11月28日 独立写作作业

angelloverUID: 199157

Do you agree or disagree: people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place.
未限时


Living in a single city all your life, or moving to another place, which life style would you choose? People under different cultures may have diverse answers. As far as I am concerned, I perfer to live in one city or country all my life rather than keep moving from one city to another.

First of all, I enjoy a stable life, which in my mind could only be realized by staying in one place forever. Common sense tells us that only when people decide to settle down in a certain place, would they begin to plan their future life seriously. The same story happened to me. I didn’t have a blueprint of my futher life when I first came to this city, neither did I know exactly where to spend my life in the following years. I felt as if I were a guest of this city, and that sooner or later I would leave here. I rent an apartment, but moved 3 times a year. I didn’t enjoy my life at all, not only because I never had a feeling of staying at home, but also because I lost interest in planning my future due to such an unstable life. However, later when I decided to settle in this city, I bought my own house, decorated it in my favorite style. No longer thinking about moving out to another city, I have a strong feeling of security and satisfaction. Then my new life starts.


Further more, a steady-going life would help people develop their career constantly. As many business people know, continuance of job is a key factor contributed to one’s success. In other words, it is not suggested that people change their jobs too frequently. However, if people kept moving from one city to another, they may need to find a new job each time they arrived to a new place and restart from the very beginning. A friend of mine feels very frustrated about his career development, since he could never step into a further degree because of frequent job-hopping. Every time he reached a new city, he had to find a job immediately to support his life. The turbulence of keeping moving from one place to another rather decrease his quality of living, not to mention career development.

Besides, the relationship with good friends may also get lost during regular relocation. Perhaps most people have such experience that each time they arrive at a new place, it would take them quite a long time to get familiar with people arround, and it is usually a hard task to make new closed friends. Meanwhile, the old ones are gradually getting far away. In my opinion, friends are a vital part in my life, so I would never be willing to lose friends by repeated moving.

Admittly, staying in one place all one’s life without changes sounds boring. There are a lot of funs in people’s life, and no doubt travel is exactly one of these funs. I understand that some people just want to pursue a kind of life which would give them such a feeling as “always on the way”. However, the real life is not a fiction filled with ventures and mysteries, but rather everydayness with feelings of happiness and satisfaction. Thus a true life would be better realized by staying in one city and developing step by step.

In sum, a good feeling of a stable life, a long-term development of career, and a constant relationship with good friends are the key factors I consider in my life, which also help me make my final decision to stay in the city for a long time and enjoy my heppy life.

line126UID: 2556583

Living in a single city all your life, or moving to another place, which life style would you choose? People under different cultures may have diverse answers. As far as I am concerned, I perfer to live in one city or country all my life rather than keep moving from one city to another. - m1 I. ?4 Z: t/ U @$ a* ^; V$ v& l5 X8 d1 k First of all, I enjoy a stable life, which in my mind could only be realized by staying in one place forever. Common sense tells us that only when people decide to settle down in a certain place, would they begin to plan their future life seriously. The same story happened to me. I didn’t have a blueprint of my further life when I first came to this city, neither did I know exactly where to spend my life in the following years. I felt as if I were a guest of this city, and that sooner or later I would leave here. I rent an apartment, but moved 3 times a year. I didn’t enjoy my life at all, not only because I never had a feeling of staying at home, but also because I lost interest in planning my future due to such an unstable life. However, later when I decided to settle in this city, I bought my own house, decorated it in my favorite style. No longer thinking about moving out to another city, I have a strong feeling of security and satisfaction. Then my new life starts. & C* Y3 F+ N" R; Y3 C0 f* J 4 ~8 l1 E( T$ C, G ) h& R& \! s3 j) _! i2 s5 W Further more, a steady-going life would help people develop their career constantly. As many business people know, continuance of job is a key factor contributed to one’s success. In other words, it is not suggested that people change their jobs too frequently. However, if people kept moving from one city to another, they may need to find a new job each time they arrived (arrive) to a new place and restart from the very beginning. A friend of mine feels very frustrated about his career development, since he could never step into a further degree because of frequent job-hopping. Every time he reached a new city, he had to find a job immediately to support his life. The turbulence of keeping moving from one place to another rather decrease his quality of living, not to mention career development. + s: ^) _# B: Q& g& X* w; Q 2 ` {/ f4 L- z* QBesides, the relationship with good friends may also get lost during regular(frequent) relocation. Perhaps most people have such experience that each time they arrive at a new place, it would take them quite a long time to get familiar with people arround, and it is usually a hard task to make new closed(close) friends. Meanwhile, the old ones are gradually getting far away. In my opinion, friends are a vital part in my life, so I would never be willing to lose friends by repeated moving. ! N) ~! p$ k- b. b F. v% W' k) L- [ , ^/ x9 l4 C& S% [Admittly, staying in one place all one’s life without changes sounds boring. There are a lot of funs in people’s life, and no doubt travel is exactly one of these funs. I understand that some people just want to pursue a kind of life which would give them such a feeling as “always on the way”. However, the real life is not a fiction filled with adventures and mysteries, but rather everydayness with feelings of happiness and satisfaction. Thus a true life would be better realized by staying in one city and developing step by step. q: n3 V, a* B) Z7 K 4 I' T* e2 q1 O: v. b2 tIn sum, a good feeling of(coming from) a stable life, a long-term development of career, and a constant relationship with good friends are the key factors I consider in my life, which also help me make my final decision to stay in the city for a long time and enjoy my happy life. / g0 V7 a& N0 ^7 R


全篇没啥语法错误 值得赞扬
可能题目的关系 有些论据好像没啥说服力……

angelloverUID: 199157

2# line126

谢谢啦。
关于论据说服力的问题能不能再细说说？
是不是总是拿“我”举例子，让人觉得没有说服力？
还是说论据和论点结合的不紧密？

lmsleeperUID: 2559158

Living in a single city all your life, or moving to another place, which life style would you choose? People under different cultures may have diverse answers. As far as I am concerned, I prefer to live in one city or country all my life rather than keep moving from one city to another.


First of all, I enjoy a stable life, which in my mind could only be realized by staying in one place forever. Common sense tells us that only when people decide to settle down in a certain place, would they begin to plan their future life seriously. The same story happened to me. I didn’t have a blueprint of my futher(further) life when I first came to this city, neither did I know exactly where to spend my life in the following years. I felt as if I were a guest of this city, and that sooner or later I would leave here. I rent an apartment, but moved 3 times a year. I didn’t enjoy my life at all, not only because I never had a feeling of staying at home, but also because I lost interest in planning my future due to such an unstable life. However, later when I decided to settle in this city, I bought my own house, decorated it in my favorite style. No longer thinking about moving out to another city, I have a strong feeling of security and satisfaction. Then my new life starts. （这段是说你的定居决定使得生活变好了，但你实际还是在同一个城市。主题是永远居住一个地儿比搬来搬去好。能支持主题，但不太直接。ETS这些猪头不见得能绕过弯来^_^）

Further more, a steady-going life would help people develop their career constantly. As many business people know, continuance of job is a key factor contributed to one’s success. In other words, it is not suggested that people change their jobs too frequently. However, if people kept moving from one city to another, they may need to find a new job each time they arrived to a new place and restart from the very beginning. A friend of mine feels very frustrated about his career development, since he could never step into a further degree because of frequent job-hopping. Every time he reached a new city, he had to find a job immediately to support his life. The turbulence of keeping moving from one place to another rather decrease（s） his quality of living, not to mention career development.
这段出彩！
Besides, the relationship with good friends may also get lost during regular relocation. Perhaps most people have such experience that each time they arrive at a new place, it would take them quite a long time to get familiar with people arround（around）, and it is usually a hard task to make new closed friends. Meanwhile, the old ones are gradually getting far away. In my opinion, friends are a vital part in my life, so I would never be willing to lose friends by repeated moving.

Admittly(admittedly), staying in one place all one’s life without changes sounds boring. There are a lot of funs in people’s life, and no doubt travel is exactly one of these funs. I understand that some people just want to pursue a kind of life which would give them such a feeling as “always on the way”. However, the real life is not a fiction filled with ventures and mysteries, but rather everydayness with feelings of happiness and satisfaction. 好句！Thus a true life would be better realized by staying in one city and developing step by step. U/ I: U

In sum, a good feeling of a stable life, a long-term development of career, and a constant relationship with good friends are the key factors I consider in my life, which also help me make my final decision to stay in the city for a long time and enjoy my heppy(happy) life.


行文流畅，结构清晰，说理明白，
词汇丰富，葱白一个！
除了少许拼写错误没有大的问题。但感觉是用AW的手法写ibt，杀鸡用牛刀了，呵呵。