that the red meat contains not only the high levels of iron, but also many other nutrition, elements and minerals, which may be helpful to the heart and reduce the risk of heart disease. In sum, if the author wants to prove the red meat is related to the high risk of heart disease, the author should make more research about the red meat, and should not arbitrarily reach the conclusion with only one factor.

On the whole, it is possible that high levels in diet may raise the risk of heart disease. However, without more details and information, it is not easy to accept the author's conclusion for it still remains much confusion.

darkrenUID: 2510587

TOPIC: ISSUE238 - "Conformity almost always leads to a deadening of individual creativity and energy."
WORDS: 563          TIME: 00:40:00          DATE: 2009/9/15 20:48:56

Nowadays, there are lots of principles to follow. When a person is born, the destiny of the people may be more or less determined and similar to others. People go to the schools to have the conformed education process, people go to work under the similar rules, and people live with the watch by the same government. It is said that too much conformity means a deadening of individual creativity and energy, I think this conclusion relatively acceptable.

Individual creativity is important not only for the person himself/herself but also means a lot to the whole society. We can recall lots of famous people, whose individual power and charm brought us a much brighter and more convenient world. Such as the Da Vince who was strange to most other people during his time. However because of his individual creativity and energy, lots of his invention and art work are still enlightening us in the temporary society. Van Gogh, who was also out of the main streams of the society. But just because he did not conform to the modern, we now can enjoy his powerful and unforgettable work. Similarly, there are lots of people who did not conform to the era, and with their talent and individual creativity, they left us lots of valuable treasure. Shortly, we can see that the individual creativity and energy is important to the society. Therefore, too much conformity may kill the creativity and bring obstacles to our progress.

Meanwhile, it will be easy to understand that if a country or government put too much rules and restriction in order to make the people conformed, it may bring great damage to the individual creativity and characteristics. Because when people lose the individual creativity, our world can hardly moving forward. If all people follow the same ideas or the same path, is it possible that there will be new ideas and inventive thinking emerge from any individuals? The answer may be obvious-impossible. Because if all people learn same classes, share same opinions, follow same instructions, believe same ideas, they may lose the abilities of thinking independently and thinking in other ways and directions. Furthermore, without new views and impacts coming into the society, it is hard to emerge any new ideas. Such as the Medieval era, the literature was controlled by the religion and government, they conformed the whole literature world. Until the Shakespeare and Dante stood out and showed different ideas, the world began to emerge more and more new and energetic masterpieces. In the sum, too much restriction and force to conform the people may bring damage to the individual creativity and characteristics.

What I discussed above is about the too much conformity effects, however we should grant that the suitable conformity may benefit us and the whole society. Nowadays, it is harder for one person to make any great inventive and creative progress. More and more new discoveries are based on lots of people's intelligence and effort. Therefore, sometimes suitable conformity may be good to our society.

On the whole, now we are staying a stage of industry like process, many people are educated by the similar way, the conformity is unavoidable. But at the same time, the society is also making efforts to encourage the individual development. Therefore, we should help to protect the individual creativity, and make use of the conformity as well.


TOPIC: ARGUMENT83 - The following appeared in a memo from the business manager of Medicine, Inc., a local drugstore.

"Most business analysts for the drugstore industry have stated that even when a nation's economy is weak, drugstores' profits are unlikely to decline appreciably. While consumers might put off some kinds of purchases when the economy is slow, prescription and over-the-counter drug purchases are dictated by consumers' health needs, which are independent of the economy. Therefore, Medicine Inc. is likely to continue to have increasing profits and should plan to open an additional drugstore next year."
WORDS: 479          TIME: 00:30:00          DATE: 2009/9/15 20:48:56

The author claims that the Medicine Inc. is likely independent of the economy, therefore he suggests that the Medicine Inc. will be continue to have increasing profits and should plan to open an additional drugstore. The assertion seems reasonable and logical, however after more consideration I find there are several flaws in the author's claim.

First of all, the author implies that the Medicine Inc. is independent of the economy. However nowadays, the global industries are involved together, seems the Medicine industry cannot be exclude. The author shows us that prescription and over-the-counter drug purchases are dictated by consumers' health needs, which are independent of the economy, therefore the profits of the drugstores are stable and hardly decline. It is true that most people concern their health very much and are willing to spend lots of money for keeping a good condition. However, it is possible because of decline of the economy, the income of people may also decline; therefore people may cut the cost on some medicine such as the pills for insomnia, or for losing weight and so on. Thus it still has chances that the number of prescription will decrease. Moreover, the drugstores are not only related to the patients but also the upper factories such as materials supporters, medicine factories. Maybe the economy has little effects on drugstores' income, but it may influence their costs. Because of the decline of economy, some materials factories may raise the price of production in order to survive, what worse, some factories may shut down. All these factors may increase the costs of the drugstores. At the same time, there are still lots of factors may impact the drugstores, such as rent of the stores, salaries of the workers, these factors will also contribute to the increase of the costs of the drugstores. In sum, the author implies that the drugstores are independent of the economy but fails to show us enough evidence, therefore the conclusion is less reliable and convincible.

Moreover, the author promises that a new drugstore will bring profits only with the support of the evidence that drugstores are independent of the economy. However, the author fails to consider other factors affect the drugstores profits. Such as government policy, it is possible that next year, the government carry out more policy of reducing the price of the drugs for the sake of the civilians' benefits. Or government may require the drugs to be tested by new method. All these factors may bring effects to the drugstores' profits. Shortly, without more support of the prospect of the drugstores next year, I cannot easily take the author's suggestion.

On the whole, seems that the author implies that the drugstores are independent of the economy and without enough evidence to support his claim. Therefore, unless the author provides us more precise data and theory, I may take his suggestion.

darkrenUID: 2510587

纯粹遗产流，如果能给任何人任何一丁点启发，偶死而无憾了~大家 fighting！！

cinderella1016UID: 2666652

The professional educators are those who equip professional knowledge and experience of education

直接用简单句好了~The professional educators are equipped with professional knowledge and experience of education~

还是打好基础再说吧。。。

darkrenUID: 2510587

4# cinderella1016
呃，各种悲剧！好的，至少保证明天不会犯这个错误！

cinderella1016UID: 2666652

先不说逻辑~~

语法、词汇用法要注意了~