【InEffable 小组第8次作业】issue131- by binronger

binrongerUID: 2747524

TOPIC: ISSUE131 - "The arts (painting, music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."


The appearence of the word marked that the society entered into a civilazation age. Words, one of the significant simbol of arts, record the history of human being. And then, the art, reveal the inner world of human being, influence one's motion to some extent and somehow impact on the society.
To begin with, creating arts is a popular way to reflect indivitual's hidden ideas. people express themselves by many ways. They would lough, cry, even keep slience, but this motion will last and keep by arts such as painting, music, literature and so forth. A piece of picture can reflect the drawer's emotion whether anger or happy.  For example, the famous painting, the self-portrait of Van Gough in which the main objection is a turkey, showed the painters life target and his  strong spirit. From the picture, we learn more about the men who we have not meet before and see the hidden ideas in his mind. Van Gough's picture is just a example, various of arts discovery the ideas under the word, from which we have access to know the word better.

Furthermore, the arts have the power to influence indivituals.Common sense tells me that it is important for soldiers to have a  steady belief which the arts offer this.The general's speach and drum before the fight support the argument well. Martin's speach I have a dream inspired people's requirement for equal and encouraged people to be brave to fight for it. Sun Zi,a great general in ancient China, said that druming encourage soldiers before the bettle. Arts effect us from antient to modern. Lu Xun, a famous Chinese writer, soldier and teacher, wrote lots of articles which recalled many people to protect Chinese civilization and uncorvered the deprive features of govonor of Qing dynasty.
Even though art could impact on indivituals' emotion, they are not always acting as possitive factors, somtimes they perform as obstercals in the progess of society. Arts always have the magic to attract one's attention and cost abundant time to appreciate them. Long novels are appropriate instances. Time flies when reading novels, as a result people may forget to do certain crucial things. These may be little problems, which vital influence is that gloom arts have the ability to make people sad and lose their belief even lose their hope to live. Lots of people suisided due to the song The Black Friday, the so-called the music of death,which made in the economic depression period with a hopeless tune. People who lost their jobs and have no access to keep live heard this music and felt that there was no hope in the future, as a result they ended their lives.
To conclusion, indivituals perform their inside words by arts, which reveal the hidden sides of people. What's more arts have an possitive effect on the improvement of society to some extent, yet not for all arts.

karen_06UID: 2728072

To begin with, creating arts is a popular way to reflect indivitual's hidden ideas. People(People) express themselves by many ways. They would lough, cry, even keep slience, but this motion will last and keep by arts such as painting, music, literature and so forth. A piece of picture can reflect the drawer's emotion whether anger or happy.  For example, the famous painting, the self-portrait of Van Gough（Gogh） in which the main objection is a turkey, showed the painters(painter’s) life target and his  strong spirit. From the picture, we learn more about the men who we have not meet(met) before and see(还可以考虑一下用percept) the hidden ideas in his mind. Van Gough's picture is just a(an) example, (and) various of arts discovery the ideas under the word, from which we have access to know the word better.（建议楼主再举个别的绘画例子哦，梵高肖像画也许能反映他的内心情感，我还是觉得肖像画以外的作品更能寓情于景。还有音乐了、文学了、诗词了，不妨考虑下）

Furthermore, the arts have the power to influence indivituals.Common sense tells me that it is important for soldiers to have a  steady belief which the arts offer this.The general's speach and drum before the fight support the argument well. Martin's speach I have a dream inspired people's requirement for equal and encouraged people to be brave to fight for it. Sun Zi, a great general in ancient China, said that druming encourage soldiers before the bettle. Arts effect us from antient to modern. Lu Xun, a famous Chinese writer, soldier and teacher, wrote lots of articles which recalled many people to protect Chinese civilization and uncorvered the deprive features of govonor of Qing dynasty.(战鼓是一种艺术？楼主不妨再解释一下，如战鼓的音乐感节奏感给冲锋的战士带来一种振奋激扬的精神和饱满的热情。不妨再举一些纯粹音乐，影响了一些人或一代人的思想、言行等。建议本段列出一些标志词语，会显得层次清楚。如添加“拿音乐和文学来说”。因为艺术有多种，乍一看不知道你要说哪一类。)

Even though art could impact on indivituals' emotion, they are not always acting as possitive（positive） factors, somtimes they perform as obstercals in the progess of society. Arts always have the magic to attract one's attention and cost abundant time to appreciate them. Long novels are appropriate instances. Time flies when reading novels, as a result people may forget to do certain crucial things. These may be little problems, which（which 从句在此不合适，建议用while the连接两句子）
vital influence is that gloom arts have the ability to make people sad and lose their belief even lose their hope to live. Lots of people suisided due to the song The Black Friday, the so-called the music of death, which (was) made(composed) in the economic depression period with a hopeless tune. People who lost their jobs and have(had) no access to keep live heard this music and felt that there was no hope in the future, as a result they ended their lives. (我觉得这些负面作用的出现几率很少呵，可以先列举些影响社会的正面例子，然后一转折，列出这几个负面例子。这样本文观点会全面些，篇幅也上去了哈)

To conclusion, indivituals perform their inside words by arts (express inner thoughts by arts?), which reveal the hidden sides of people. What's more arts have an (a) possitive effect on the improvement of society to some extent, yet not for all arts.(感觉结尾还未说完，没有指出哪些艺术会影响社会，哪些不可以)
首先抱歉现在才改，我这几天总脱不出身。我觉得本篇写得仓促了些，楼主看看我改的是否合适？还有，建议词语和句子再稍微那个正式些？

binrongerUID: 2747524

2# karen_06

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