12.2独立作文，求拍

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    Is it more pleasure to see a film in the cinema with other people than see a film at home? The answer to this question depends on your own experience and lifestyle. In my point of view, I prefer to appreciate in the movie theatre with many viewer. Among countless factors which influence my choice, these are three conspicuous aspects as follows.

    Joys shared with others are more enjoyed. The main reason for my propensity for enjoy the movie in the cinema is I want to feel the atmosphere there , and, to some extend, I also want to share emotion with other audience when I see a film. For example, “Titanic” is one of my most favorite movies, I remember when Jack says: “You must promise me that you will survive... that you won't give up... no matter what happen...no matter how hopeless…”.Everyone in the cinema was clouded with sadness. I was deeply moved. So,that is a unfogettable experience to me,which made me more likely to enjoy "Big shot" in the cinema.

    Another reason that can be seen by every person is that, of course there are, all the screens will bigger than that at home, not to say the sound effects are better and that makes the audiences feel like they are in the scene. Equipped with the up-to-date technology, seeing a royal wedding or watching a spacecraft take off brings the viewer right into the action. Regular IMAX movies are shot with special cameras that engage audiences and make them feel they are swimming in the screen, watching the movie at 360 degrees.

    Furthermore, enjoy movie in the cinema can preemptive experience the latest movie, no longer to wait several months to watch them in TV or DVDS.

    Taking into account of all these reasons, I feel more joyful seeing a film in the cinema with many people than seeing it at home.

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   Is it more pleasure to see a film in the cinema with other people thansee a film at home? The answer to this question depends on your[论述中别用第二人称。改成one's] ownexperience and lifestyle. In my point of view, I prefer to appreciatein the movie theatre with many viewer. Among countless factors whichinfluence my choice, these are three conspicuous aspects as follows[these are 和 as follows只用一个].' B6 ^$ f6 r2 L4 P/ Z

0 g5 r  D3 \* g- Y7 ^2 b, X   Joys shared with others are more enjoyed. The main reason for mypropensity for enjoy the movie in the cinema is I want to feel theatmosphere there , and, to some extend, I also[本句的句义与前面的没有进一步的意思，也不并列，不用and ...I also] want to share emotionwith other audience when I see a film. For example, “Titanic” is one ofmy most favorite movies, I remember when Jack says: “You must promiseme that you will survive... that you won't give up... no matter whathappen...no matter how hopeless…”.Everyone in the cinema was cloudedwith sadness. I was deeply moved. So,[不是因果关系，不用so]that is a[an] unfogettable experienceto me,which made me more likely to enjoy "Big shot" in the cinema.[是看titanic的这个experience让你more likely to enjoy...了吗？这是总结句，应该是“在电影院可以感受气氛”这个事实，让你more likely to...用从句要谨慎，double check一下逻辑关系]( c/ h- B  N* v

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2 [6 q, k' d# [& k3 B   Furthermore, enjoy movie in the cinema can preemptive experience thelatest movie, no longer to wait[rather than waiting] several months to watch them in TV orDVDS.
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    Taking intoaccount of all these reasons, I feel more joyful seeing a film in thecinema with many people than seeing it at home.

文章结构不错，行文中也能够把握逻辑关系，有论点有例子。架子很好。
注意下语法别犯错。

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同学，12月2号独立作文咱俩好像是同一组吧，你咋没帮我改呢？贵人多忘事～～
没事去帮我踩一脚，好不？

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Is it more pleasure to see a film in the cinema with other people than to see a film at home? The answer to this question depends on your own experience and lifestyle. In my point of view, I prefer to appreciate in the movie theatre with many viewers. Among countless factors which influence my choice, these are three conspicuous aspects as follows.0 Q7 ~1 P+ A. b" y  Z
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    Joys shared with others are more enjoyed(和别人分享快乐是很快乐的？). The main reason for my propensity for enjoying the movie in the cinema is I want to feel the atmosphere there , and, to some extend, I also want to share emotions with other audience when I see a film. For example, “Titanic” is one of my most favorite movies, I remember when Jack says: “You must promise me that you will survive... that you won't give up... no matter what happen...no matter how hopeless…”.Everyone in the cinema was clouded with sadness. I was deeply moved. So,that is a unfogettable experience to me,which made me more likely to enjoy "Big shot" in the cinema.
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% X- J4 N7 I% K3 ]    Another reason that can be seen by every person（one） is that, of course there are, all the screens will bigger than that at home, not to say the sound effects are better and that makes the audiences feel like they are in the scene. Equipped with the up-to-date technology, seeing a royal wedding or watching a spacecraft take off brings the viewer right into the action. Regular IMAX movies are shot with special cameras that engage audiences and make them feel they are swimming in the screen, watching the movie at （in）360 degrees.. ~) K$ v' w5 V, Q3 \' {2 \- l; p: P4 M
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    Furthermore, enjoying movie in the cinema can preemptive experience the latest movie, no longer to wait several months to watch them in TV or DVDS.  `* x* x) k5 E0 q1 u0 [

$ L9 J; q( ~( P3 c    Taking into account of all these reasons, I feel more joyful seeing a film in the cinema with many people than seeing it at home
注意一下词汇的多样化，尽量避免重复。介词结构要搭配好。字数少了些，童鞋可以再丰富一下自己的内容啊。