ISSUE13 [REBORN FROM THE ASHES] TASK ONE by 番茄斗斗

番茄斗斗UID: 2720914

惨不忍睹。。。自己都不看第二遍了。。

ISSUE13

Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewerpeople speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages arespoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.

Language is one part of culture, which in turn polishes culture into various kinds. In world exist thousands of languages; however they are keeping disappearing in certain paces every year. As a result, suggestion of preventing their extinction shows up and become a current social issue. However, to me, it depends on how important the language is.

Languages are brewed by different culture; however, the reasons of their extinction normally share some similarities, which can be divided into two parts, naturally one and forced one. The former is resulted from a growing emigrant. The latter one is mainly caused by invasion. When being conquered, normally, the country is forcedby the winner to get rid of their language. And such phenomenon happens innowadays but in different way, which is determined by globalization. When involves international trends, languages of counter business partner is required as a must. And gradually, this language becomes popular and undermines their own.

Human has a tendency to prevent what is being losing. However, without knowing why, aim lessbehavior is wasting money and exhausting the labor. Language evolves. Its written or spoken way is determined by academic or daily use. When people found a better expression, they use it. And when it survives along with time, it is confirmed to be an appropriate language to them. For example, when Chinese characters were brought into Japan in 5th century, they would never expect they will change into Hiragana and Katakana someday. But it happens, and determines a different culture. What’s more, the main function of language is communication. What if a language only has 3 users? Their life zone must be limited and information of their own cannot be got from the outsiders. Meanwhile,when a language left nothing but its culture value, only anthropology will pay attention to it. And a forced method won’t change its fate easily.

In addition, protectinga culture does not equal preventing the loss of language. When a culture is determined, language is only an expression of it. By learning its literature works, digging out its structure or its social behavior, the full image of this country can be given, then, why protecting the language?

In summary, appropriate analysis of the importance of one language is the preliminary of its preventing action. If one language is losing its communication function, merely preventing if for its culture is unwise and unnecessary.After all, it's not the strongest to survive, but the right one.

StefanaUID: 2143510

第一段，        LZ用一个大而化之的语句开头，没有什么吸引力。第一句是肯定语气，是正面的态度，第一个however之后强调语言的缺失性质之后马上as a result，接着得出一个结论，再一个however提出自己的意见。虽然有逻辑连接词，但是我认为as a result后得出的结论跟再后来LZ自己的结论其实是矛盾的，既然还要看什么语言重要，那为什么又一定要保护消失的呢？而且，what does “important” mean? LZ想表达的观点并没有表述清楚，逻辑链也不是十分清晰。
第二段，        这一段写的是语言正在消失的原因。LZ总结了历史和现在两个方面的原因。之前的两个原因分类我认为没有什么大问题，唯一觉得就是之后的globalization类比成为invasion我觉得不是特别恰当，逻辑上似乎有点说不过去。另，LZ对动词的使用不错，但写作的时候需要注意一些基本语法问题，比如名词的单复数，主谓一致问题等等。
第三段，        这一段提出的是作者自己的观点， 就是什么是开头段写的important是吧？例子倒是不错，但觉得观点太绝对了点，而后来的论述没有有效的说明你的观点。感觉论述得不够深入。
第四段，        这个段落明显与你自己的观点自我矛盾了，要是不protect the language, when nobody knows the language of the literature works, how can people image the whole image of the country by these literature works?我倒是觉得这一段可以成为为啥保护语言的一大原因。
第五段，        结尾段中规中矩的总结了一下全文，说不上好坏。