10.16进军美利坚作文

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In recent years, it is universally acknowledged that, with the development of science and technology, dramatic changes have been taken in human beings' daily life. Whether people will have more leisure time or not has become a focus controversy. I agree with the opinion that people will own more spare time to share with their families and to do anything they want than any other time from now before.


First of all, our fantastic prospects positively attribute to the development of traffic tools and traffic system, which shortens the interval between each two persons. We may cite a single example of airplanes. About half a century ago, when plans were not widely used, we can only travel from Asia to South America by ship. That may take several weeks which is much more boring than several hours by plane. Furthermore, a modern traffic system greatly exalts the efficiency of traveling which leaves us more excess time to arrange.


Second, inventions of mechanic us to solve various of puzzled problems which surely accelerate tempo of our lives. Mobile phone provides a concrete instance of modern machines make our lives easier than before. Instead of covering a large distance to meet with each other, business man can wherever take conversations or oral contracts by cell phone. And this story is not rare, but typical of dozens we have encountered.


Another significant reason why I reckon that people will have more leisure time is the expending number of people in the world. However, in the future, most fortune of society will be created by sophisticated machines. Conflicts are formed between increasing number of people and machines, which enable more time for human beings to share with their families and do anything they want.


In a word, I believe that people tend to have more leisure time when science and technology arrive at a preeminent level. How to arrange and make use of so much time will be a primary issue we should discuss then.

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In recent years, it is universally acknowledged that, with the development of science and technology, dramatic changes have been taken in human beings' daily life. Whether people will have more leisure time or not has become a focus（focusing，focus是动词哈。和昨天的一样） controversy. I agree with the opinion that people will own（学了，我老是have have 的） more spare time to share with their families and to do anything they want than any other time from now before（没懂，from now before?）.

First of all, our fantastic prospects positively attribute to the development of traffic tools and traffic system, which shortens the interval between each two persons. (好句子，学习)We may cite a single example of airplanes. About half a century ago, when plans were not widely used, we can only travel from Asia to South America by ship. That may take several weeks which is much more boring than several hours by plane. Furthermore, a modern traffic system greatly exalts the efficiency of traveling which leaves us more excess time to arrange.

Second,（secondly） inventions of mechanic us to solve various of puzzled problems which surely accelerate tempo of our lives. Mobile phone provides a concrete instance of modern machines make(making) our lives easier than before. Instead of covering a large distance to meet with each other, business man can wherever take conversations or oral contracts by cell phone. And this story is not rare, but typical of dozens we have encountered.

Another significant reason why I reckon that people will have more leisure time is the expending(expanding,估计这个单词你记错了吧，两次都错的一样恩) number of people in the world. However, in the future, most fortune of society will be created by sophisticated machines. Conflicts are formed between increasing number of people and machines, which enable more time for human beings to share with their families and do anything they want.

In a word, I believe that people tend to have more leisure time when science and technology arrive at a preeminent level. How to arrange and make use of so much time will be a primary issue we should discuss then.

哥啊，我算是明白了，我还属于没有能力给你改作文的呢……你看，蓝笔都是我学习的，呵呵。第三个论点里再加个例子就好了，有点空。别的OK,很不错呢！加油。

还有，你以后把作文都放在一个帖子里吧，比如都在这个后面接着贴，这样我就不用每次都去找你的帖子了哈。

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10.19作文

Title:该重视学习concepts &ideas呢，还是重视学习facts呢？

Essay:

Study is a faithful friend with which each of us will get along for all our lives. But indeed, few of us actually understand his spirit. It has been a focusing controversy that concepts and ideas or studying facts will play more significant role in our learning experience. I agree with the opinion that concepts and ideas are distinctly much more important.


First of all, I could see it is universally acknowledged that, orientation is one of the most primary aspects of learning everything. That is because you don't know what goals are waiting for you to achieve. We take trains as a single example. So rapid as the trains are, railway can be never lacking of. It regulates the directions which trains go forward, without which, huge and expensive trains present no more convenient than a coach. It is conceivable that is so necessary to consider all various of ideas and concepts of prospects for us, which ensures it pays to spare no effort to purchase it.


Secondly, there is another advantage of putting studying concepts and ideas on a superior position. Ideas, methods can do us stupendous favors to exalt efficiency and shorten a plenty of time in some extent. For example, there are several events left for you to do. And struggling for one by one is not an ingenious choice. Please pacify yourself, and you will find it is not that complex as you thought when you arrange a wonderful schedule.


Furthermore, making a habit of emphasizing studying concepts enables us to give conclusions in a concrete and strict way. In another word, we don't tend to study just with passion but strategy as well. We proceed our learning on the base of previous analysis and undo all kinds of problems more easily.


In conclusion, concepts & ideas and studying facts are both important. But I believe the former aspect is the core sprite of learning which is worthy of earning more attentions than any others. There is no doubt that nothing is stapler than to hand it during our whole lives of learning.

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Study is a faithful friend with which each of us will get along for all our lives. But indeed, few of us actually understand his 感觉比喻用her spirit. It has been a focusing controversy that concepts and ideas or studying facts will play more significant role in our learning experience. I agree with the opinion that concepts and ideas are distinctly much more important.
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First of all, I could see it is universally acknowledged that, orientation is one of the most primary aspects of learning everything. That is because you don't know what goals are waiting for you to achieve. We take trains as a single example. So rapid as the trains are, railway can be never lacking of. It regulates the directions which trains go forward, without which, huge and expensive trains present no more convenient than a coach. It is conceivable that it is so necessary to consider all various of ideas and concepts of prospects for us, which ensures it pays to spare no effort to purchase it.
感觉这段论述 方向的重要性 有点漂移的感觉............
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Secondly, there is another advantage of putting studying concepts and ideas on a superior position. Ideas, methods can do us stupendous favors to exalt efficiency and shorten a plenty of time in to some extent. For example, there are several events left for you to do. And struggling for one by one is not an ingenious choice. Please pacify yourself, and you will find it is not that complex as you thought when you arrange a wonderful schedule.% r, T& Q1 O* Y
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Furthermore, making a habit of emphasizing studying concepts enables us to give conclusions in a concrete and strict way. In another word, we don't tend to study just with passion but strategy as well. We proceed our learning on the base of previous analysis and undo all kinds of problems more easily.

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In conclusion, concepts & ideas and studying facts are both important. But I believe the former aspect is the core sprite of learning which is worthy of earning more attentions than any others. There is no doubt that nothing is stapler than to hand it during our whole lives of learning.

额怎么  说呢   语法还可以   但是感觉内容有点云里雾里   不明晰.......
看别人的看法吧   要不是就无视我