8号考试 好紧张 有人帮我看看作文吗？

leoandleoUID: 2458719

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Do you agree or disagree that Renewable source of energy will soon replace fossil fuels such as gas, oil, and coal. , u4 w, ?8 {" h; g) S# U: b6 Y% v0 T

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3 M5 Y6 ]% b5 ^1 z* I$ a4 u) f. pToday, the fast development of our society is based on the consumptions of tons offossil fuels. With the worry of depletion of fossil fuels and the advent of renewable forms of energy, a discussion on whether fossil fuels will be replaced heats up. However, as far as I am concerned, wemay still want to will use the fossil fuels for a quite long time before it is replaced bythe renewable ones. The reasons are discussed as follows.& Q! R+ I. H; o4 M$ e! ^$ l- b* N
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First ofall, the reserve(?) storage of fossil flues is large enough. The data shows thatwe needn't worry about the quantity of the source of fossil flues inthe next 50 years. What's more during this period, the method ofexploration would make a progress, so that a lot of new source will befound and explored in earth.
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' A; G/ y- ]7 A4 c9 g7 wSecondly,with the progressing of the technology, the consumption of fossil fuels will decrease. For example, the electrical appliances in our houses aremore efficiency than ten years ago. In addition, most of our industriesare designed to depend on the fossil flues, such as power plant and cars.So, the expense of updating these equipments in order to use renewablesource is quite high.
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Finally,even through the renewable source is clean and sustainable, the initial cost ishigh and may seem unacceptable. As consumers are very sensitivity tothe price, renewable source has to reduce its cost in application in order to become competent over fossil ones. and thus I think it will take a long timefor further researches, since the currently quite low price of fossil flues makespeople reluctant to do this kind of research. What’s more,even through the price of renewable source decreased; there are stillmany problems that against the wide use of renewable resources, suchlike the stability(是说性能稳定之类的吗？) of this kind source. All in all, there is a long wayfor us to go to overcome the technology problems before the renewablesources are widely used.2 N# G4 J7 s$ `& I$ i. y7 Q
Inconclusion, I can’t deny the fact that the renewable source willreplace the fossil fuels in the future, but the high cost and theimmaturity of renewable resources hamper its wide used in a short time.

我也是8号考，即然后天就要考了，我就不绕弯了比较好吧！
红色的是语法错误，或是我感觉不是很通的地方
蓝色是我认为可以写得更好的地方。

逻辑部分还是可以的
在你写作文的时候，有很多句子就像是把中文的作文直接Google Translate成英文的，Chinglish的痕迹有一些
然后就是fuel全部拼写成了fule，不知道是为什么……
总之 这篇的低级错误还是应该好好再改正一些，我觉得这篇文章给这个论坛上的大多数人看了都会觉得是一篇没有认真写的文章 相信你的真实实习肯定不会仅仅是这样的

cinderella1016UID: 2666652

Today, our society's fast development is based on the consumptions {不可数} of tons of fossil flues {fossil fuels}. Then many people will worry about {去掉} that the unrenewable energy source {sources} can't sustain {last} long. And {and believe that} renewable resource {sources} will replace fossil flues {fossil fuels} in a short time. However, as far as I am concerned, we will use the fossil flues {fossil fuels} in {for} a quite long time before it is {they are} replaced by the renewable source {energy sources}. The reasons are discussed as follows."

leoandleoUID: 2458719

真不好意思，因为时间太匆忙了， 没有认真的检查就放上来了。 谢谢楼上耐心改错和建议了，真的很感动。

cinderella1016UID: 2666652

First of all, the storage of fossil flues is large enough {there are huge reserves of fossil fuels}. The data {Data} shows that we needn't worry about the quantity of the source of fossil flues {fossil fuels} in the next 50 years. What's more {,} during this period, the method of {source} exploration would make a progress {be improved}, so that a lot of new source {sources} will {might} be found and explored in {on} earth.

cinderella1016UID: 2666652

Secondly, with the progressing
of {advance in} the {去掉} technology, the consumption of fossil flues {fuels} will decrease. For example, the electrical appliances in our houses {homes} are more efficiency {efficient} than{they were}
ten years ago. In addition, most of our {the domestic} industries are designed depend on the fossil
flues {fossil-dependent}, such as {the} power plant {industry} and cars {the automobile industry}. So, the expense of updating these equipments in older to use renewable source is quite high. {So it does not pay us to replace old equipment with new equipment.}

cinderella1016UID: 2666652

Finally, even through {though} the renewable source {sources} is {are} clean and sustainable; the cost is high compared with {that of} fossil flues {fuels}. As consumers are very sensitivity to the price, so if the renewable source wants to replace the fossil flues should reduce the cost of use, and this I think will need a long time to do research. {As consumers are price-sensitive, we have to lower the cost of the renewable sources if we are to replace fossil fuels with them, which has a long way to go.} Because the quite low price of fossil fluesmakes people lock the motivation to do this kind of research. {建议删除}What’s more even through the price of renewable source decreased; there are still many problems that against the widely use of renewable source, such like the stability of this kind source. {建议再考虑一下这部分}All in all, there is a long way for us to go to overcome the technology problems before the renewable sources are widely used.

In conclusion, I can’t deny the fact that the renewable source {sources} will replace the fossil flues {fuels} in the future, but the high cost and the immature {prematurity} of renewable source {sources} prevent it be widely used in a short time {prevent renewable energy from being widely used}.

leoandleoUID: 2458719

谢谢cinderella 的修改 感动ing!!