10天倒计时~急需定位

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

就剩10天了~2月10号的AW~
刚刚把argu题库过完，issue正在列提纲，我本来预计是列前50的，估计没什么戏了~前30够么？
昨天第一次模考，带着键盘声的，发现对我没什么干扰，紧张的根本就听不见了。。。。。。
今天到现在什么也没看呢，打算下午列10道提纲~如果可能的话。
我真的急切的想知道我现在的水平，应该怎么提高，好慌张啊现在~
不怕拍，拍的越狠越好~我需要清楚自己的位置！

TOPIC: ISSUE131 - "The arts (painting, music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."
WORDS: 630
TIME: 00:10:00
DATE: 2010-1-29 10:00:10

I strongly agree with the speaker's claim that the arts reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society. Without the arts reflect distinct opinion from different artists by different measures, public people cannot improve their personal thought. Without the arts point out some new notions and impulses, our society cannot be developed and improved.

To begin with, we should focus on the original purpose of the arts. Common sense informs me that there exists a plethora of people, but why only a little of them could become artists and create such arts? Before answer this complex question about artists, let's turn to other common people. Undoubtedly, the equal characteristic of them is that they are drunk with their common and daily life. They may go to work every day, watch television after work and travel during vacation. They feel happy and almost have nothing unpleasant or advanced. On the country, someone is distinct from common people. They may feel dissatisfied with their living circumstance or have new or developed idea about something. So they desire to extend their opinion to the public no matter through which avenues, such as drawing, singing or writing. Thus, artists appeared and those paintings, music and literatures become arts. Thus, the premise of the arts is somebody's personal opinion different from the common idea or even belief of a society.

Therefore, obviously, the arts could reveal the otherwise hidden ideas of a society, in particular people's remonstrance about something or phenomena in their society. For instance, RAP prevails all over the world in this century. However, the true purpose of this kind of music by Africa-American is protest the discrimination from white American. The means of LRG could exactly reflect their strongly unpleasant about this unreasonable discrimination--life and research underground. With this music more and more popular sweeping the whole world, this discrimination more and more slight. Without this art, most people barely notice this hidden problem in the society and may also think Africa-American is inferior by nature than other people.

On the other hand, the arts also reveal the impulses of a society and conduct people to struggle forward that destination. For instance, many painters and writers imagine a marvelous condition that we could fly in the sky someday, and then draw or write this ideal in their arts in last century. Then, many scientists pursue this research and finally invent plane to make this sweet dream come true. Thus, the arts not only could reveal some hidden problems, but can also bring some novel ideas to better our society.

However, other arguers may retort me that much more arts are just followed the path of other people and have no advanced ideas, let alone benefit to ours or even impulse of a society. While it would be tempting to concede that in this exchanged information time, many new paintings, music and literatures appear everyday. However, those so-called arts could really be regarded as true arts are questionable. The definition of arts is something could leave a lasting value for our society. Unfortunately, those paintings, music and literatures appear and disappear too quick to leave any meaning value to our society besides take huge revenues to some people. For that reason, those so-called popular arts actually cannot be reputed as real arts at all. The true arts could bring lasting value for the society, especially reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society.

In conclusion, I believe that the true arts would have some lasting value for our society. On the other hand, the so-called arts, especially pop culture, cannot be regarded as real arts if they finally remain nothing. Furthermore, the lasting value of the real arts is usually the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society.


TOPIC: ARGUMENT37 - Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been unique to the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could only have crossed it by boat, but there is no evidence that the Paleans had boats. And boats capable of carrying groups of people and cargo were not developed until thousands of years after the Palean people disappeared. Moreover, Paleans would have had no need to cross the river-the woods around Palea are full of nuts, berries, and small game. It follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not unique to Palea.
WORDS: 467
TIME: 00:30:00
DATE: 2010-1-29 10:46:08

This argument concludes that the so-called Palean baskets were not unique to Palea but Lithos also has. To support this conclusion, the author cites that the Brim River which bridge Palea and Lithos is very deep and broad, and ancient Paleans could only have crossed it by boat, but there is no evidence that they had boats. Also, to strengthen this argument, the author cites Paleans would have had no need to cross the river because they had affluent food such as nuts, berries and small game. However, this argument suffers a series of logical problems and critical flaws, and is therefore wholly unpersuasive.

To begin with, the author simply assumes that the Brim River is also very deep and broad in their time, but cites no further support. It is possible, for instance, that the river is low and narrow in prehistory, so that ancient people can cross the river just by foot. It is also possible that there is even no river between the two ancient villages, the river formed just recently. Thus, they could easily cross between the two villages with no difficult. Thus, how can the author hastily conclude that the baskets which archaeologists discovered in Lithos are not brought from Palean?

Moreover, even though the Brim River is really deep and broad in prehistory and they have no boats to cross the river. But it is does not mean that the clever ancient people cannot discover other avenues to cross the river. For example, they may build a raft to cross the river. Perhaps, in the winter, when the water is freeze, they could cross the river easily. It is also perhaps that the water in the river is drought when in the summer. Thus, no matter under which condition, people in Palea and Lithos could cross the river to each village.

Finally, the author's claim that Paleans would have had no need to cross the river for the reason that they had enough food is also problematic and somewhat ridiculous. The arguer arbitrarily assumes that the object of cross the river and go to the other village is only obtained food, but it is wholly unreasonable. That is similar to our contemporary that we travel all over the world not only for the reason that extend our vision, but also desire to learn others culture and knowledge. Thus, how can the arguer simply assume our ancient people won't go to the other village for that reason? Thus, we cannot simply conclude that the Palean baskets were not unique to Palea because the basket appeared in Lithos may exactly be brought from Paleans.

In conclusion, the argument cannot be taken seriously as it stands. To better evaluate the argument, the author would need to reaffirm the river is really deep and broad in prehistory and the ancient people actually cannot cross the river no matter by which measure. Moreover, they virtually have no desire to cross the river and indeed not cross the river.

irvine666UID: 2575525

TIME: 00:10:00?
我想知道的是你这个文章是限时写的么？

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

2# irvine666
应该算是吧~不过issue没写完~交卷的时候500多字
而且，argu的时候看了两眼模板，紧张的忘了。。。。。。
帮忙顶个位吧~谢啦：）

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

顶起来顶起来~~~~~

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

2# irvine666
万分感谢！还加分了~哈哈~好开心啊~最近写提纲写的巨郁闷~已经改用中文了~
本来昨天都绝望了，但是看完Obama的国情咨文顿时欢欣鼓舞~哈哈~果然很能扯~怪不得能混成总统了呢~

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

刚才看了一个牛牛的美文，至少我是这么认为的，自惭兴愧啊~我比人家还早一天呢~咋办啊~

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

issue提纲列的我要疯了~来这儿发泄一下~哈哈~

Jamin_CheungUID: 2752925

我也很想知道题库到底要熟练到什么程度……
都还没怎么好好看过。
感觉好烦呀！

Jamin_CheungUID: 2752925

今天累了，明天一定帮楼主看看哦

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

9# Jamin_Cheung
感动~太感谢啦~
你啥时考？
我也想知道提纲的问题呢~
感觉特别烦躁~看着时间就这么一点点过去~
可是自己还什么都不成呢~
大家一起努力吧~

irvine666UID: 2575525

考前10天，其实能够改动的地方也不多了，看得出来你英文基本功不错，我读完一遍基本没什么理解障碍，这是很难得的。
我就给你说一下逻辑问题和应当改进的地方：
1.第二段里面既然你主要讲的是艺术的来源，那么艺术的起源和你后面的看电视，我觉得是没什么联系的。
2.艺术的来源并不只是人无聊而生的小休闲活动，更多的应该是人企图将自己的内心世界让他人理解的手段，不管是开心的，伤心的，愤怒的或者无奈的情绪。你可以理解为是抽象的思维物质化。所以我觉得你的第二段需要一些改写

3.然后说推动社会的功能，这个作用你的论述过于单薄，艺术推动社会的最大动力，其实是两个：1个是通过各种手段引发他人与作者的共鸣，这样艺术家的思想就能影响到社会的某一部分。2是艺术告诉了人们美的涵义，在精神层面净化社会。我觉得可以把这一段当成重点来写

4然后你说到一些粗制滥造的艺术，其实这是不必要的，这一段反而弱化了你的主题，让读者无法掌握你的思想到底是批判艺术的阴暗面，还是论述题目的主题，我认为这一段可以砍掉，换成5：
5我个人的建议是你可以直接写艺术是沟通艺术家和大众的桥梁，它不仅将艺术家自身的思想化为永恒的存在，而且让这种永恒为世人所知。艺术与思想相辅相成，造福千秋万代。 这样你才能真正的把主题升华到一个高度，而且才能让读者准确把握你的观点。

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

11# irvine666
谢谢肯定~哈哈~
不过你说的这些问题好深奥啊~我觉得不是我能力范围内能思考到的~
而且就算我想到，如果不能说清楚，会不会反而弄巧成拙？
然后那个反面的问题，我记得看过一个帖子说一定要辩证全面的看问题~
所以我就想出一个反面观点，不过最后后还是驳斥了，主题还是真正的arts是会促进社会的~
电视那个例子，我也是想说，这些是不可能产生arts的，也算个反例吧~

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

今天很不爽~模考的感觉超级不好~issue才写了433个字，没写完
argument倒是写了476个，比issue还多，可是思维有些混乱~可能是因为之前的issue没写好吧~
我的issue啊~咋办啊~

Jamin_CheungUID: 2752925

我12号也要考啦，偶们是难兄难弟啦。
最后再抱抱佛脚了只好，
嗯嗯，加油！

I strongly agree with the speaker's claim that the arts reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society. Without the arts reflecting distinct opinions from different artists by different measures(这半句话显得太累赘，太绕了), public people（the public就行了吧） cannot improve their personal thought. Without the arts point out some new notions and impulses, our society cannot be developed and improved.

To begin with, we should focus on the original purpose of the arts. Common sense informs me that there exists a plethora of people, but why only a little of them could become artists and create such arts? Before answering this complex question about artists, let's turn to other common people. 我觉得这里最好再压缩得紧凑一些Undoubtedly, the equal characteristic of them is that they are drunk with their common and daily life. They may go to work every day, watch television after work and travel during vacation. They feel happy and almost have nothing unpleasant or advanced. On the country, someone is distinct from common people. They may feel dissatisfied with their living circumstance or haveing new or developed idea about something. So they desire to extend their opinions to the public no matter through which avenues, such as drawing, singing or writing. Thus, artists appeared and those paintings, music and literatures become arts. Thus, the premise of the arts is somebody's personal opinion different from the common idea or even belief of a society.

这一段论证用艺术的起源说明其意义，可以把普通人的状态描述得更简洁一些，重点讲艺术家的产生以及其带来的影响。最后总结一下，比如说，因此艺术是社会思想升华产物之类的，呼应一下主题。

Therefore,这里怎么说因此呢，和上段没有直接的必然关系呀 obviously, the arts could reveal the otherwise hidden ideas of a society, in particular people's remonstrance about something or phenomena in their society. For instance, RAP prevails all over the world in this century. However, the true purpose of this kind of music by Africa-American is to protest the discrimination from white American. The means of LRG could exactly reflect their strongly unpleasant about this unreasonable discrimination--life and research underground. With this music more and more popular sweeping the whole world, this discrimination more and more slight. Without this art, most people barely notice this hidden problem in the society and may also think Africa-American is inferior by nature than other people.
这段写得很流畅，除了开头都挺好的。

On the other hand, the arts also reveal the impulses of a society and conduct people to struggle forward that destination. For instance, many painters and writers imagine a marvelous condition that we could fly in the sky someday, and then draw or write this ideal in their arts in last century. Then, many scientists pursue this research and finally invent plane to make this sweet dream come true. Thus, the arts not only could reveal some hidden problems, but can also bring some novel ideas to better our society.
写得有些单薄，可以举几个类似的平行例子呀。这段挺值得深深挖掘滴

However, other arguers may retort me that much more arts are just followed the path of other people and have no advanced ideas, let alone benefit to ours or even impulse of a society. While it would be tempting to concede that in this exchanged information time, many new paintings, music and literatures appear everyday. However, those so-called arts could really be regarded as true arts are questionable. The definition of arts is something could leave a lasting value for our society. Unfortunately, those paintings, music and literatures appear and disappear too quick to leave any meaning value to our society besides take huge revenues to some people. For that reason, those so-called popular arts actually cannot be reputed as real arts at all. The true arts could bring lasting value for the society, especially reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society.
可有可无的鸡肋吧，不用写这么多。

In conclusion, I believe that the true arts would have some lasting value for our society. On the other hand, the so-called arts, especially pop culture, cannot be regarded as real arts if they finally remain nothing. Furthermore, the lasting value of the real arts is usually the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society.


TOPIC: ARGUMENT37 - Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been unique to the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could only have crossed it by boat, but there is no evidence that the Paleans had boats. And boats capable of carrying groups of people and cargo were not developed until thousands of years after the Palean people disappeared. Moreover, Paleans would have had no need to cross the river-the woods around Palea are full of nuts, berries, and small game. It follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not unique to Palea.
WORDS: 467
TIME: 00:30:00
DATE: 2010-1-29 10:46:08

This argument concludes that the so-called Palean baskets were not unique to Palea but Lithos also has. To support this conclusion, the author cites that the Brim River which bridges Palea and Lithos is very deep and broad, and ancient Paleans could only have crossed it by boat, but there is no evidence that they had boats. Also, to strengthen this argument, the author cites Paleans would have had no need to cross the river because they had affluent food such as nuts, berries and small game. However, this argument suffers a series of logical problems and critical flaws, and is therefore wholly unpersuasive.

To begin with, the author simply assumes that the Brim River is also very deep and broad in their time, but cites no further support this. It is possible, for instance, that the river is low and narrow in prehistory, so that ancient people can cross the river just by foot. It is also possible that there is even no river between the two ancient villages, the river formed just recently. Thus, they could easily cross between the two villages with no difficult. Thus, how can the author hastily conclude that the baskets which archaeologists discovered in Lithos are not brought from Palean?

Moreover, even though the Brim River is really deep and broad in prehistory and they have no boats to cross the river. But it is does not mean that the clever ancient people cannot discover other avenues to cross the river. For example, they may build a raft to cross the river. 而且没有evidence，不能说明就没有船，对吧。Perhaps, in the winter, when the water is freeze, they could cross the river easily. It is also perhaps that the water in the river is drought when in the summer. Thus, no matter under which condition, people in Palea and Lithos could cross the river to each village.
这一段后面和上一段一样都是在反驳河不能成为无法连接的可能性，我处理的话会放到上面一段去。

Finally, the author's claim that Paleans would have had no need to cross the river for the reason that they had enough food is also problematic and somewhat ridiculous. The arguer arbitrarily assumes that the object of cross the river and go to the other village is only to obtained food, but it is wholly unreasonable. That is similar to our contemporary that we travel all over the world not only for the reason that extend our vision, but also desire to learn others culture and knowledge. Thus, how can the arguer simply assume our ancient people won't go to the other village for that reason? Thus, we cannot simply conclude that the Palean baskets were not unique to Palea because the basket appeared in Lithos may exactly be brought from Paleans.

In conclusion, the argument cannot be taken seriously as it stands. To better evaluate the argument, the author would need to reaffirm the river is really deep and broad in prehistory and the ancient people actually cannot cross the river no matter by which measure. Moreover, they virtually have no desire to cross the river and indeed not cross the river.
Argu的问题不大，不过在讲史前的历史，注意一下时态啦。

10# xiemeng2370

xiemeng2370UID: 2749773

14# Jamin_Cheung
哎~issue我总是抓不住重点，只能是想到什么说什么~
不过这个问题对我现在来说你都不能算问题了，写不完才是大问题啊~
模考了3次了~没一次写完了的，好点的能上500，大部分就是400多字，连argu的字数都没到
这可如何是好啊~彻底慌了现在~