ISSUE138=美丽G程小组=小组第三次作业by petric

petricUID: 2719885

I 138 "Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress."

I agree with the speaker insofar as more often than not, mistakes are the predecessors of success. However, the speaker unnecessarily extends broader assertion that mistakes are the necessity to achieve progress.However，as the old Chinese saying goes," Man proposes, God disposes" ,which means although certain happenings are objective ,sophisticated to even cannot manipulate to most of cases, especially nature phenomena , we human's willingness and attitude towards failure and success play a vital role in determining the direction of happenings.

I concede that mistakes and success seem to be opposites that all of us pursue the latter by correcting the former. However, there is no need to clarify boundaries of them palpably, since they are actually the products of same process which render them dialectic. The moment we define mistakes as the unsatisfied results or processes which have differences with the ideal ones, we can call it a success because we are challenging ourselves and making progress.
Besides, the process of study is a tentative one through learning lessons from trial and error. Consider, the establishment of mathematic logics through continuous making mistakes in frustration and searching for errors; the creation of pressure -sensitive adhesive which is actually a failure of glue; 1800 materials not suitable to make bulb ,which had proved by Edison; the story to synthesizing "Formula 606" after 605 times errors. Who can say these failures are not a kind of success for making further progress for the following work and research?

The author's assertion further indicates that we should continuously make mistakes and learn lessons from them. I object this absurd relationship between mistakes and progress for the following two reasons. Admittedly, we should not be afraid of making mistakes for the reasons mentioned above. However, we should try hard to avoid failure. Since some colossal mistakes will create irrecoverable hurt and obstacle our success. For example, politicians' tiny fault maximized by their opponents might lose their dreams and future in their lifetime; any deficiency of laws will become a great lose for governments, even a threat to people's basic right. Similarly, the abuse of nuclear power might destroy our planet. If the earth does not exist, how can we have another chance to make up for errors? Time as well as opportunities is precious, if we mistake out of our mind, it is really hard to catch up another precondition of progress. Secondly, in the notion of research, lays my contention with the speaker’s broader assertion that we can predict the results before we invested in it. Yet, what we previously predict could not be clarified as mistake or success; meanwhile idealistic result might not need previous mistakes as step-stones. Since success actually have strong connection with opportunity and variable conditions. Relying on processor’s knowledge and experience, we can get desired result directly without any mistake.

Admittedly, the saying that "attitude determines everything" overemphasizes human's ability, yet it reflects that people's knowledge, ideas, and persistence exert indispensable influence on process. It is true that a better man he is, the more mistakes he made. However, not everyone is capable to defeat mistakes. The precondition of making success relies largely on elaborate preparation mentally and physically. Cyrus West Field who led the Atlantic Telegraph Company can aptly illustrate this point of view. Field suffer great pressure and financial lose after his company’s first transatlantic cable broken down. He adhered to finish the engineering .As a result, the transatlantic telegraph cable sped up communication to within minutes which could only happen over ship before. History is filled with great explorers and scientists like Field, whose stories express a kind of spirit and eternal strength to fight for their dreams, not considering results practically. Thus it is how to face our lives and attitude toward the difficulties, not just mistakes that becomes the backbone to success.


In sum, although mistakes teach us lessons, tell us when to change direction, these lessons are negative and compressive for us to make progress and discovery. It is people’s knowledge, attitudes, persistence to face mistakes and difficulties bravely that help us go further and more smoothly.

jessicamarineUID: 2595044

紫色评价，红字修改错误，粉色建议修改，蓝色 很好
138 "Only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress."

I agree with the speaker insofar as more often than not, mistakes are the predecessors of success. However, the speaker unnecessarily extends to a broader assertion that mistakes are the necessity to achieve progress.However，as the old Chinese saying goes," Man proposes, God disposes" ,which means although certain happenings are objective ,sophisticated to even cannot manipulate to most of cases, especially nature phenomena , we human's willingness and attitude towards failure and success play a vital role in determining the direction of happenings.
绿字有中国式的含蓄，我是读了两遍才明白透怎么回事，建议把成事在人某是在天的话去掉，开头尽量把自己的观点简明扼要以一种让人迅速了解的方式亮出来

I concede that mistakes and success seem to be opposites that all of us pursue the latter by correcting the former. However, there is no need to clarify boundaries of them palpably(清楚地）, since they are actually the products of same process which render them dialectic（辩证的）. The moment we define mistakes as the unsatisfied results or processes which have differences with the ideal ones, we can call it a success because we are challenging ourselves and making progress.
Besides, the process of study is a tentative one through learning lessons from trial and error. Consider, the establishment of mathematic logics through continuous making mistakes in frustration and searching for errors; the creation of pressure -sensitive adhesive which is actually a failure of glue; 1800 materials not suitable to make bulb ,which had proved by Edison; the story to synthesizing "Formula 606" after 605 times errors. Who can say these failures are not a kind of success for making further progress for the following work and research? （强大举例，加反问，好！）

The author's assertion further （further assertion） indicates that we should continuously make mistakes and learn lessons from them. I object this absurd relationship between mistakes and progress for the following two reasons. Admittedly, we should not be afraid of making mistakes for the reasons mentioned above. However, we should try hard to avoid failure. Since some colossal （巨大）mistakes will create irrecoverable hurt and obstacle our success. For example, politicians' tiny fault maximized by their opponents might lose their dreams and future in their lifetime; any deficiency of laws will become  governments, even a threat to people's basic right. Similarly, the abuse of nuclear power might destroy our planet. If the earth does not exist, how can we have another chance to make up for errors? Time as well as opportunities is precious, if we mistake out of our mind, it is really hard to catch up another precondition of progress. Secondly, in the notion of research, lays my contention with the speaker’s broader assertion that we can predict the results before we invested in it. Yet, what we previously predict could not be clarified as mistake or success; meanwhile idealistic result might not need previous mistakes as step-stones. Since success actually have strong connection with opportunity and variable conditions. Relying on processor’s knowledge and experience, in most cases we can get desired result directly without any mistake(making mistakes, 似乎更合适，any太强）.
此段写的非常强大，好！
段首句有ARGU之嫌，改成自己说话的样子就好了

Admittedly, the saying that "attitude determines everything" overemphasizes human's ability, yet it reflects that people's knowledge, ideas, and persistence exert indispensable influence on process. It is true that a better man he is, the more mistakes he made. However, not everyone is capable to defeat mistakes. The precondition of making success relies largely on elaborate preparation mentally and physically. Cyrus West Field who led the Atlantic Telegraph Company can aptly illustrate this point of view. Field suffer great pressure and financial lose（lost） after his company’s first transatlantic cable broken down. He adhered to finish the engineering .As a result, the transatlantic telegraph cable sped up communication to within minutes which could only happen over ship before. History is filled with great explorers and scientists like Field, whose stories express a kind of spirit and eternal strength to fight for their dreams, not considering results practically（这样说很不妥哦，建议改为而不去畏惧失败). Thus it is how to face our lives and attitude toward the difficulties, not just mistakes that becomes the backbone to success.
明白你的意思是该段最后一句话，但是绿字部分和你举得例证橙色部分正好相反啊，建议把前面去掉，中国人能拐弯可以看懂，强烈怀疑据说直脑筋的老外能否看懂，另外这段与上端衔接不理想，再好好斟酌）


In sum, although mistakes teach us lessons, tell us when to change direction, these lessons are negative and compressive for us to make progress and discovery.（加个转折词或什么的，infact、actually） It is people’s knowledge, attitudes, persistence to face mistakes and difficulties bravely that help us go further and more smoothly.

总评：总体思路非常不错，只是各段衔接尤其倒数二三段衔接要好好修饰一下。
最喜欢的是狂举例再来一反问，很爽的论证方式啊
可以看出学长积累了很多啊，想你学习，哎，我这一直没怎么弄，惭愧
I写的非常不错，语言也很好，只是衔接处在作修改就好，相较之下，A的提升空间很大


不错不错^@^

petricUID: 2719885

组长改的好认真啊，狂赞！我仔细看看啊，没事我的心里承受能力很强，下次直接狂批吧~