第二次argument169

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

第一次写完后的恐惧感渐渐消失了，虽然还有20天，但是我相信经过我的努力，我一定能在2月10号取得一个好成绩，我的QQ是386808787~北京的~如果有愿意跟我一起努力的就加我Q吧~注明GRE哦~一定要~
对了对了~请大家帮我批改一下~我还是不确定自己的位置~


169The following appeared in a letter from a department chairperson to the president of Pierce University.

"Some studies conducted by Bronston College, which is also located in a small town, reveal that both male and female professors are happier living in small towns when their spouses are also employed in the same geographic area. Therefore, in the interest of attracting the most gifted teachers and researchers to our faculty and improving the morale of our entire staff, we at Pierce University should offer employment to the spouse of each new faculty member we hire. Although we cannot expect all offers to be accepted or to be viewed as an ideal job offer, the money invested in this effort will clearly be well spent because, if their spouses have a chance of employment, new professors will be more likely to accept our offers."



This letter concludes from some studies conducted by Bronston College that if they, Pierce University, could offer employment to the spouse of each new faculty member they hire, they would improve the morale of their staff and new professors will be more likely to accept their offers. This argument suffers from a series of logical problems, and is therefore wholly unpersuasive.

To begin with, common sense informs me that College and University are two totally different conceptions for a myriad of differences, including the number of faculty, the geographic area of their school and even their scale. But the most difference between College and University is the staff they employment, but unfortunately and somewhat ironically, the conclusion of this letter is focus on their staff. So, the results of studies from College cannot simply apply to University and therefore this argument is a poor one.

Secondly, happiness is a abstract noun and notion. A number of factors such as the salary they gain, the children they have and the friends they associate are codetermine their feeling of whether happy or not. So the conclusion of this letter based on only the one simple reason that their spouses are also employed in the same area is firmly unwarranted. And different people have different standard of that concept, even those people from that study really feel happier for that reason, we also cannot assume others, especially in University not in College, will have the same feeling.

Thirdly, we should also focus on the solution of this letter proposed. The chairperson only desire to offer employment to the spouse of their new faculty, not the whole staff. However, this situation is not fair for other employees and may arouse their unsatisfied emotion. Therefore, they may even abdicate or job-hopping. Thus, the damn of this measure is overweight to the benefit, let alone to improve the morale of their entire staff.

Finally, a careful reading of this letter reveals two additional problems. One is the outcome of improve the morale. Even we suppose that the measure they perform really bring a striking effect and all the staff feel happier. However, we cannot draw a conclusion that they will improving their morale for the reason that they may immersed in their happy family and have little time to work and think. The other is new professors are totally different from faculty that have mentioned at the end of the letter, for instance their age, the experience of their life and even their philosophy and sense of worth. So, the measure also serviceable for them is uncharted.

In conclusion, the argument of this letter cannot be taken seriously as it stands for the main reason I demonstrated above. To better evaluate the argument we would need to know that all the staff including the new and the old, the faculty and the professor are wholly desire to live with their spouse and will virtually improving their working morale. Thus, we enable to invested the money and this effort will clearly be well spent.

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

顶起来。。。。。。

kevin83317UID: 2342297

我个人认为两个比较大的flow你没有提到，
1. their spouses are working in the same geographical area, not in the same place. If a professor's wife is, say, a farmer :), how could Pierce give the offer?

2. the most important, can Pierce attract Gifted People by merely provieding offers to their spouses?

you may have missed the point that the purpose of this proposal is "attracting the most gifted teachers and researchers to our faculty and improving the morale of our entire staff", so I think the 2 must be analysed in your arg.

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

3# kevin83317
第一个错误没太明白，是说cannot offer to all the spouses of employees么？
第二个是一个很大的错误，不过不是说能找出三个错误就够了么？一定要把所有大错误都找到么？
那我到时候考试的时候一紧张~肯定会找不全啊~

kevin83317UID: 2342297

第一个可能是我的理解有偏差，不提也无所谓吧
第二个我觉得应该说到

所以考前要熟读题库嘛~