zy0921回报gter改作文~

zy0921UID: 2738668

今天刚刚考完，从明天开始帮大家看作文吧。
本人水平不是特别好，但是在半英语国家生活了三年，也上过一年的英语培训。

希望大家多多支持~
PS：最好改过拼写和语法，最好有提纲~
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开学了，最近比较忙，尽量改吧……

暖羊羊UID: 2738218

原来是新加坡的~~~~

zy0921UID: 2738668

2# 暖羊羊

是的是的，偶坡上人~

暖羊羊UID: 2738218

温暖的新加坡啊。。。。

justbegunUID: 2746795

谢谢LZ了哟~先贴前几天写的~

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“The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds.”



Ever since the first machine has come to life, people have been depending on machines more and more. Recently, we found ourselves nearly indispensable from machines. Are we still superior to machines because they are only tools of human minds? I believe the answer could be yes and no. For machines and human share different superiority in certain areas, and also machines are no longer tools only.


To deeper explain the different advantage of human and machine; I’d like to illustrate the example of machine translation. Though human translates more accurately and readable, we can not deny the superiority of machine translation in its speed. In a culture which fathoms anything fast nowadays, quality comes second to quantity. The idea of getting know something as soon as possible, the way of living more and more dependent on internet and the situation of the world’s getting smaller has made us to accept much more information in whatever languages. Those translations are just like fast food, unhealthy but quick. While we still appreciate human translation, we have to admit the superiority of machine translation.


Just like machine translation, the reason for us to invent all the machines is to create something to do what people can not do, what people do not want to do and there is no necessity to do. It is actually accessible to agree with the idea of machines could be superior to human in some areas. Otherwise, is there any necessity to invent them at all?


Thus, I’d like to describe machine nowadays more like a helper, a friend rather than just only a tool. In agriculture, we use auto visual robots to help cutting the grass, picking up the fruits and killing the insects; In factory, we need machines to monitor the process of work; In hospital, machines are used to detect the trivial abnormal of patients; In everyday life, we treat our computer like a friend, in its need we finish our work and spend our rest time. Are they just a tool any more? Since our life is fulfilled with machines, machines have become a very important part of our society. We can even imagine machine as a competitor. Like Deep Blue, the chess-playing machine made by IBM, has once defeated human, we should not always think that human are superior to machines for they are only tools; but we have to be aware that machines are no longer tools only and we have to be alerted to prevent machines to be too strong to overcome human. Or one day, jobs like translators could be no longer available for machine translation has improved its quality.


All in all, human minds and machines both have own dominance. Which is more superior and inferior is actually not important. But what counts are that we have to keep our technology develop, and at the same time, keep the supremacy of human.

zy0921UID: 2738668

5# hyq533



有缘啊，这是我考试的时候写的~


130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."

Children are the hope for the future, they are the vigorous seeds which will finally sprout and grow into the backbone of the world. How children are educated not only demonstrates the trend of
social development, but also, implicitly, determines the destiny of society.
（有Background很不错，但是注意开头是要表明立场的。个人觉得你的立场很不明确。要注意这个Issue是Dual Claim，所以最好分开说，比如：I agree with the claim that how children are socialized is determinant of the tomorrow of the society; meanwhile, I share in common with the speaker that we have not yet known to raise children to bring about a better society.云云）

Admittedly, socialization is an essential process in the growth of children.
（看过后面以后的建议：可以在这里给一个social 的定义，这样你在后面提到合作呀什么的才显得有点联系）
The habits they have formed, the interpersonal skills they have honed, and the characters they have cultivated in the social activities will have far-reaching influence not only on their own development, but also on the future of society. Leadership, dating back to the boys' ball games, influences the performance of a corporation（这个把ball game扯上Corp 感觉有些牵强）; Communication, forming from the small talks with friends or presentations in front of the class, plays a vital role when it comes to
professions such as marketing or diplomacy. And (and 一般不要放在一句话的开头) cooperation, initially cultivated in the experience of helping each other with homework during childhood（这里你的cooperation 概念有些混乱，合作不是乐于助人啊~最好举一个共同完成某个目标的例子，打比赛就可以啊~）, is also important in the development of one's career（牵强啊~为什么有助于Career呢，可以简略解释一下）. The society as a whole is composed of people and organizations, thus, such competences, through affecting the well-being of the individuals and the performance of organizations, finally influence the society. (这句话是总结么？总结的话忌讳有新内容出现的，这里：1.compose 的概念是新的。 2. Competence 之前没有提到过。)

Unluckily（用Unfortunately吧，unluckily 比较口语化）, with the rapid rhythm of modern life, parents, as the first teachers of children, sometimes fail to strike the balance between their work and the fostering of children so, the children are either isolated from the society or prematurely socialized.（这个论点还是有些牵强：首先，家长忙跟小孩social之间的联系你没有阐述清楚；其次，还有老师啊，小孩子也不能因为家长忙就废了啊。）（加上For example或其他表举例的话吧） Most of the parents in China hope their children to acquire skills as early as possible. It's common to see a five-year-old child reciting a poem or working on the arithmetic problems under the supervision of parents. By showing parents a delicate picture, or a solved problem from Mathematical Olympiad, children can prove themselves excellent and receive praises. Yet, playing is always(尽量不要出现绝对化的词语，改成usually, 或者mostly等) taken as a bad behaviour and sometimes results in scolding or even beating. The Chinese spend most of their time accumulating skills in their childhood, while they overlook their relationship with the society and the development of creativity(突然冒出了Creativity的概念). （谢绝And在句子开头哈~）And in Japan, parents are just too busy to care about their children, which breeds groups of teenagers like the so called called OTAKUs. They are trapped by their childhood interests, including animation, Internet, and the sense of security at home, cutting themselves off from the outside world. As a result, certain social problems, such as suicide, crime, psychic diseases and so forth have long been existing among them.
(这一段你的论点是讲我们不会教育吧，但是你只给出了家长太忙，我觉得有点单薄的，而且你只讲了children，没有和better society 联系起来)

Such phenomenon has drawn people's attention: education is being reformed to train children to grow up smoothly. However,
modern education usually fails to cultivate the synthetic capacity of children, either
the schools are too eager to engage children in
social activities（negative evidence）, or they lay too much stress on the indoctrination of knowledge. Nowadays, there exist two totally antithetical opinions about education. In America and Europe, children of young age are hardly taught about rigorous knowledge of systematical disciplines（他们学知识还是很扎实的，你这样说老美会不会不高兴啊~把hardly改了吧）, but they spend most of the time on socialization activities: they are encouraged to think out (come up with) something special, to participate in a game, or to talk actively. However, when they get older and enter college, they need to assimilate knowledge. They can find this so hard that, sometimes, they give up their studies or become psychologically ill.
In contrast, in Asia, children are taught science, literature from a very young age. Through the way to their college, they keep competing for high GPA. As soon as(After?) they go to university, the burden of homework suddenly disappears. They are on their way to socialization be social/socialize now. Finance courses, management courses and MBA, which are most popular and lucrative in society, are also mostly taught in campus. Such kind of socialization（请问MBA等等跟social有什么关系啊？）, could only push the students to the society without enough preparation. As a result, Asian people, such as Chinese, are usually individually successful and clever, while they fail to get on well with their team members and colleagues，which impairs the cohesion of society.
（个人感觉这一段根上一段讲的是一个东西吧~都是讲教育的弊端，可以合在一起；其次，这个对比貌似没有什么用啊;还是我理解错了你这一段的用意？）

To conclude, the destiny of society is laid on children: how children are socialized today could to a large extend influence social development. However, besides socialization, educators should also focus on the indoctrination of knowledge. （这个idea怎么感觉没有看到过。。。）We should strike a balance （那个你前面貌似没有提到balance的概念啊）
between the cultivation of character as well as social literacy and the imparting of experience, skills and knowledge.

总结一下：
个人觉得你对题目理解还不很全面，因此整体的结构安排都有些问题。
一，层次很不清楚，不论是段内还是段之间。建议：1.提纲的时候最好把思路弄清楚，论述安排的有逻辑和层次一些。2.不要吝啬用连接词
二，你只讲了how children are socialized has influence on the society, “determines”这么强势的概念没有体现出来。
三，你只讲了教育的弊端，没有提到这种弊端和better society有什么关系。有一个建议：你可以从how to define a better society 入手，然后评论现行的教育对这样的better society 有好处还是坏处云云。
四，很多时候你的论述很牵强，没有说服力，多多intake 吧~


恩~比较focus on 逻辑的问题，语言还是很流畅的，不过尽量减少短句的出现啊。

加油阿！欢迎反馈~

zy0921UID: 2738668

6# justbegun

159
“The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds.”



Ever since the first machine has come to life, people have been depending on machines more and more. Recently, we found (find) ourselves nearly indispensable from machines (find machines nearly indispensable from our daily life). Are we still (去掉still) superior to machines because they are only tools of human minds? I believe the answer could be yes and no, for machines and human share different superiority in certain areas; and also (in addition) machines are no longer tools only.


(To begin with / First and foremost,) To deeper explain the different advantage(s) of human(s) and machine(s); I’d (would 避免缩写) like to illustrate (using/by/through) the example of machine translation. Though human translation is more accurate and readable, we cannot deny the superiority of machine translation in its speed. In a culture which fathoms (红宝背的不错，但是这个词用的不合适) anything fast nowadays, quality comes second to quantity. The idea of getting to know something as soon as possible, the way of living more and more dependent on Internet and the situation of the world’s getting smaller has made us to accept much more information in whatever languages. Those translations are just like fast food, unhealthy but quick. While we still appreciate human translation, we have to admit the superiority of machine translation.
（论述段的结构很不规范，没有总结句，所以不知道你的论点是什么。）


Just like machine translation, the reason for us to invent all the machines is to create something to do what people can not （cannot，后面不改了啊） do, to do what people do not want (or what there is no necessity for human to do). It is actually accessible（？？？） to agree with the idea that machines could be superior to human in some areas. Otherwise, is there any necessity to invent them at all? (避免在段尾出现问句)
（没有必要单独列一段吧）


Thus, I’d like (would) to describe machines nowadays more like a helper, a friend rather than just （only，与just 重复，去掉） a tool. In the field of agriculture, we use auto visual robots (不知道这个是什么？不晓得你翻译的对不) to help cutting the grass, picking up the fruits and killing the insects; In (分号后小写) factory, we need machines to monitor the process of work; In hospital, machines are used to detect the trivial abnormality of patients;（到此为止的例子都跟你的friend概念无关） In everyday life, we treat our computer like a friend,（原因还是没有说明friend的概念阿） in its need we finish our work and spend our rest time. Are they just tools any more? Since our life is fulfilled with machines, machines have become a very important part of our society. We can even imagine machine as a competitor. Like Deep Blue, the chess-playing machine made by IBM, has once defeated human（用master会好一点吧）, we should not always think that human are superior to machines for（
the reason that：for后面加句子要从句）
they are only tools， but we have to be aware that machines are no longer tools only and we have to be alerted to prevent machines to be too strong to overcome human. Or one day, jobs like translators could be no longer available for machine translation has improved its quality.
（这一段有两个观点friend and competitor，建议分两段写）


All in all, human minds and machines both have (their) own dominance. Which is more superior （and inferior去掉) is actually not important，
but what counts is that we have to keep our technology develop, and at the same time, keep the supremacy of human.





总结：同学你需要在作文上下大功夫，加油吧！

语言的问题：这是你最大的弊端，必须下功夫解决。
首先，你的语法很成问题啊，需要特别注意的：单复数；从句用的很不地道；词性混乱（比如形容词和名词）；主语和谓语动词的一致性。这个是很基本的东西，我也不知道给你什么建议，看语法书？
以后最好每写完一篇，认真仔细检查语法错误。
其次，缺乏连接词，这样使得你的文章很没有层次。

关于对题目的理解：
http://www.gtz921.com/_d268933593.htm
可以参考以下新东方张雷东老师的笔记。

这道题还是很简单的，你可以从以下方面入手：
1原因：解释为什么或者为什么不machines are only tools of human minds
2 原因—〉结果：仅仅因为machine是tools 所以humans are superior? Humans 有情感machines 没有，云云。
3 结论：human mind > machine并不是所有情况都成立，这一点你提到了。

结构问题：
这位同学写之前没有列提纲吧~所以你的论述很乱很乱，加上缺乏连接词，和你的分段，给人感觉就是一团麻。。。
注意主体段的规范结构：总结+解释+例子+总结，这一点你完全没有做到阿。

总之先解决语法问题吧。。。加油！

chaliaUID: 2589767

lz能帮我改一下吗? 我的处女作 issue130


谢谢啊~!!

130"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."


孩子融入社会的能力决定了社会的命运。遗憾的是，我们还不知道怎样培养孩子使他们对社会有益  (处女作,未计时,565字)



How can we build a more prosperous, more beautiful and more harmonious society has always been a common question during the process in which the human being yearning for a better life. Ultimately the determined factor of the destiny of society becomes the count for much issue. According to the title statement the society's destiny assorts with how children are socialized and we have not yet learned how to raise children who can better our society. While I agree that children are the future of our society, I insist we have already gained the ability to cultivate children who can build a better society.

"Youth is rich, nation is rich; youth is strong, nation is strong", noted Qichao Liang, a leading ideologist of Qing Dynasty and a pioneer in the reformation of China's society. When it comes to the youth, the childhood is the most critical process that the youth cannot escape from and avoid. Accordingly, in the history of human race civilization, neither the archon nor ordinary people would have distracted their attention from the education of children.

Furthermore, socialized education nowadays has become a crucial part in children education. At present, the trends towards a multi-polar world and economic globalization are developing in greater depth, hence whether a country can maintain its competitive edge and leading position in the international market depends very much on the ability of human communication, teamwork and cooperation. For example, the rising complexity of scientific research is now imperatively demanding persons with good cooperative skills, which can ensure that international involvement moves to more organized and better-planned structures. Besides scientific research, protection of environment, research of public health and worldwide economic and trade cooperation also place high expectations and demands for well-socialized people. In other words, the development speed and direction of our society will face a serious threat unless the younger generation of our society has such socialized skills. Therefore, development and cultivation of personal contact and group dynamics that shape children’s characteristic has a great impact on improvement and progress of the society.

Consider the speaker's claim that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.This criticism on the education system or the parents gives us a sense of nitpicking. Doubtless, the current education system is far from perfect and has lots of defects. But the arguer seems to ignore a fact that, in the thousands of years of the near history, human has successfully built a better world and this trend will surely last in the future. Our ancestors have given us their knowledge and experience base on which we create, or improve, in a more precise word, a better world than theirs. In this point of view, we can proudly declare that we have already learned how to raise children to bring about a “better” society rather than a “best” one.

To sum up, it is true that the way we socialize children today would determine the destiny of society but the assertion that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can better our society might neglect the tremendous efforts we have devoted. Although our educational method is proved to be effective in bettering the society, we cannot be swelled with what we have already achieved in the fields and what we need is just persistent attention as well as more efforts.

justbegunUID: 2746795

非藏感谢zy0921~让我知道自己很大的问题
自己改自己的文章时总是会忽视语法问题
而且确实不喜欢写提纲
=========
我要反省下
没多少天就考试了~
+++++++++++++

zy0921UID: 2738668

10# justbegun


哈哈~加油吧~一定要有信心的哦~保argu争issue！一定要注意语法哈~

zy0921UID: 2738668

9# chalia

不好意思，最近在旅行，刚回来看见~

How can we（we can，从句用陈述句语序） builda more prosperous, more（去掉） beautiful and more（去掉） harmonious society has always been a common questionduring the process in which human being(s are) yearningfor a better life (能用长句非常好，但是这个句子从duringthe process往后安排的有些别扭，通常我们不用during the process, 用in, 但是又和后面从句中的in 重复了。。。). Ultimately the determined （determinant）factor of the destiny ofsociety becomes the count for much issue (many issues).According to the title statement (speaker’sclaim,) the society's destinyassorts with how children are socialized and we have not yet learned how toraise children who can better our society (???).While I agree that children are the future of our society, I insist we havealready gained (acquired) the ability to cultivate children who can build a bettersociety. (用目的状语比定语从句好一些)
（个人感觉前半段比较废话@@）
(最好有个连接词和总结句在这里) "Youth is rich, nationis rich; youth is strong, nation is strong", noted (by) QichaoLiang (如果不是原话，要加“and Iparaphrase”), a leading ideologist of QingDynasty and a pioneer in the reformation of China's (Chinese) society.When it comes to the youth, the childhood is the most critical process that theyouth cannot escape from and avoid. Accordingly, in the history of human race（去掉）civilization, neither the archon（这个词。。。） nor ordinary people would have distracted their attentionfrom the education of children.
（坦白讲，不知道你这段在干什么。。。）
Furthermore, socialized education（???） nowadays has become acrucial part in children(‘s) education. At present, the trends towards a multi-polarworld and economic globalization are developing in greater depth, hence whethera country can maintain(s) its competitive edge and leading position in theinternational market depends very much on the ability of human communication,teamwork and cooperation. For example, the rising complexity of scientificresearch is now imperatively demanding persons with good cooperative skills,which can ensure that international involvement moves to more organized andbetter-planned structures. Besides scientific research, protection of environment,research of public health and worldwide economic and trade cooperation alsoplace high expectations and demands for (on)well-socialized people. In other words, the development speed and direction ofour society will face a serious threat unless the younger generation of oursociety has such socialized skills. (这句话严重了吧…) Therefore, development and cultivation of personal contactand group dynamics (???) that shape(s) children’s characteristic has a great impact onimprovement and progress of the society.
(例子举得很好，但是你没有解释socialize这个词，因此无法联系到合作啊，交流啊等概念。)
（连接词）Considerthe speaker's claim that we have not yet learned how to raise children who canhelp bring about a better society. This criticism on the education system orthe（去掉the） parents gives us a sense of nitpicking. Doubtless (undoubtedly), thecurrent education system is far from perfect and has lots of defects（, b）ut the arguer seems toignore a fact that, in the thousands of years of the near history, human hassuccessfully built a better world and this trend will surely last in the future（你准备argu了吧，想想这是什么错误？）. Ourancestors have given us their knowledge and experience base on which we create,or improve, in a more precise word, a better world than theirs. In this pointof view, we can proudly declare that we have already learned how to raisechildren to bring about a “better” society rather than a “best” one.
（这段有跑题嫌疑，严重脱离教育，你不妨从how to define a better society 入手）
To sum up, it is true that the waywe socialize children today would determine the destiny of society but theassertion that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can better oursociety might neglect the tremendous efforts we have devoted. Although our educationalmethod is proved to be effective in bettering the society, we cannot be swelledwith what we have already achieved in the fields and what we need is justpersistent attention as well as more efforts. （结尾基本OK，只是结尾的论点前面没有很好论述）

总结：
语言方面：读的很痛苦啊。。。有明显中式英语的痕迹，而且行文不是很流畅。不会用的词千万不要查文曲星硬凑啊，否则会弄巧成拙的。
逻辑方面：除了中间那一段举例，其他给人的感觉很空洞，有明显的跑题和牵强嫌疑。

总之多加油吧！

zy0921UID: 2738668

12# hyq533

Children are the hope of thefuture, like the vigorous seeds which will sprout and finally grow up into thebackbone of the world. I agree with the speaker that how children aresocialized today not only is （把not only but also 还有adv放在谓语动词后面吧）
indicative of the trends of societaldevelopment, but also implicitly is of determinant importance to the destiny ofsociety. Meanwhile, I share in common with the speaker that nowadays we havenot yet learned how to raise children in an efficient and correct way to helpbring about a better society. （赞开头！）
Socialization is an essentialprocess for children’s growth which involves the communication and interactionwith other people and during which children's characters and habits are formedso that they can better adapt themselves to the society into which they willstep into after growing up. For example, the communication skill, developed inthe very early age when children start to talk with parents and friends, is oneof the main measures of one’s ability dealing （to deal）with jobs in daily life andmore importantly, can be a vital competence to such careers as presidency,translation, diplomacy, attorney (不知道律师用抽象名词怎么表达) (这个词可以) and consultancy. A president’s speech could win back thewhole nation’s confidence from the grievous depression; a diplomat’s successfulnegotiation could bring peace to the nation by alleviating the adversarialtension; while an attorney’s testimony and argument of eloquence could save theinnocent from erroneous judgment which may lead to his death penalty. Thecommunication skills, specifically in the forms of language skills, persuasiveskills and interactive skills which are cultivated in socialization could liftthe spirit, avert a war and save life, which is fatal to the destiny of societyand its people.
（这段总体不错，但是最后的结论有点小偏题，我们在讲socialization，而不是 communication,这只是一个例子。）
Unfortunately, with the rapid rhythmof modern life, children’s parents, often burying their heads in the piles ofwork and chasing the pace of the world, well educated and intelligent as theyare, have not learnt how to raise children who can help bring about a bettersociety.（插入语用的不错） On the one hand , they fail to spare time with childrenso that their kids lack the love and care from family ,becoming isolated fromthe society; and（去掉and） on the other hand, parents, especially from Asiancountries, fully aware of the fierce competition for talents and hefty pressureof employment in the society, are(去掉) usually lay too much pressure on their heirs, forcingthem to work on difficult mathematical problems, making them to learn musicalinstruments from a very young age, which, as a result, （那个，重复啦）resultsin psychological illness of the poor young children. In the final analysis,parents, though well intended always, are the true culprits for the children’sunsociability sometimes.
（感觉你的插入语用的过于频繁了，试着用用连续长句）
（另外，这段只说了教育，忽视了better society 的概念）
As for the education institutions,such as the primary school and secondary school, the（去掉the） teachers sometimes can't (cannot,不要用缩写) strike a balance betweenthe cultivating of children's social skills and the indoctrination ofknowledge. For instance, in China, burdened from the competitive pressure, mostteachers are very concerned about the GPA of their students. Thus, they filltheir students' school time with books and homework but little socialactivities; stuff their students' brain with knowledge but not idea. Schooltime is the golden period for one’s growth from puerility to maturity, when ifsocialization education is postponed, it is postponed once for all. As aresult, Chinese people can be solely strong and intelligent, but theirexcellence pales due to their lack of social literacy when entering the societyto work with colleges in a team. Moreover, the society is comprised by singlepersons, only if individuals collaborate together can the performance of asociety as a cohesive integration be improved, and only when all people aresocially skilled, a bright future to the society’s fate could be brought.
（这两段，试着和better society 联系）


In sum, children will grow into the mainstay of thesociety, quite a few of which will be on pivotal positions and have significantimpact on the society that determines the destiny of the world. Whereasnowadays neither do children’s parents nor teachers are fully aware about thatand mean to socialize them on the way they grow up.

语言和层次都有很大进步，赞一个！但是注意不要忽略better society的概念。加油！

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麻烦楼主大哥了，帮我改一下吧，新鲜出炉的处女作，嘿嘿，有很多不足的地方，还望楼主大哥多提点啦，先谢谢了，嘿嘿……

"We can usually learn much more from people whose views we share than from people whose views contradict our own; disagreement can cause stress and inhibit learning."

    It's true for most of us that life is complicated; we have to face many disagreements in our daily life. What's more, disagreements can definitely cause stress and inhibit learning, which can defeat us and make us felling upset.
   Take myself as an example, as the chairman of our Students Union, we met many conflicts. When we planned to do something, we must get together to discuss, discuss what the plan would like, discuss how to fulfill the plan, discuss how to make the plan perfect. During the process, my own ideas were doubted by my fellow students sometimes, which made me angry and even had quarrels with them.
    However, we just found the best final proposal every time in the quarrels, thus to say, contradiction ideas made us better understand one special problem. Through debate, we can usually learn much more from people whose views contradict our own.
   As to the problem why do this phenomenon happens, I deem that we all don’t want to be defeated, we don’t want to be look down to, we want our own saying be heard by the surroundings and to be the significant person. When someone holds the negative views, we hope they can recognize our point of view is better. In order to achieve the goal, we try so hard to reconsider the problem, consult documents, and reinforce our idea that we can convince the opposes. As a result, we can benefit a lot.
   In addition, how much we can learn from the contradiction ideas is based on our own attitude, we must comply with the following three rules can we gain the best benefit. The first one is” Listen to the others’ idea as carefully as you can.” Only with accurate understanding of the negative view can we amend our faults and acknowledge others’ advantages. The second is “Never say anything without due consideration.” When discussing, be patient and don’t be stubborn. Don’t act on the strength of an impulse, which make yourself to be the impeder of the debate. The last one is” Follow the truth.” Don’t keep on you view because of reputation even through you recognize it’s a wrong one.
   As far as I have concerned, disagreement is one of the most basic problems people facing when cooperation. To have a better communication, we must have the right attitude towards this problem; this is why this kind of conflicts is getting more and more important in our daily life. Learning knowledge from the opposite point of views is becoming one of the skills we must have in the 21st century.
  To conclude, there is no doubt that we can learn from people whose views contradict our own, we need to form this habit to make ourselves more outstanding, as well.

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  Genuine knowledge comes from practice, and so does an outstanding quality of instructions. From Art to Engineering department, a falculty with working experience always can create new ideas and rewarding instructions either in class or in laboratory. As long as it doesn’t impede normal teaching work, working outside the academic world is encourageable.
  New ideas and avant-guard theories are always promoted by the practitioners.In medical field, new ideas usually are not coming from the teaching faculty, but from the hospital or from the labtory. Without practising on the real live creatures, no theory dares to be used.Without a series of clinical trials, new medical tehnology can not be created. For example, the vaccinia is invented by a English country doctor E. Jenner, who accidently found out that women who usually milking the cow are less affected the variola. Then he created the vaccine based on this discovery. In other word, the faculty in university could also spend time outside school, doing researches. maybe he or she will discover some new ideas during the practice.
  A professional faculty can always find mistakes when he or she works outside the academic world, which is highly-valuabe due to the reason that what he or she taught to their students will puts in use after they graduate. Academic theory may not be useful or contibutive when it comes to the real life, because that some theories do not adhere to the pragmatic utilization. To avoid it as possible, a professional faculty is the best candidate to be the one who detects and corrects these mistakes, since he or she has an ocean of knowledges in this certain area and have the ability and authority to judge. It will improve the quality of instructions after accomplishing it. In some university ,students in education department have a course called “education psychology” which is highly-cotroversial that teachers in the elementory or high school usaully dissent with some potanic teaching methods, which are based on the assumption that students eager to learn, which is absolutely impossible in schools of this level. Some teachers in my school actually took a part time job in neighborhood high school and conducted a series teaching experiments in order to find a new break-through of making a link with teaching method in book and in school.After this experiment, they published a paper to illustrate what they inspired from the expriment. After it, students learned a different idea of teaching from these faculty’s class.
  However too many outside jobs will damage the normal teaching works. Some teachers would feel that it earn more money outside than the compus teaching, so they focus less on the teaching, for example, poor preparations in the class, less energy to illustrate the idea, late for work, or even be abscent or quit the job. And that will impede the students from learning. Furthermore, it will sabotage the ethos in the campus, creat a utilitarian atmosphere. A school without academic atmosphere will decrease students’ passion of lucubration. With low acdemic level, a student will either hardly get a job in his or her study area or persume a higher education. Nevertheless, if teachers do not impede the class-teaching, working outside is still pleasurable.
  Besides, in order to improve the quanlity of instruction in college and university level, a faculty could not only working outside but also changing ideas with other teachers in different department once a while. In Oxford University, a small tea house is created for faculty to exchange teaching methods and brainstorm about current news. A scientific professor can always benefit from the literatural professor, since they may have a compeletly different perspective of live. They can pick up some indispensable omitted matters. Clearly, it is a excellent means to eithor improve the or in the acdemic field.
  In sum, encouraging faculty to work outside is a  favorable method to improve the quality of instruction. However, faculty should mainly focuses on the class-teaching and try to avoid damaging it. But beside that, it is worthy to let faculty step into the real works.