谁能分析一下issue 130

shuiing1127UID: 2406076

130"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."


为什么我觉得这篇好难写呢？谁能帮我分析一下这个题应该咋写？题目两句话之间有什么关系？分析的时候需要各占一半吗？还有这个socialized，应该怎么理解？？

下面是我写的，第二次写，郁闷的要命，总觉得有点跑题，求大家指点~~~

Socialization, in my idea, means peoplehave good relations with others. People who are born, grow up and live amongthe community shoulder the vista of the society. But it does not mean" Howchildren are socialized today determines the destiny of society". Thestatement exaggerates the effect of socialization and set a low value on oureducation inappropriately.

The destiny of society are not determinedsimply by the extent of specialization on children. On the one hand, thedestiny is not designed by any single group who live in certain time, butaffected by the whole people who live on the yesterday, today and tomorrow.people including children, young people, middle-aged people and old peoplecombining themselves with each other as a integral master determine thedirection of the society.

On the other hand, there is not positiverelation between the two factors. The opinion that more specialized peoplebring about better society is arbitrary, meanwhile some people are not socialbut do great job for the improvement of society. One professor in my school isan example of this vision. He is very shy and reclusive, which does not assortwith his achievement that he solve the problem of food supply for millions ofpeople by his hybrid rice. He is socialless yet greatly contributes to thesociety.

Comparing with the society in any othertime before, nowadays, society is undoubtedly more prosperous. In other words,the world step forward continuously from the ancient times to nowadays till thefuture. Ancestors teach descendents how to build a better society so that wecan achieve here.

The statement" Unfortunately, we havenot yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a bettersociety" is extremist. I prefer say we have been learning how to raisechildren who can help bring about a better society. People are dedicated todevelop the better education such as educational method, content and so on. Itis a consensus that the essence of education is not only teaching but alsonurturing. Children must learn the skills and technologies, which necessitate
building a better material society, as wellas study the ethic which keeps the material world on the right track. Both ofthem assure the society would go ahead.

Although someone maybe argue that there areproblems in the elementary education, they are inevitable branches of the wholeeducational tree. They do not prevent the uptrend of the bole. There is notperfect thing in the world let alone this huge subject. Fortunately, peopleexplore the solutions and improve the educational measures constantly, whichpush forward it to be suitable for children who can help bring about a bettersociety.

草木也知愁UID: 2487572

审题的问题看一下这个系列：
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... 26amp%3Btypeid%3D50

还有就是基础的写作看一下这个：
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... p%3Bfilter%3Ddigest

自己好好再去看一下awintro

swiftsongUID: 2694470

我今天也刚写了这个，发出来了，和你的思路不同，请给些意见吧。

shuiing1127UID: 2406076

谢谢斑竹，不过，请问这个 awintro 是什么意思？

swiftsong谢谢，我正在看。

草木也知愁UID: 2487572

awintro 是ETS发布的唯一官方AW介绍