【clover】第二次作业Argument2——Julymay

JulymayUID: 2645085

2.The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.
"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting."
房价的涨落问题：相关因素  市场、营销策略、房子本身的质量（地段，）
1、
Brookville 制订了花园和外墙颜色的方案（房价上涨的原因是不是因为这个不得而知）
2、
他们的地产均价涨了3倍（上涨是否意味着此方案对房价有促进，没有论证。既然是均价上涨，就不能保证所有的都上涨，甚至有可能是跌，既然这样何以说服业主。除非给出全面详实的统计数据证明房子全部都涨价。）
3、
我们也应该制订花园和外墙方案目的是使地产升值（即便以上条件全部成立，方案本身的优劣也有可能导致地产升值的破灭。除非能给出合理有远见方案来保证整改的质量，否则轻易接纳其建议仍然过于冲动）


In order to raise the property prices of Deerhaven Acers, the author of this letter advises to change the landscape and the housepainting. Because the values of nearby community have tripled which had already carried out the restrictions on landscaping and housepainting. This advice seems to be reasonable at first sight. However, it is not difficult to find a series of logical mistakes through the inferences.


First of all, the reasons that cause the raise of price may not be the landscape and the exteriors’ color. As is known to all, the factors that affect the price are varied such as the supply demand relationship, the location of the house, the environments of the community and so on.
The price will be defined after taking all those factors above into account. In other words, the color of the house and the style of the landscape just play a not very important role in controlling the price. That is to say, the statistical prices, even have raised, there are no proofs can certify it can be owned to the landscape and the color.
Moreover, the author does not provide any evidences that can prove the market prefers the landscape and the colors of the nearby community. That is to say, whether the effects of the restrictions are positive remains to be seen. Ironically, the author recommends, at the condition of lacking evidences, the property owners to follow the example of the nearby community blindly.

Secondly, even assuming the improvement of the values is related to the restrictions, the feasibility of the recommendation still remains to see.
The average of the price raised does not mean all the values raised. It is even possible that some of the properties have depreciated.
And the author offers neither the evidences that can prove all the properties can increase in value, nor the data to explain the economic conditions of all types of

houses. We cannot but doubt the practicability of this advice.

Thirdly, even the problems I mentioned above can be amended, the quality of the restrictions which the author advises to be set is still uncertain. The quality of the restrictions is the decisive factor of the project. The author, however, does not say any word about the measures that can guarantee the quality. Before the author can give some rational and longheaded plans to guarantee the quality of the process, it is sensible to take action about this program.



In sum, unless the author can set lights on the relationship between the price and the landscapes and the colors, and provide some data to analyze the economic conditions of all types of houses, and then make a rational and longheaded plans to guarantee the feasible, can we accept the recommendation the author advised in this letter.

misirUID: 2684938

In order to raise the property prices of Deerhaven Acers, the author of this letter advises to change the landscape and the housepainting. Because the values of nearby community have tripled[, after ]which had already carried out the restrictions on landscaping and housepainting. This advice seems to be reasonable at first sight. However, it is not difficult to find a series of logical mistakes through the inferences.

First of all, the reasons that cause the raise of price may not be the landscape and the exteriors’ color. As is known to all, the factors that affect the price are varied such as the supply demand relationship, the location of the house, [and] the environments of the community and so on.
The price will be defined after taking all those factors above into account. In other words, the color of the house and the style of the landscape just play a not[不知not是否要提到前面去。。。因为这样的顺序好像不太通顺。。。] very important role in controlling the price. That is to say, the statistical prices, even have raised, there are no proofs [总觉得这里缺了that]can certify it can be owned to the landscape and the color. Moreover, the author does not provide any evidences that can prove the market prefers the landscape and the colors of the nearby community. That is to say, whether the effects of the restrictions are positive remains to be seen. Ironically, the author recommends, at the condition of lacking evidences, the property owners to follow the example of the nearby community blindly.
Secondly, even assuming the improvement of the values is related to the restrictions, the feasibility可行性of the recommendation still remains
to see[to be seen?]. The average of the price raised does not mean all the values raised. It is even possible that some of the properties have depreciated. And the author offers neither the evidences that can[改成to吧，与后文对应] prove all the properties can increase in value, nor the data to explain the economic conditions of all types of houses. We cannot but doubt the practicability of this advice.
Thirdly,
even the problems I mentioned above can be amended, the quality of the restrictions which the author advises to be set is still uncertain. The quality of the restrictions is the decisive factor of the project. The author, however, does not say any word about the measures that can guarantee the quality. Before the author can give some rational and longheaded plans to guarantee the quality of the process, it is sensible to take action about this program.

In sum, unless the author can set lights on the relationship between the price and the landscapes and the colors, and provide some data to analyze the economic conditions of all types of houses, and then make a rational and longheaded plans to guarantee the
feasible[feasibility?], can we accept the recommendation the author advised in this letter.
我觉得文章还是不错滴，结构鲜明，攻击有序~有些小错误改下就可以了。。。
By Misir
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看附件吧~我懒得排版了。。。

JulymayUID: 2645085

第一次修改完毕~~~



In order to raise the property prices of Deerhaven Acers, the author of this letter advises to change the landscape and the housepainting. Because the values of nearby community have tripled, after the community had already carried out the restrictions on landscaping and housepainting. This advice seems to be reasonable at first sight. However, it is not difficult to find a series of logical mistakes through the inferences.



First of all, the reasons that cause the raise of price may not be the landscape and the exteriors’ color. As is known to all, the factors that affect the price are varied such as the supply demand relationship, the location of the house, the environments of the community and so on. The price will be defined after taking all those factors above into account. In other words, the color of the house and the style of the landscape just play an unimportant role in controlling the price. That is to say, the statistical prices, even have raised, there are no proofs that can certify it can be owned to the landscape and the color. Moreover, the author does not provide any evidences that can prove the market prefers the landscape and the colors of the nearby community. That is to say, whether the effects of the restrictions are positive remains to be seen. Ironically, the author recommends, at the condition of lacking evidences, the property owners to follow the example of the nearby community blindly.

Secondly, even assuming the improvement of the values is related to the restrictions, the feasibility可行性of the recommendation still remains to be seen. The average of the price raised does not mean all the values raised. It is even possible that some of the properties have depreciated. And the author offers neither the evidences to prove that all the properties can increase in value, nor the data to explain the economic conditions of all types of houses. We cannot but doubt the practicability of this advice.
Thirdly, even the problems I mentioned above can be amended, the quality of the restrictions which the author advises to be set is still uncertain. The quality of the restrictions is the decisive factor of the project. The author, however, does not say any word about the measures that can guarantee the quality. Before the author can give some rational and longheaded plans to guarantee the quality of the process, it is sensible to take action about this program.


In sum, unless the author can set lights on the relationship between the price and the landscapes and the colors, and provide some data to analyze the economic conditions of all types of houses, and then make a rational and longheaded plans to guarantee the feasib1lity, can we accept the recommendation the author advised in this letter.


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我不知道这是怎么了，为什么有黄黄的一块~而且我想把字体弄大，怎么都不成功~555……

黑竹UID: 2753377

第一次修改完毕~~~



In order to raise the property prices of(in) Deerhaven Acers, the author of this letter advises to change the landscape and the housepainting. Because the values of nearby community have tripled, after the community had already carried out the restrictions on landscaping and housepainting. This advice seems to be reasonable at first sight. However, it is not difficult to find a series of logical mistakes through the inferences.



First of all, the reasons that cause the raise of price may not be the landscape and the exteriors’ color. As is known to all, the factors that affect the price are varied such as the supply demand relationship, the location of the house, the environments of the community and so on. The price will be defined after taking all those factors above into account. In other words, the color of the house and the style of the landscape just play an unimportant role in controlling(determining) the price. That is to say, the statistical prices, even have raised, there are no proofs that can certify it can be owned(owe，不用被动语态，这个词可以直接主动语态，主语是物) to the landscape and the color. Moreover, the author does not provide any evidences that can prove the market prefers the landscape and the colors of the nearby community. That is to say, whether the effects of the restrictions are positive remains to be seen. Ironically, the author recommends, at the condition of lacking evidences, the property owners to follow the example of the nearby community blindly.

Secondly, even assuming the improvement（increase） of the values is related to the restrictions, the feasibility可行性of the recommendation still remains to be seen. The average of the price raised does not mean all the values raised. It is even possible that some of the properties have depreciated（depreciate这是一个会计学术语，意思是资产的折旧、损耗，用在这里不太准，用decreasing values）. And the author offers neither the evidences to prove that all the properties can increase in value, nor the data to explain the economic conditions of all types of houses. We cannot but doubt the practicability of this advice.
Thirdly, even the problems I mentioned above can be amended, the quality of the restrictions which the author advises to be set is still uncertain. The quality of the restrictions is the decisive factor of the project. The author, however, does not say any word about the measures that can guarantee the quality. Before the author can give some rational and longheaded plans to guarantee the quality of the process, it is sensible to take action about this program（这里我有点没读懂:L ）.


In sum, unless the author can set lights on the relationship between the price and the landscapes and the colors, and provide some data to analyze the economic conditions of all types of houses, and then make a rational and longheaded plans to guarantee the feasib1lity, can we accept the recommendation the author advised in this letter. （结尾很流畅，不错）