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Topic：Do you agree or disagree getting university education is the most important factor for success.) o: @+ ^) A* `" h5 F


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It is generally considered that accepting university education has become one of the most universal trends and significant tasks for students in the twenty-first century; in that only in this way can students get success no matter where are they. I am one of the people who bolster this opinion, since students should be encouraged to get into their ideal universities to learn knowledge and enhance our horizon.6 M. S* u  V5 m- c3 d

The main reason involves the consideration that not only can students learn versatile knowledge, participate various activities in the leisure time but increase their perspectives as well in the university, which is good for their future development no matter where are they, for students can learn and understand various knowledge by professor’s lecture, activities of students’ Union as well as manifold books in the library. To illustrate it, I（这个地方不是用me吗？）, an university student in University Of Saskatchewan in Canada, usually spend at least three or four hours reading books which concern with my major and field in the library, and I have been influenced a lot, for I can not only understand issues of economics field, economics trend in the future, but well know the harmfulness of financial crisis in the world. Hence, it is beneficial for students to read versatile styles of books in the university, because the twenty-first century require（加s） every member must master a rich fund of knowledge and have a broad perspective in the process of working, which will make companies get much profit in the future and students can master knowledge and skills by reading books in the library of university, which is also a good foundation for their success in （不需要加the吗？）not distant future. Therefore, we can understand the necessity and importance of getting university education by seeing from examples I mentioned above.! l/ f( z  a! D" d9 O" K: Q

Secondly, accumulating social experience in the university is among the most critical factors in the society, because students are expected to participate kinds of activities in campus in the leisure time to get social experience as much as possible and cultivate themselves, which is beneficial for them to get success in the future. The particular symbolic significance and necessity of getting university education is more explicitly revealed, perhaps by the result of a study conducted by researchers David Patricia. The data and fact she presents suggest that almost eighty percent of residents claim that students ought to cultivate themselves by attending universities’ activities and organizing programs in the university. Wang Yuqi, is one of them, who points that cultivating much competence is what really counts for students, because they can accumulate much experience concerning how to get along with others, organize activities, solve complicated problems during the process of activities or programs. In brief, getting universities’ education can make students accumulate much social experience and increase their abilities of surviving in the society as well.+ x2 n& b  {5 r. [: i2 K
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Admittedly, we cannot deny that other factors, such as working abilities, working attitude, as well as learning capabilities, are also indispensable one to identify whether a student will get the success in the future. For instance, Li Jiacheng is a wealthy businessman from Hong Kong, who has become the richest person of East Asian descent in the world and never get university education in his life. He introduces his experience in newspaper and tells many stories to demonstrate his hard-working spirit during the process of working and modest remarks in learning, and he fortunately gets the success of business in the end. Additionally, he donates a sum of money to build many skyscrapers in many universities, such as University Of Hong Kong and Peking University and helps many disabled children and residents to encourage them to achieve their goal and prospect the bright life in the future. In sum, accepting universities’ education is not the only factor to get the success for students to some degrees in the modern time.  d( p0 G8 u- v3 w( [

Even though, other factors are also significant for students to get success in the modern time and profoundly affect their life, yet getting universities’ education is a perquisite for students to get success in the future, or else, they probably would not probably capable to compete with others who have studied in university to some extent. My view is that getting education in university is really necessary, in that it can make students learn versatile knowledge to get ready for success in the future, accumulate much social experience as well as increase their perspectives.' D6 i1 r/ o) |  w/ h6 d: q# E
看到这篇文章，第一感觉就是你很牛！！35分钟就能写700多字，在看看内容，也很强，思路清晰，论证准确，高级词汇很多！表达很准确！很强！我感觉我自己在看一篇例文，而不是在给别人修改作文！我自己本人的作文水平很差，所以改作文的时候不免有些失误，希望能谅解！有空能不能给我传授一下经验啊！你很强！继续加油吧！！

zhangyzzzUID: 2615373

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Topic：The parents do not understand their children as well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago. Do you agree or disagree with it? 是否同意与50年前相比，现在的小孩更不容易被父母理解
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- _: D( u5 |8 s: `  w) e6 i5 J; \It is generally considered that parents cannot understand their children as well today as parents understood their offspring 50 years ago, for children at present is more complicated than before in the twenty-first century and there are various factors, such as movie, television programs as well as fashion trend, which will largely affect children’s ordinary living and values. I am one of the people who champion(good) this standpoint, since I have had the same feeling of today’s children with the topic mentioned above.

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The main reason involves the consideration that various outcomes, for example high-tech, movies, television programs as well as fashion, will exert an important effect on children’s life and the formation of their values, which makes parents are not capable to understand them in the modern time. To illustrate it, Xinqiu Zhao, a sister of mine, who is studying at University Of Macao and extraordinarily fond of listening to music of modern signers and watching versatile entertainment programs instead of watching touching situation comedies(这个和touching搭配好像不太合适) and movies. And my parents can not understand her action and mind at all and those movies my sister watched are totally rubbish in their perspectives.

Additionally, what difference the mind between parents and children has become one of the most obvious matters in the world, since with the rapid life pace accelerating; the growing number of parents should be learned（这里我看不懂为什么要用被动） varieties of knowledge and kept up with the modern trends to smoothly cultivate their children and successfully communicate with them. Only in this way can parents ought to have a good communication with children no matter what aspects. Therefore, children are different and complicated as the development of times, which probably make a challenge for parents by seeing from examples I mentioned above.

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Another aspect of cause on children were not understood by parents at present is parents are too busy to spare（学习了） much time to communicate with their children and help them come out complicated problems concerning learning and the ordinary living. Hence, children probably make the most use of（学习了） kinds of approaches, such as Internet chatting with friends, playing computer games as well as premature love, to eliminate stress from study, find happiness from friends as well as communicate with them. According to a recent survey conducted by China Daily, an eminent periodical in the world, represents that children of lacking of communicating with parents apparently soar by 70 percent in 2008. Under this condition, parents are expected to spend enough time communicating with children, caring for them as well as encouraging them to face difficulties in the process of working or learning in the modern time. These approaches can not only make parents fulfill the obligation of caring for children but reduce the distance between parents and children. In brief, parents should try their best to communicate with their children and understand them no matter where, when is it, or else, children would be worse by adverse effect from friends and other methods.
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  \7 d, D% h% Y  ?3 G+ u0 e; {My view is that children probably become more complicated than before, which cause parents eventually are not understand（两个动词） them in the modern time, and parents who are busy with work should absorb modern elements and keep up with children’s mind.（精炼）
1.我看了两遍，写的很好，基本没有错误，表达也很到位。
2.整个论证很鲜明，结尾总结得很好。
30分钟能写出这样的文章实在是太厉害了。我学到了很多，祝你考到满分，呵呵，你有这实力。

daisy840228UID: 2684617

en，you haven't revised my composition that I sent to you a couple of days。

spyUID: 2295035

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It is generall considered that teachers should get various things, such as substantial income, high social status as well as indispensable welfare, for teachers is what really counts for the whole society and they usually cultivate many talented people and prodigy, which will exert an positive development for the twnety-first(twenty-first) century. I am one of the people who champion this standpoint, since the function and role of teachers is same with lawyers, business leaders in the modern time.

The main reason involves the consideration that not only can teacher cultivate a great number of talented students but help many adults find their advantages and merits to make them posses the encourage（encouragement） to feel the society and world. To illustrate it, Wang Changwu, a friend of mine, who is studying at the University Of Hong Kong, a prominent university in the world. He tells me that being a excellent teacher is pretty painstaking, because they usually spend much precious time talkingwith different students concerning the ordinary living and study and encourage them to achieve their dream in the future.(这句有语法问题) And teachers will adopt versatile methods to teach students and help them in accordance with different styles of students. After hearing his words, I cannot help surprising to imagine the importance of teachers for the nation, society as well as country. Therefore, teachers have devoted their enthusiasm, energy to their students, and they should be encouraged to get the same salary with others in the society by seeing from examples I mentioned above.（总结句的衔接有点问题）

Secondly, getting the same income with others in the society can encourage teachers posses much energy and driving force to foster more and more students in near future, only in this way can teachers also can（多余） meet their needs of the ordinaly living. Along with the rapid development of the society and the price of all commodities have soared for many times so that many residents, such as workers, teachers as well as students, are not capable to purchase them for meeting their needs. According to a recent survey conducted by China Daily, a eminent periodical in the world, almost eighty percent of people strongly recommends that teachers need to get much money to buy kinds of commodities. In brief, no matter when ,where, teachers are expected to get the same salary with lawyers, business leaders.

My view is that teachers ought to get the same income with others for their ordinarly living, rasing children as well as saving money, and only in this way can make teachers cultivate more talented students and foster more celebrities in the future.

用词和巨型都很好，这点要向你学习，如果能加入这几个职业的收入比较就更好了

doubledianUID: 2661760

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It is generally considered that residents have less time to relax themselves and do something they liked, for the growing number of people will have much serious pressure and tough challenge everyday concerning the ordinary living and workload. I am one of the people who bolster this opinion, since my parents usually spend less time on preparing for our meal and taking care me because of serious pressure and rapid development of life pace.' L% Z3 M. g/ j

The main reason involves the consideration that people probably cannot posses much time to do something they enjoyed and relax themselves in the ordinray（这个是拼写错误吧） living, for they must face much workload to finish and serious pressure to compete with others. TO （To）illustrate it, Mr. Wang, a prominent professor in the Unviersity （这个也是拼错了）Of Saskatchewan, who usually spends less time taking care and preparing meals for their children. He tells me that the main reason caused why he is not capable to communicate with his children is busying with his research and work. After hearing his words, I cannot help surprising that harm of the serious pressure and tough challenge for people especially for a family. Therefore, we can understand the matter for people to posses leisure time and relax themselves by seeing from examples I mentioned above.' ?3 c  r1 L# @* u
Secondly, not only can studens （拼写）ought to have a good performance during examination to prove himself but face much pressure and competition, such as the college entrance examination, TOEFL, as well GRE. And students should be encouraged to prepare for these tests for getting a high grade to compete with others. According to a recent survey conducted by China Daily, a eminent periodical in the world, almost eighty percent of students claim that they cannot have less time to keep up with the fashion trend, absorbing new information from Internet as well as getting along wih （拼写）his friends in the modern time. Xiao Hua is one of them, who points out that she usually spend at least ten hours reciting vocaubularies （拼写）and practicing English listening to improve her language proficiency. In brief, students are expected to treat learn knowledge as the interest, only in this way can they enjoy it eveyday. （拼写）; O: O3 Z; s4 C- r" e; x3 e4 |$ n
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My view is that people do not have any leisure time for relax and communicate with his family on the basis of the serious stress from work, the ordinary living as well as burden of examination. Consequently, people should moderate themselves in the head of working and learning to reach the balance between excitement and stress.
我给你指出的错误基本上都是word上指出的，其他的错误我一点也看不来，感觉我在看一篇例文，你不得满分谁得满分！这就是我的评价！继续加油！

fanfan0502UID: 2439300

To：16日作业

It is generally considered that residents have less time to relax themselves and do something they liked（like）, for the （改为a, 否则表示人口的数量了） growing number of people will have much serious pressure and tough challenge everyday concerning the ordinary living（google了一下，有这么说的，但是很少，日常生活还是 daily life和everyday life用的多）and workload. I am one of the people who bolster this opinion, since my parents usually spend less （无比较对象，用little吧）time on preparing for our meal and taking care of me because of serious pressure and rapid development （increase） of life pace.

The main reason involves the consideration that people probably cannot posses much time to do something they enjoyed（这里不应该用过去式吧？）and relax themselves in the ordinary living, for they must（have to） face much workload to finish and serious pressure to compete with others. TO illustrate it, Mr. Wang, a prominent professor in the Unviersity Of Saskatchewan, who usually spends less time taking care of and preparing meals for their （his）children. He (，) tells me that the main reason caused （去掉 caused）why he is not capable to communicate with his children is busying with his research and work. （这个句子有些长而凌乱，以楼主的能力应该可以整合的更好的）After hearing his words, I cannot help surprising about that harm of the serious pressure and tough challenge for people especially for a family. Therefore, we can understand the matter for people to posses leisure time and relax themselves by seeing from examples I mentioned above.% j- v( D0 ?9 m2 n
Secondly, not only can students ought to（students ought to not only）have a good performance during examination to prove himself but (but also) face much pressure and competition, such as the college entrance examination, TOEFL, as well GRE（and GRE as well）. And students should be encouraged to prepare for these tests for getting a high grade to compete with others. According to a recent survey conducted by China Daily, a (an) eminent periodical in the world, almost eighty percent of students claim that they cannot have less (any) time to keep up with the fashion trend, absorbing new information from Internet as well as getting along with his (their) friends in the modern time. Xiao Hua is one of them, who (这个who是指代them的) points out that she usually spends at least ten hours reciting vocabularies and practicing English listening to improve her language proficiency. In brief, students are expected to treat learning knowledge as the interest, only in this way can they enjoy it everyday.

My view is that people do not have any leisure time for relax and communicate with his family on the basis of the serious stress from work, the ordinary living as well as burden of examination. Consequently, people should moderate themselves in the head of working and learning to reach the balance between excitement and stress.