综合写作tpo12，第一次交作业，多给点建议

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The lecture apparently refutes the points illustrated in the reading material.According to the professor, the evidence linking to the rewards is not at all convincing.On the contrary, the reading contends an opposite stand that jane is the subject.

The first point the professor uses to cast doubt on the reading is that in 1882 jane had been already dead for 70 years, so the family members had nver actually seen her themselves, they couldn't know for certain if the portrait was Jane or not.

Sencond, they thought Austen's family was very large, while many of Jane's female cousins were teenagers in the around periods or had childern who were teenagers, some of the these teenagers girls resemble Jane Austen. However, the reading states that the features are similar to those of the teenage girl in the painting.

Third,the painting it's attribute only because of it's style but other evidence points to a later date, also there was a record showing that william did not sell the painting in London when Jane was a teenager, he only started selling it when she was 27 years old.whereas the reading material holds that a society portrait painter who was the kind of professional the wealthy Austen family would hire.

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by 狂徒

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先占个座

happyfaith2008UID: 2709856

The lecture apparently refutes the points illustrated in the reading material.According to the professor, the evidence linking to（版大的135句中第一个句型用的是linked to，我不知道这里究竟那个对。） the rewards is not at all convincing.On the contrary, the reading contends an opposite stand that jane is the subject.4 r6 j6 {. j3 O. Q5 G+ h

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Sencond(second), they thought Austen's family was very large, while many of Jane's female cousins were teenagers in the around(?) periods or had childern who were teenagers, some of the(去掉) these teenagers girls resemble Jane Austen. However, the reading states that the features are similar to those of the teenage girl in the painting.
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" R/ E4 K8 G( N) U2 Q$ h* {( EThird,the painting it's attribute only because of it's style but other evidence points to a later date, also there was a record showing that william（William） did not sell the painting in London when Jane was a teenager, he only started selling it when she was 27 years old.whereas(Whereas) the reading material holds that a society portrait painter who was the kind of professional the wealthy Austen family would hire.

除了一些简单的错误以外，没什么毛病。文章第一次写到这样真的让人很吃惊！狂徒的听力和作文肯定写的不错。加油！

tiantian_raoUID: 2623283

The lecture apparently refutes the points illustrated in the reading material.According to the professor, the evidence （加s）linking to the rewards is not at all convincing.On the contrary, the reading contends an opposite stand that jane is the subject.

The first point the professor uses to cast doubt on the reading is that in 1882 jane had been already dead for 70 years, so the family members had nver （never）actually seen her themselves, they couldn't know for certain if the portrait was Jane or not.1 f6 d7 i1 A.
Sencond, they thought Austen's family was very large, while many of Jane's female cousins were teenagers in the around periods or had childern who were teenagers, some of the these teenagers girls resemble Jane Austen. However, the reading states that the features are similar to those of the teenage girl in the painting （少写了，有证据表明是distance niece）
Third,the painting it's attribute only because of it's style but other evidence points to a later date, （少写了因为canvas painting 所以推出是W的作品~）also there was a record showing that william did not sell the painting in London when Jane was a teenager, he only started selling it when she was 27 years old.whereas the reading material holds that a society portrait painter who was the kind of professional the wealthy Austen family would hire. （这句话和前面的对比不强烈哎，应该写因为style，可以推出是这个painter，他activity in the period）
第一次就写这样，比我好多了啦~~~听力的一些小细节没听清~~注意大小写的问题·~·人名要大写~~~加油加油哈~