ISSUE69球拍(22岁了。水平还是这么烂）~

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ISSUE69

"Government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development"

Over the last decade, scientific research and development was advanced so significantly that prominent breakthrough in cutting-edge researches like stem-cell research is often overshadowed by controversies surrounding it. These controversies mainly came from two basic concerns of our well-being: security and morality, which necessitates a constitutionally circumscribed governmental restriction.

It is a frequent worry that our striding scientific research and development and its potential application is not paralleled or matched by the advancement in humanity.

For a sense of security, government, as a protector of its people, should restrict scientific research and development from being abused or devoted to evil purposes. Bearing the destructive power of some scientific research and development in mind, a government could not be too careful in detecting evil-oriented scientific research and taking measures accordingly, and it applied to both domestically and internationally. Read history one can find almost in every major war there is a role played by a invented destructive weapon from a scientific development. In World War II, for example, Nuclear weapon, which was a symbolic advancement in physics, destroyed populous cities from Europe to Japan and still threatens us today. Countries attempting to produce their own nuclear weapon like Iran and North Korea run nuclear tests in the disguise of the so-called scientific research and development. These notorious and dangerous scientific research and development put our security at great risks and should be sanctioned by the international community through the operation of the International Government "United Nations". Domestically, we are familiar with the possible devastating consequences from scientific research and development from headline story to fictional scene. We all shiver if we are informed that our neighbor is a mad scientist who is obsessed with various chemical reactions. We all experience hard times when we imagine how Dr.Frankenstein created his monster. As individuals who trade part of our freedom to have a sense of security, we have a notion that we would not be able to tackle with all potential threat brought by scientific research and development against us and that is why it is a responsibility of our government, whether national or international.

Some might accuse me of overlooking the vast potential positive function that scientific research and development could serve. Admittedly, I am well aware of the various diseases could potentially be alleviated even cured with the development of bioengineering. These breakthroughs, however, come at the risk of devaluing moral standards we have been held for hundreds and years. In recent years, stem-cell research and other genetic engineering reported major breakthroughs which generated heated debates. Stem-cell research, which requires destruction of human embryo, challenges the long-established definition of "human life". Out of this controversy, government takes upon itself the task to keep the scientific research and development in morality's check. Though rescinded in the restricting in government funds in stem-cell research, the Obama administration set up strict standard to approve the research through the National Institute of Health. While preservation and promotion of moral standards are most voluntary and spontaneous among the community shared them, it is government's responsibility to prevent serious violation of moral responsibility through regulatory and legislative restriction.

While I do not suggest government impose stringent sanctions against scientific research and development because the role government plays in scientific research and development is limited to constitution, concerns out of security and morality rationalize the granted responsibility as well as capacity to minimize the negative consequences that could disturb the vast benefits we gained through scientific research and development.

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ISSUE69
"Government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development"

Over the last decade, scientific research and development was advanced so significantly that prominent breakthrough in cutting-edge researches like stem-cell research is often overshadowed by controversies surrounding it. These controversies mainly came from two basic concerns of our well-being: security and morality, which necessitates a constitutionally circumscribed governmental restriction.

It is a frequent worry that our striding scientific research and development and its potential application is not paralleled or matched by the advancement in humanity. 

For a sense of security（搭配有些奇怪，sense指的是一种比较模糊的概念，M-W：4 a : a particular sensation or kind orquality of sensation  *a good sense of balance*  b : a definite but often vague awareness or impression  *felt a sense of insecurity*  *a sense of danger*  c : a motivating awareness  *a sense of shame*  d : a discerning awareness and appreciation  *her sense of humor*5 : CONSENSUS  *the sense of the meeting*6 a : capacity for effective application of the powers of the mind as a basis for action or response  : INTELLIGENCE 。不如直接用for security）, government, as a protector of its people, should restrict scientific research and development from being abused or devoted to evil purposes. Bearing the destructive power of some scientific research and development in mind, a government could not be too careful in detecting evil-oriented scientific research and taking measures accordingly, and it applied to both domestically and internationally（to的宾语？）. Read history（, and) one can find almost in every major war there is a role played by a（an） invented destructive weapon from a scientific development. In World War II, for example, Nuclear weapon, which was a symbolic advancement in physics, destroyed populous cities from Europe to Japan and still threatens us today. Countries attempting to produce their own nuclear weapon like Iran and North Korea run nuclear tests in the disguise of the so-called scientific research and development. These notorious and dangerous scientific research and development put our security at great risks and should be sanctioned by the international community through the operation of the International Government "United Nations". Domestically, we are familiar with the possible devastating consequences from scientific research and development from headline story to fictional scene. We all shiver if we are informed that our neighbor is a mad scientist who is obsessed with various chemical reactions. We all experience hard times when we imagine how Dr.Frankenstein created his monster. As individuals who trade part of our freedom to have a sense of security, we have a notion that we would not be able to tackle with all potential threat brought by scientific research and development against us and that is why it is a responsibility of our government, whether national or international. （这是怎么推出来的呢，不太理解）
本段论述为了安全，政府要限制科研。两方面，国外举例用核武器，国内部分的例证什么的有些摸不着头脑= =||| 这样子分类比较难论述。其实安全这个方面不一定只能扯到武器啊，重复率太高。食品安全、交通安全、住房安全、医疗安全、隐私安全……比如说有不法商贩制假贩假，然后公共场所的摄像头妨碍隐私之类的。虽然里面的科技成分没有原子弹那么高，但也能沾上边~


Some might accuse me of overlooking the vast potential positive function that scientific research and development could serve. Admittedly, I am well aware of the various diseases （which）could potentially be alleviated even cured with the development of bioengineering. These breakthroughs, however, come at the risk of devaluing moral standards we have been held for hundreds and years. In recent years, stem-cell research and other genetic engineering reported major breakthroughs which generated heated debates. Stem-cell research, which requires destruction of human embryo, challenges the long-established definition of "human life". Out of this controversy, government takes upon itself the task to keep the scientific research and development in morality's check. Though rescinded in the restricting(restrictions） in government funds in stem-cell research, the Obama administration set up strict standard to approve the research through the National Institute of Health. While preservation and promotion of moral standards are most voluntary and spontaneous among the community shared them, it is government's responsibility to prevent serious violation of moral responsibility through regulatory and legislative restriction.
本段讨论道德问题，对象是生物工程--胚胎干细胞研究。唔，例子选得挺切题的，让我carp一下吧。段首提到了vast potential，涵盖多领域，后文则直接转向生物领域，是否需要过渡一下。私以为奥巴马那一段可以再论述一下：因为胚胎干细胞研究意义重大所以允许它继续进行，因为其挑战道德底线所以严格审查。这样子加强“有些研究虽然有益但是有争议需要约束”的感觉。绞尽脑汁吹毛求疵= =

While I do not suggest government impose stringent sanctions against scientific research and development because the role government plays in scientific research and development is limited to constitution, concerns out of security and morality rationalize the granted responsibility as well as capacity to minimize the negative consequences that could disturb the vast benefits we gained through scientific research and development.


全文的条理挺清楚的，例子也切题。如果要挑毛病的话，就是，唔，不够新意：这类题目的难点啊= =  从“安全和道德要求政府约束科研”这个角度展开可能是比较常见的写法。能不能找到更有意思的更不同的切入点，或者保持政府需要约束的主题不变，提出其他的理由呢？不妨考虑一下题中几个成分，government, science development和restrictions的重要性、目的、表现方式、效果等等，比如restriction要到什么程度，哪些science需要restrictions等等。brainstorm一下吧~

当然，就目前这个主题和观点来看，本文是OK的~

另……难道是生日咩！生日快乐~