ISSUE144 第二篇求拍~~感激不尽那！！

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144"It is the artist,not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value." *a personwho evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc. "

Is it the artist or the critic that creates the lasting values of oursociety? I agree with the speaker that artists play a more essential role inleaving us worthy legacies, while critics assist us evaluate them. My argumentincludes three aspects, as discussed below.

What is the very notion of lasting value? As far as I am concerned,this enduring worth consists of the mental pleasures rendered by music, films,novels or paintings - It is Beethoven's euphonious ninth symphony that relaxesourselves after a tedious day of work; it is David Fincher's breathtaking FightClub that entertains us during a boring weekend; it is F. Scott. Fitzgerald'sThe Great Gatsby that gives us a better understanding of American dream and oursociety. Musicians, directors, or writers, they are the heralds of rescuing ourminds from the chains of stifling working pressures. The value of their consequentialartworks - not only marks lives of our ancestors, but also sparks our own -does not fade with the time past.

The second point of my contention involves the role of critics in themass communication of arts. Nowadays, our culture is overloaded by artworkexplosion - millions of new songs are being played on the Internet every day,and hundreds of new films are ready to premiere every few weeks. Under certaincircumstance, critic serves as a filter, with the help of which individuals cansurvive from aesthetic fatigue and find their true interests. The billboardwill publish the Top 100 songs of last year every January; the Academy Awardwill be rewarded to prominent actors, actresses or directors all around theworld; New York Times has its own best seller rank which steer the mass what toread. Moreover, most of us do not really know how art works, what the authorwants to say and what a masterpiece truly means - Thus, we need critics todiscover what we overlooked and what we don't comprehend.

However, we cannot ignore the disadvantages critics may bring - infact, most of them are biased. After all, how can a 70-year-old conservativecritic compliment the staggering performance of Lady Gaga; how can a youngR&B zealot be in favor of Mozart's classical music; and how can a horrorfilm pursuer fall in love with Avatar? What's more, critics may even degradecertain stunning works. Take Van Gogh as an example, his paintings wereworthless when he was alive, yet now, even thousands of dollars cannot affordan authentic one.

In sum, while critics admittedly help reduce the difficulty ofappraising artwork values, they are also another that add to it - It is chieflyartists that give society something of lasting value.


昨天花了2个半小时憋了处女文，今天两个小时左右总算搞定了第二篇。今天遣词造句的时间花了很久。。。很多话要很久才能冒出来。。。例子什么的倒是比昨天的多了不少……不过文章整个结构和深度就欠了很多了……写到最后明显偷懒了额……


新人求拍，感谢大家帮忙啦！！

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Is it the artist or the critic that creates the lasting values of oursociety? I agree with the speaker that artists play a more essential role in leaving us worthy legacies, while critics assist 不及物，不如用help更通俗点 us evaluate them. My argument includes three aspects, as discussed below.

开头好像写argue
像模板……
而且这个开头感觉没有啥实质性的内容
只是简单说了我同意而已。。。。。

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谢楼上！！ 确实感觉自己的文章比较空，很多地方光给结论没有论证清楚~~BTW，没用模版额。。。

自己改了遍，希望大家上猛砖！！！

Is it the artist or the critic that creates the lasting (perpetual/eternal) values of our society? I agreewith the speaker that artists play a more essential role in leaving us worthylegacies, while critics assist us to evaluate them. My argument includes threeaspects, as discussed below. (To better present myideas, I thoroughly argue the point of view in the following three aspects.)

What is the very notion of lasting value? As far as I am concerned,this enduring worth consists of the mental pleasures rendered by music, films,novels or paintings - It is Beethoven's euphonious ninth symphony that relaxesourselves after a tedious day of work; it is David Fincher's breathtaking FightClub that entertains us during a boring weekend; it is F. Scott. Fitzgerald'sThe Great Gatsby that gives us a better understanding of American dream and oursociety. Musicians, directors, or writers, they are the heralds of rescuing ourminds from the chains of stifling working pressures. The value of their consequentialartworks - not only marks lives of our ancestors, but also sparks our own -does not fade with the time past. (有点跑？应该更强调突出artist 的重要作用？any suggestion?)

The second point of my contention involves the role of critics in themass communication of arts. Nowadays, our culture is overloaded by artworkexplosion - millions of new songs are being played on the Internet every day,and hundreds of new films are ready to premiere every few weeks. Under certaincircumstance, critic serves as a filter, with the help of which individuals cansurvive from aesthetic fatigue and find their true interests. The billboardwill publish the Top 100 songs of last year every January; the Academy Awardwill be rewarded to prominent actors, actresses or directors all around theworld; New York Times has its own best seller rank which steer the mass what toread. Moreover, most of us do not really know how art works, what the authorwants to say and what a masterpiece truly means - Thus, we need critics todiscover what we overlooked and what we don't comprehend.（moreover之后这段是否过于单薄？暴力论证不加分析？）

However（Nevertheless/notwithstanding..我总是不记得用这两个词的。。）, we cannot ignore thedisadvantages critics may bring - in fact, most of them are biased. （need further explanation?）After all, how can a70-year-old conservative critic compliments the staggering performance of LadyGaga; How
can a youngR&B zealot be in favor of Mozart's classical music; How can a horror film pursuer falls in love with 3D epic Avatar?What's more, critics may even degrade certain stunning works. Take Van Gogh asan example, his paintings were worthless when he was alive, yet now, eventhousands of dollars cannot afford an authentic one.（论证不充分？）

In sum, while critics admittedly help reduce the difficulty ofappraising artwork values, they are also another that add to it - It is chieflyartists that give society something of lasting value.（偷懒了。。。）

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其实你可以把三个方面总结一下 简单的在开头说起

这样还可以照应文章后面的结构和内容啊

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恩 我比较懒 而且处于期末 我能给你看多少就看多少吧 哎
表对俺抱太大期望哈%