美利坚第二次作业 9.26 by跑跑

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9.26 It is better to broad knowledge of many academic subjects than specialize on one specific subject.
备注：这次没有限时，因为在限时范围内 没有完成任务……

the latter one is better.
1.
from personal aspect, people are more easily to be successful;
2.
Towards social requirements, society needs those people who are specialize on one specifid subject.

Which choice is better? Should people focus their energy on extend knowledge of many academic subjects or just specialize on one exact subject? A heating discussion is emerging because each one has its own benefits. Studing more than one subject will enable them to have a broading understanding of their major while paying attention on one specific subject can let them have a deep comprehension and succeed more easily. As far as I am concerned, comparing with the advantages of each other the latter one is better. The reasons are as following.

To begin with, people who concentrate their energy on one direction are easily to stand out due to humans’ limited time and energy. Let’s just imagine the distribution of energy as diging a hole to search for water. Those who put all strengthen to dig the same hole are sure to find the water earlier than those who dig many differnent holes. In contrast, if students learn many academic courses, the results will be that they won’t learn any one well. Concerning this, why not learn a single subject?

In addition, nowadays’ requirments of society decides that specialists are more attractive. With the development of science and techology, all kinds of industiries emerges as the rain mushroom. they try their best to enhance their proficiencies in order to be the leader of their fields. As a result, the job requirements turns out to be more and more specific and coresponsingly specialist becomes their cossets, especially those international companies. Society is filled with examples which can illustrate the viewpoint above. Several years ago, accounting people were also responsible for the audit and taxing affaires whereas accounting, audit and taxing belongs to separate departments. Another example, Song shixiong, the famous emcee of CCTV-5( which is the sports channel of China Center Television) would explain all kinds of sports games including basketball, football, Pingpang and Badmiton in the last 10 years. But right now, those programs have their specialized compere to better sevice the Sports fans and adapt the social needs.

In all, although learing more academic subjects has much advantages such as a more complete academic system, it cannot compete with enormous benefits brought by focusing energy on one discipline not only from the aspect of personal development but also the social requirement. Only by developing a specific knowledge and skill, can a person succeed more quickly. And what is more, the deeper expertise people have, the stronger a nation will be.

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Which choice is better? Should people focus their energy on extend knowledge of many academic subjects or just specialize on one exact subject? A heating discussion is emerging because each one has its own benefits. Studing(studying) more than one subject will enable them to have a broading understanding of their major(s) while paying attention on one specific subject can let them have a deep comprehension and succeed more easily. As far as I am concerned, comparing with the advantages of each other the latter one is better. （这句话感觉不太顺，但我也指不出错误。不如改成comparing with the advantages of each other, I am inclined to the latter one/I agree with the latter one.）The reasons are as following.

To begin with, people who concentrate their energy on one direction are easily to stand out due to humans’ limited time and energy. Let’s just imagine the distribution of energy as diging a hole to search for water. Those who put all strengthen to dig the same hole are sure to find the water earlier than those who dig many differnent holes. (这个例子略显牵强，感觉说话不能太绝对的，不能说这个一定比那个好)In contrast, if students learn many academic courses, the results will be that they won’t learn any one well. Concerning this, why not learn a single subject?# C; z* u& x6 I; k; H% H
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In addition, nowadays’ requirments of society decides（decide） that specialists are more attractive. With the development of science and techology, all kinds of industiries emerges as the rain mushroom. they(They) try their best to enhance their proficiencies in order to be the leader of their fields. As a result, the job requirements turns(turn) out to be more and more specific and coresponsingly specialist becomes (specialists become)their cossets, especially those international companies. Society is filled with examples which can illustrate the viewpoint above. Several years ago, accounting people(=accountants) were also responsible for the audit and taxing affaires whereas accounting, audit and taxing belongs to separate departments. Another example, Song shixiong, the famous emcee of CCTV-5( which is the sports channel of China Center(Chinese central) Television) would explain all kinds of sports games including basketball, football, Pingpang and Badmiton in the last 10 years. But right now, those programs have their specialized compere to better sevice the Sports fans and adapt (to) the needs of society.' q- v9 z+ W$ Y. ?* e6 u5 Q/ D! L' _

In all, although learing more academic subjects has(have) much advantages such as a more complete academic system, it cannot compete with enormous benefits brought by focusing energy on one discipline not only from the aspect of personal development but also the social requirement. (这话有点绕，it cannot compete with enormous benefits brought by focusing energy on one discipline ，which could adjust to both personal development and the social requirement. )Only by developing a specific knowledge and skill, can a person succeed more quickly. (And what is more, the deeper expertise people have, the stronger a nation will be.这句话由于没有在前文进行过阐述，所以算是没有论点支持，可要可不要。)

总评：词汇量很大，有的单词我是查字典才知道意思的。句式多样。应该来说相当占优势吧。
            一些句子在表达方面我觉得可以再精炼一点。托福的考试不是辞藻的堆积和一味追求复杂的句式（貌似是一个作文考满分的NN说的），我觉得只要能表达自己的意思就好了，适当的要长句短句结合。
           一些单复数问题再注意一下就可以了。

P.S.  其实我给别人改作文心里特没底，或许你帮我看的那篇是我写得最好的了，其他文章都说不出充足的论点和论据。
        我上次考试也只有22分，哎~打击死人哎。
        咱一起加油吧~

janicesaUID: 2686243

9.26 It is better to broad knowledge of many academic subjects than specialize on one specific subject.
备注：这次没有限时，因为在限时范围内 没有完成任务……

the latter one is better.
1.:
from personal aspect, people are more easily to be successful;
2.(
Towards social requirements, society needs those people who are specialize on one specifid subject.

Which choice is better? Should people focus their energy on extend knowledge of many academic subjects or just specialize on one exact subject? A heating discussion is emerging because each one has its own benefits. Studing more than one subject will enable them to have a broading understanding of their major while paying attention on one specific subject can let them have a deep comprehension and succeed more easily. As far as I am concerned, comparing with the advantages of each other the latter one is better. The reasons are as following

To begin with, people who concentrate their energy on one direction are easily to stand out due to humans’ limited time and energy. Let’s just imagine the distribution of energy as diging a hole to search for water. Those who put all strengthen to dig the same hole are sure to find the water earlier than those who dig many differnent holes. In contrast, if students learn many academic courses, the results will be that they won’t learn any one well. Concerning this, why not learn a single subject?
（其实我不太看得懂你的例子）
In addition, nowadays’ requirements（单词拼写错了，我已经帮你改正确了） of society decides that specialists are more attractive. With the development of science and techology, all kinds of industiries emerges as the rain mushroom. they try their best to enhance their proficiencies in order to be the leader of their fields. As a result, the job requirements turns out to be more and more specific and coresponsingly specialist becomes their cossets（这两个单词不懂含义，标出来，你看见了给我回复下好吗）, especially those international companies. Society is filled with examples which can illustrate the viewpoint above. Several years ago, accounting people were also responsible for the audit and taxing affaires whereas accounting, audit and taxing belongs to separate departments. Another example, Song shixiong, the famous emcee of CCTV-5( which is the sports channel of China Center Television) would explain all kinds of sports games including basketball, football, Pingpang and Badmiton in the last 10 years. But right now, those programs have their specialized compere to better sevice the Sports fans and adapt the social needs.（收了）

In all, although learing more academic subjects has much advantages such as a more complete academic system, it cannot compete with enormous benefits brought by focusing energy on one discipline not only from the aspect of personal development but also the social requirement. Only by developing a specific knowledge and skill, can a person succeed more quickly. And what is more, the deeper expertise people have, the stronger a nation will be.（总结的不错）


其实我不太擅长写作文，语法不行～～