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tomatooUID: 2754865

1.30 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money on improving public transportation than on improving accessing internet.
Since the Chinese population experiences sustainable and rapid growth, it is eager to ameliorate the mass transit condition. On the other hand, on no account can we fall behind other countries in the field of high technology such as the internet. It seems so arduous to decide what to leave out and what to leave in, actually it is not. The public traffic investment from governments must come first based on the following causes.

To begin with, the public conveyance is more crucial to people’s daily life comparatively. Because according to Maslow’s hierachy of needs thoery, to pursue the success in high technology such as the internet is the higher level need. We must meet the lower level need first. As we know, so many Chinese have no private transpot that they have no choice to depend on the public ones. As the common people, who must go out to earn their living, they need to commute between home and office. As the ordinary salaried persons, who must keep down the cost of living, they need to choose the cheapest vehicle such as the buses, the subway,etc.. So the mass transit situation is closely related to the general public’s daily life. But the public transpot system is insufficient to supply the demand under the circumstance of the excessive population growth. The traffic jam is potluck; the traffic accidents are also frequent; and so on. So a need for support from the administration is really more desperate.

Another worth mentioning is that it is much better to advocate individuals to get their personal computers than private cars. If people can get personal computers to improve the accessing internet by themselves, the government can spend more money insupporting the public transpot. Because encouraging people to get their own computers can definitely help people advance on going internet, while encouraging people to get their own vehicles will bring more serious traffic problems. More cars not only lead heavier traffic, but also contribute to the polluted air by giving off harmful gas. This is the very problem because we can wait if we can not go internet nowadays, but we will be never able to enjoy the fresh and healthy air. So give the financial support to the mass transpot as many as possible.


In conclusion, government choosing to pay more attention to the public transit is more advisable which means the country spend more money on the public transport is a better usage rather than on accessing internet.

lxg198607UID: 2564115

Since the Chinese population experiences sustainable(这个词是否可以用在人口增长上我持保留意见，大多都是形容经济) and rapid growth, it is eager to ameliorate the mass transit condition. On the other hand, on no account can we fall behind other countries in the field of high technology such as the internet. It seems so arduous to decide what to leave out and what to leave in, actually it is not. The public traffic investment from governments must come first based on the following causes.

To begin with, the public conveyance is more crucial to people’s daily life comparatively. Because according to Maslow’s hierachy of needs thoery, to pursue the success in high technology such as the internet is the higher level need. We must meet the lower level need first.（这个Example不错） As we know, so many Chinese have no private transpot that they have no choice（感觉可以去掉） to depend on the public ones. As the common people, who must go out to earn their living, they need to commute between home and office. As the ordinary salaried persons, who must keep down the cost of living, they need to choose the cheapest vehicle such as the buses, the subway,etc.. So the mass transit situation is closely related to the general public’s daily life. But the public transpot system is insufficient to supply the demand under the circumstance of the excessive population growth. The traffic jam is potluck; the traffic accidents are also frequent; and so on. So a need for support from the administration is really more desperate.' B4 H# I. o8 [. O; ?; ~0 |

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Another worth mentioning is that it is much better to advocate individuals to get their personal computers than private cars. If people can get personal computers to improve the accessing internet by themselves, the government can spend more money insupporting the public transpot. Because encouraging people to get their own computers can definitely help people advance on going internet, while encouraging people to get their own vehicles will bring more serious traffic problems. More cars not only lead heavier traffic, but also contribute to the polluted air by giving off harmful gas. This is the very problem because we can wait if we can not go internet nowadays, but we will be never able to enjoy the fresh and healthy air. So give the financial support to the mass transpot as many as possible.

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pay more attention to the public transit is more advisable which means the country spend more money on the public transport is a better usage rather than on accessing internet.
Excellent job... but there is something i want to point out is your third paragraph seems not to closely related to your ideas. It is more like a solution to this problem but not a support of your main idea.

皇甫秋荻UID: 2638790

Since the Chinese population experiences sustainable and rapid growth, it is eager to ameliorate the mass transit condition. On the other hand, on no account can we fall behind other countries in the field of high technology such as the internet. It seems so arduous to decide what （which） to leave out and what （which）
to leave in, （while） actually it is not. The public traffic investment from governments must come first based on the following causes.

To begin with, the public conveyance is more crucial to people’s daily life comparatively .Because according to Maslow’s hierarchy of needs
thoery （theory）, to pursue the success in high technology such as the internet is the higher level need. We must meet the lower level need first. As we know, so many Chinese have no private transpot
（transport）that they have no choice to depend on the public ones. As the common people, who must go out to earn their living, they need to commute between home and office. As the ordinary salaried persons, who must keep down the cost of living, they need to choose the cheapest vehicle such as the buses, the subway,etc.. So the mass transit situation is closely related to the general public’s daily life. But the public transpot （transport） system is insufficient to supply the demand under the circumstance of the excessive population growth. The traffic jam is potluck; the traffic accidents are also frequent; and so on. So a need for support from the administration is really more desperate.

Another worth mentioning is that it is much better to advocate individuals to get their personal computers than private cars. If people can get personal computers to improve the accessing internet by themselves, the government can spend more money （on）insupporting the public transpot （transport）. Because encouraging people to get their own computers can definitely help people advance on going internet, while encouraging people to get their own vehicles will bring more serious traffic problems. More cars not only lead heavier traffic, but also contribute to the polluted air by giving off harmful gas. This is the very problem because we can wait if we can not go internet nowadays, but we will be never able to enjoy the fresh and healthy air. So give the financial support to the mass transpot as many as possible.

In conclusion, government choosing to pay more attention to the public transit is more advisable which means the country spend more money on the public transport is a better usage rather than on accessing internet.（此句读不通，In conclusion, choosing to pay more attention to the public transit is more advisable which means
spending more money on the public transport is a better usage rather than on accessing internet.）


总结：tomatoo的同义转换用的非常的棒！是本文的亮点。
      但是，有些句子的表达过于复杂，导致一套句子出现多个谓语的情况（咱俩正好相反，我是写的过于简单。哎。共勉！！！）
      tomatoo还要细心，不要再犯单词拼写的错误哈~~~
      加油~！